“Why is there fog? I thought everypony knew that today was supposed to be overcast?” Came a disgruntled voice, it’s owner masked in the fog.
“I don’t know Dash. But can’t we just make it lighter? It shouldn’t be too hard to lift it up afterward.” Came a male voice, coming from the left of Rainbow Dash.
“That would work, except that this certain cloud has merged with all the other clouds, pulling them down as well. We’d need to split this one into about forty others, or more. I’m not sure how big this mess has gotten since I last looked. Give me a second, and I mean that literally.” Dash said, preparing to take off and get above the fog bank.
“Okay, Dash, but be careful. You of all ponies should know how dangerous fast flying can get in any view restricted environment.” Came a warning from Dash’s left again.
“Yeah, yeah, I know. Don’t worry about it. I mean, I’m the best flier I know, so it shouldn’t be a problem.” Came the arrogant reply. Dash then proceeded to take off, at top speed, of course.
The only sound after that in the cool, dark morning was a deep sigh.
//b0d\\
Dash sped along, spiraling upwards. She was out of the fog, and was trying to get an estimate on the size of the fog bank. She might be lazy sometimes, but weather business was something that she took pride in, and she did it right.
She stopped, and looked downwards on Ponyville. Well, at least she thought it was Ponyville. She couldn’t see any of it!
“Woah. Somepony seriously screwed up this time.” She said, slightly in awe of the size of this screw up. The fog had completely covered all of the town, including a good part of Sweet Apple Acres.
And that was a lot of clouds.This was the biggest mistake of the month so far. Or had somepony purposely done this?
Dash groaned, the pieces of the puzzle fitting together in her mind. Starting her descent back into town, she got lost in thought, thinking of some of the pranks she could play with Pinkie in the fog. The size of the low-flung cloud made it obviously clear to her that it wasn’t going anywhere soon. May as well enjoy it while she cou-.
Her thoughts were interrupted by something running into her face.
Well, maybe she ran into it, but that was open for debate. But the fact was that she had crashed into Twilight’s library. Again.
Getting to her hooves, she trotted to the door on the balcony, the one that led into Twilight’s bedroom. Maybe she could find some refuge from the fog inside. But then she would have to explain to Twilight why she kept running into the tree.
Getting out of the fog won out over the eventual embarrassment. Pushing open the door, she quickly shut the door to stop the fog from spilling in.
“Twi? You in here? Sorry about crashing in like this, but have you seen outside? Somepony seriously messed up with cloud making 101. If I had to stay outside in that whiteness, I just might go crazy.”
She was rambling. Time to stop.
“So, yeah, sorry. Can I crash here until later? That should give the cloud... time... to...”
She faltered. Twilight hadn’t shown up yet.
“Twilight? You here?”
No reply from Twilight, at least. But Dash did get a reply from Twilight’s assistant, who she had woken up with her talking.
“Rainbow Dash? What’s up? Why are you here at-” A pause as Spike checks the wall clock.
“-six o’clock? You know that no one’s up at that time. Shouldn’t you be sleeping?”
“Um, yeah, except today was my day to lead the weather crew. We had scheduled a slightly cloudy day today, but somepony made the clouds too heavy. We’re going to let the clouds simmer in the sun, to try to get rid of that excess weight. It should make the clouds hotter, and therefore, lighter!”
“Wow... you sure know a lot about clouds, don’t you?” Spike said after a minute.
“Yeah, I guess I sorta do. But probably not as much as Twilight knows. Of course, Twilight seems to know a lot more than I do.” Shut up Dash...
“Speaking of which, where is she? She’s not in her bed.”
That got Spike’s attention. Sitting up, he looks up at Twilight’s bed. Upon seeing that Twilight was indeed not in her bed, he leans back down into his.
“Sorry Dash, but I guess she’s downstairs. If she’s there, she’s either asleep from studying all night, or she’s already up and eating breakfast.” Spike said sleepily.
“Thanks Spike, see you later. You know, when you wake up?”
Dash was speaking to the living dead, as Spike had already fallen back asleep.
She silently laughed to herself as she turned and headed for the stairs.
Creeping down the stairs, she called out softly.
“Twilight? You down here?” She whispered, then quietly scolded herself. “Why am I being quiet? There’s nothing to be afraid of.”
