The Reasonable Reformation

After spending [REDACTED] amount of time in stone, Princess Twilight Sparkle was ready to begin the process of reaching out to Cozy Glow in the hopes of eventually convincing her to consider reformation. And what a process it ended up turning into.

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GamePlayer64 #1 · 1 week ago · 3 · 1 · Chapter 1 ·

"I'm here to give you another chance. A chance to take a different path, and learn what friendship is really about." Twilight explained.
"Well, you should've offered that to me earlier. Why didn't you?" Cozy asked. "You had me truly well and defeated. Why did you let Discord do that to me?"
"Because I knew it wasn't going to be for long! I'd never let anypony remain like that forever!" Twilight said.
"You sure! If that's the case, why didn't you interject!?"
"I was never planning on leaving you in stone for forever. Nor was I planning to leave you in Tartarus forever. That's not how I do things. I was always planning on coming back to you eventually." Twilight explained.
"Well, you could've told me that before you let them do that to me! I was scared to death! I thought I literally was going to stay that way forever. That my short life was over!" Cozy cried. "I was so terrified. I never would've thought that I would ever get turned to stone. I was truly shocked."
"Cozy! I-" Twilight said, but Cozy spoke up.
"You're cruel for letting them do that to me!" Cozy exclaimed. "You know, I miiight've considered reformation if you had said something earlier. But after the cupcake, forget it!"

No offense but I agree with Cozy. I mean what Discord and the Alicorn Sisters did to a child was too far and Twilight didn't show any care for a child shows how harmony makes anyone forget their morals.

"...No." Cozy said.
"No?" Twilight asked.
"You heard me, Twilight. Why should I? I have doubts about your intentions. If you truly cared about me, you would've done something on that very day, not wait a long time, and come in with all this trickery."

She has a point. If Twilight did care for Cozy, she would have done something on the day Cozy was turned to stone.

"Where are you going, Twilight?" Cozy asked.
"I'll be back later." Twilight replied. "While I'm gone, think about this. I decided to reach out to you. If I hadn't, you would've remained trapped in stone for a long long time. And if you think you can escape and try to make more friends than me, then consider that everypony saw you for who you are. Everypony's seen you as an out of control raging alicorn. Who's going to be friends with that?"
Twilight stretched out her wings, flapped them, and took flight, leaving Cozy all by herself.

Cozy: "WHAT ABOUT DISCORD?! DID YOU TOLD ALL CREATURES HOW HE PRETENDED TO BE THE FATHER OF MONSTERS?!"

"You worked really well with those two. Up until you didn't. Could we have won if we were better at working together?" Cozy wondered to herself. "We were outnumbered though. Is it a numbers game Or the quality of friends?"
"Were we going to go our separate ways once we succeeded, or were we gonna stick together? Was that our downfall?"

I think Cozy would see Tirek & Chrysalis as her parent figures.

"Well, you did come back and reach out to me. I don't think anypony else is gonna do that." Cozy said, under her breath.

Makes you wonder if Cozy Glow actually has parents or if she's an orphan?

"So, Cozy. Do you wanna talk about the School of Friendship?" Twilight asked.
"...Not really." Cozy replied, continuing to focus on her roasting.
"I see." Twilight replied.

I would have said "Did you threw away my stuff or had your students burn it?

"Well, since your actions were so... large, they can't be pushed aside without addressing them. So, when we get back to Ponyville, I want you to apologize to everypony who you did wrong by." Twilight said.
"Uh-huh. And why would I want to do any of that?" Cozy asked.
"Because, Cozy, I believe that showing signs of sincerity is the first step on your reformation path. Whether you feel sorry yet or not, I believe rebuilding a few bridges would do you some good." Twilight explained.

I don't know. I wonder how many creatures mock, vandalize, or deface Cozy Glow when she's was a statue?

Such a lucky filly to have the full attention of the Princess of Friendship. You would hope that she would recognize this and and listen to what she says, right? Well, let's just say, old habits die hard.

Actually, I imagine how many angry mobs will form before them join together as a massive mob?

I can't wait for the next chapter.

CelticAwakening

CelticAwakening #2 · 1 week ago · 4 · 2 · Chapter 1 ·

“Necessary measures”, bitch nothing about that was Necessary. All that was was Celestia, Luna, and Discord wanting to make the trio suffer. All the while you let discord go. The one who brought them together and was the reason they were able to cause so much destruction in the first place. I’m not saying they should of been let off the hook but petrifying a child is fucked up no matter if it wasn’t going to be forever. The fact you left Cozy in there at all is wrong. Why could you not just give her community service so she could help fix whatever damage she caused to Equestria. Her mind can’t handle that level of fear and trauma and you have the guts to say it was “Necessary”. Fuck You Twilight. Cozy has no reason at all to apologize to a bunch of Hypocrites why cheered and celebrated her petrification. Maybe if Twilight apologizes to Cozy first. Both for letting her get petrified and for finding joy in it. Then we could get somewhere. The fact she thinks they did nothing wrong to her pisses me off.

Wooden Wheel

Wooden Wheel #3 · 1 week ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

I was first on her list, you can probably guess as to why.

"Your "friend" Lord Tirek explained it to me. He explained that this area holds quite the significance to you.

This may be Cozy being an unreliable narrator, but for the second line to be true, Tirek was necessarily pulled from the stone before Cozy. If possible, I would like a little clarification on this.

Nor was I planning to leave you in Tartarus forever.

I have a question... Was Twilight ever made aware that Cozy had been imprisoned in Tartarus? The only thing I remember about it is that Celestia or Luna told her that they were going to put her somewhere safe (or something like that), but they never directly told her that it was Tartarus.

but I can't fully set you free you until I'm sure that you're fully reformed.

That second 'you' is unnecessary.

You want to help her, and she'll realize that soon enough and come around." Spike said.

This Spike is much more optimistic and positive than many others I've seen... I think I like him.

Cozy cleared her throat before speaking. "You really think so?" she asked, looking unsure

There is a missing period at the end of this line.

Ultimately, this story has gained my interest. If there is one observation and one recommendation that I can give you, this is it: Your writing is very rigid and simplistic when you describe how the characters express themselves. Try to make them more expressive by describing how they feel or how they are acting at the moment.

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5u0myn0n4 #4 · 1 week ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

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This may be Cozy being an unreliable narrator, but for the second line to be true, Tirek was necessarily pulled from the stone before Cozy. If possible, I would like a little clarification on this

This is a remnant of when I thought about having a chapter or two leading up to this section. Twilight unfreezes Tirek alone to try to gain an understanding of Cozy, but he is left in Tartarus. It’s still in continuity, but not shown.

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