She stopped. She was talking to herself. That was never a good sign. Shaking her head to try to clear it, she continued down the stairs and into the main level of the library.
Speaking again, this time at a normal volume, she called Twilight’s name again.
No answer.
“Twilight? You here?”
Nothing. Not a sound.
Dash strained her ears. She couldn’t even hear any breathing.
Still, better check. Dash did a quick look through the library, which only confirmed her suspicions.
Twilight wasn’t in the library.
Time to leave then. Rainbow Dash just felt awkward staying in her friends house without her friend there. Starting towards the door, she stopped suddenly, her hoof half off the ground. She couldn’t been seen leaving Twilight’s house at six in the morning! But she had to leave, to do something. She would go stir crazy staying in the library with no-one except a sleeping baby dragon.
Well, this disaster had an easy fix. Time to go upstairs and leave via the balcony she came in through. No problem, right? Walking back up the stairs, she observed her surroundings. Things had changed when Twilight came to Ponyville. She couldn’t quite place it, but something had changed within the town. It seemed more.... alive.
But with that, of course, came the problems that arose with one of the most magically inclined unicorns, and the personal student of Celestia herself. Lots of problems, more that you would think, but she had also fixed some of her mistakes, along with all of her friends mistakes. Hell, the town probably would be quarantined or something by now if it weren’t for her.
Thinking about it, she shook her head. Nah, she was just being overly dramatic.
Arriving upstairs, she was assaulted by the sound of Spike’s snoring. Glancing at him briefly, her eyes wandered the perfectly clean room. Twilight had to be one of the most OCD ponies she knew. Everything had to be in place. Heck, she had checklists for her checklists sometimes it seemed.
And with that said, Dash’s eyes were almost immediately drawn to the only mess in the room. Everything on the desk was messy. Sighing, she shook her head, slightly amused. Twilight must of have left in a hurry if she had left this mess behind. Probably expected Spike to clean it up later. Walking over to see if she could get a clue on where she had gone, she saw that she had been writing something.
But, the was an spill across some of the page, and the notes were messed up. The bottom had escaped, but nothing was written on it.
“What were you doing Twi, and why did you leave in the middle of it?” Dash said, playing detective for the moment.
Deciphering the words still legible on the page, Dash’s expression began to drop.
“No... They can’t be. Spike! Wake up now!” Dash said, starting out as a whisper, but turning into a full on yell at the end.
“Wa? Dash? Did you find Twilight?” Spike said, falling out of bed, startled at Dash’s loud yelling.
“No, and that’s not the worst of it. Read this.” Dash demanded, pushing the piece of parchment at him.
“Dash, what is this? It’s a piece of paper with an ink spill on it. What about it?” He said, giving the cyan mare a questioning glance.
“Read what’s left. She said, her eyes convincing Spike that this wasn’t one of her pranks.
“Okay? Changl- have- retu.” Spike said, pronouncing each word fragment with care.
“Fill in the blanks in your head.”
“Don’t know about the first one, but the last two sound like ‘have returned’. What’s the first word, and why does it have you so freaked out? Who's returned?"
“Changelings. Spike, I think she was trying to say changelings. We need to tell the Princess.”
Spike’s eyes had gone wide at Dash’s statement. Nodding quickly, he reached for a piece of paper, and wrote a quick note to the Princess.
Green light colored the fog outside the upper stories of the library that was also a tree.
//b0d\\
Celestia was was going through all the proposals that had arisen during her time at court. All those ponies requesting her permission to do this, asking for funding to do something else, or those just wanting a simple dispute settled. Those were the worst. Could they really not see the simple answer to their dispute? Or had the populace just become dependent on her, and now her sister again?
A puff of green smoke, almost out of her field of view, distracted her from the dull and boring requests. Turning to see a scroll falling out of the air, she caught it with a well practiced spell. Slitting the ribbon on it, she unfurled it, bringing it closer to her eyes to read it.
That was odd. It was from Spike. Not that Spike had never sent in a friendship report before, but he usually wasn’t up this early. She had just started to raise the sun, and it was still dawn.
Reading on, her face began to drop. Upon finishing the letter, she killed the telekinesis spell, and the scroll dropped to the floor near her feet, still open. Rising to her hooves, she went to the door and called through to the guards, her voice not betraying anything of her emotional turmoil.
“Guards, go to Shining Armor’s residence and wake him if necessary. Tell him to come to my quarters immediately. I need to talk to him about a matter that he care deeply about. Do it as quickly as possible. Send your fastest runner.” She said, her voice wavering at the end.
“Of course, Princess. Right away.” The guard currently on duty said.
Princess Celestia waited at the door until the hoofsteps faded from the corridor. Walking slowly back to her place near the fire, she slowly lowered herself, until she was sitting. Grabbing the scroll with her magic again, she reread the letter. Even though she knew what it said, it still hurt.
Dear Princess,
This is Spike.
Twilight’s been taken
By changelings. Please help.
Please. We don’t know what to do.
-Spike/Rainbow Dash.
It seemed too formal for a cry for help, but it didn’t stop the pain. Twilight. Gone. The Princess had always been afraid of this. Not of Twilight being taken by Changelings, but being taken. Being her personal student, that made her a target.
Her thoughts were interrupted by a knock on the door.
“Princess? I was told that I was to come as soon as possible. What’s wrong?” Shining’s voice came through the wood.
Princess Celestia raised her head and enveloped the door with her golden magic and opened them, ushering Shining Armor in with a nod of her head. The captain of the guards came and stood in front of Celestia, asking a question with his eyes.
“Shining. I don’t know how to tell you this, but-” Her throat seized up. Swallowing hard, she started again, before Shining Armor made up his own problem in his head.
“Your... sister has been taken. We don’t know where she is, but we do know who has her.”
Shining eyes had gone wide at the news.
“Who!? Who has Twilight? Princess, please, just tell me.” He said, frantic.
“The changelings have her. And we’re going to do everything in our power to get her back, unharmed.”
“She’d better be unharmed.” Shining growled, anger at the changelings who would dare take his sister growing.
“Shining, I would give up the crown to make sure she was safe. I promise you this. We will get her back.”
Shining Armor nodded, anger mixing with his grief. For the first time in a while, he was afraid.
Truly afraid for his sister.
//b0d\\
A/N-
Well, that's that with this chapter.
Special thanks to:
ProtheanBrony-Proof-Reader
EvilPresident-Pre-Reader
Something888-Pre-Reader
And of course, Chaos2012 for this idea.
Well okay then.
New chapter, same routine.
Read, Review, and critic.
Great chapter, can't wait for the transformation
Dude, you hit the feature box.
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Awesome chapter! I feel that you've got the characters reactions spot one, nothing really feels forced. Can't wait for the next chapter!
1668636
Shhh! No one needs to know... yet. >:)
1668667
My God! I would've completely missed that.
Screen shot!
1668680
Well, thanks! I try, but the guys really responsible for the end product are the PR's. This thing went though several different iterations before this.
Why do I get the feeling that this won't have a happy ending...?
you really need to update sooner, i love this story too much and stories on here hardly get updated anymore
1577984 Dear Celestia! Cuteness overload!
Mah-guh-ber-mamama-gwha-hamana
1668728
I have no idea.?
MOAR!!!!!
1668837
//b0d\\ is just my way of line breaking. Instead of
----------------, I have that. Sorry if it was confusing.
Glad you liked!
1668802
Gee... so Shining now cares?
1668856 Thanks
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................................................WOW I NEEEDDD MOAR
MOAR I Say!
1668889>>1668920
Can do!
1668919
I see what you did there(?)
1668956
D:
Moar please.... or else fluttershy will cry
I think you meant Vary.
The dialogue felt a little stiff and a tad... IDK... just off. Like not something someone would say. Like the gist of it's there but the words just... IDK... it felt off.
Also the whole message on the desk thing felt really convent. Not that Twi would be able to do that just how quickly the note was found. 6am, there's a problem with the weather, and Rainbow is looking through Twi's stuff? I'm not so sure she'd even really be interested in Twi's notes...
...Also why would Rainbow be worried about people seeing her leaving Twi's house at 6 in the morning? It's 6 in the morning... a ton of people anent going to be up... and even if they were... ummmm... there's all that fog remember? Fog that prevented Rainbow from seeing the library in the 1st place... which is how she crashed into it and then got inside. Dash's reasoning for going up to Twi's room to leave through her window just doesn't make sense to me...
1668795
Anyway, let's see where this goes, shall we?
ROYAL CANTERLOT VOICE: MOAR MOAR MOAR MOAR
.........welp. I'm out of chapters to read dang it! I shall follow in the foot/hoofsteps of the other commenters. Ahem..... FOR THE LOVE OF CELESTIA LUNA CADENCE AND CHRYSALIS! I DEMAND MOAR!!!!!!!!!
1668919. You really do hate shining, Myth.
By the way, good chapter. Keep it up
D: Me read all this fast (Was that good)
still hoping for something twisted with the changelings and twilight and all that
and btw. I love you for not making RD/spike retards who could not piece together a simple easy to read unfinished note
Lookin good! Keep this train movin!
1669135
Dammit. Fixed.
1669195
Oh, um. Well... I would just say that it's my writing style, but that would be an excuse. I would just say that it's Dash. Not that Dash isn't awesome, of course. But yeah, I'll work on it. Thanks for the feedback.
1670514>>1670834
Oh. Well. This is like the fifth time that people have demanded this. Must mean I'm doing something right. :D
1670898
Oh, thanks!
1671254
Soon... Perhaps. :P
1671764
Absolutely!
1673838 In the 1st chapter. In your 2nd //b0d// bit right before you reveal just what Twi was doing while as she resisted chapter.
And oh I totally understand! Oh and also about the Dash thing and finding Twi's letter... you really just need something to draw Dash towards the desk (maybe she's looking for something?) and then once she's there the note would be scene... but just having her walk over the night of Twi's capture feels really convent... it should be a simple fix, as is the whole Dash going down stairs and then upstairs... I don't think that should be too much of a trouble... but speaking of writing and editing... I prob should get onto my own story! Good luck!
1674383
I've fixed that "an" into "any". Thanks for that. I've also stuck your suggestions into a "for later folder". Thanks again!
1674428 You're more than welcome! I love a good story and FiMFiction is a great place to practice getting out good stories!
great chapter!
im looking forward to changeling twi, i wonder in what way she'll change, if she'll just be physically changed or mentally as well. i still hope for some kind of happy ending btw, twi doesn't really have to turn back into a pony for it to be happy though.
WHATS IN THE BOX!!!!!!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! fuck it....
1675980
What? What box?
Have you watched the ending of SEVEN?
1676150
No. But se7en sounds like a movie bungie would watch. :P
1676472
Spoiler alert: It was the severed head of the cop's pregnant wife.
1668728
The fact that Celestia is going to have to save Queen Chrysalis and the scant survivors of her Hive from a rampaging mutant Twilight? //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy_invert.png
After all, one does not snap the mind of the most powerful unicorn of their age, and expect her NOT to go Psycho Killer (qu'est que c'est?) all over their flank...
Shit just hit the fan.
1677729
Eh. That does sound right.
1678542
I sense spin-off when I'm bored. I hadn't thought of that, but it made me laugh. :P
1678726
D: Sounds gruesome.
1680012
Indeed.
1678726
Probably. Twilight is a smart gal. She'll probably act all obedient at first but when the Queen turns her back she'll will go all "Hey Paul!".
(Moustache for you if you get the reference)
1680012
Yes. Now, when is the next chapter going to come out?
Really good so far hope the next chapter comes out soon!!! /)(\
1680264
Nice. But no cigar. But I seriously like the idea of Twilight just snapping like that.
1680349>>1680474
I mentioned in this blog post that I was going to be updating every other Friday. This gives me and my Pre/proof readers plenty of time to get though the next chapter.
Thanks for the support!
1681793
So that's why keep thinking this fic is dead most of the time.
1681793
Didn't expect you to really have that planned, it was a joke if anything. I just came back from watching American Psycho and the idea just popped up in my mind.
Hm. Patrick Bateman in Equestria...
1681857
Trust me, I won't let this one die. I'll post a blog and put it on Hiatus if I have to have a break.
1681907
Ah, now it makes sense. But that idea is in my head, and it won't leave. D:
Will Queen Chrysalis change into Twilight Sparkle or Twilight Sparkle would be a changling?
1699973
Spoilers.
Sorry, on a Who streak. But seriously, you'll find out in due time.
1700354 Sorry I'm just confused
1710991
What about? the fic, or the Who reference?
I am dying for the next chapter! I love this story!
1719004
Thanks. I'll stick this in the re-write folder. The first chapter doesn't mesh with the rest, because I didn't think I'd get as into it as I have. Thanks again!