If Zap apples make such phenomenal jam, why aren’t they used for the Apple family’s other famed delicacy: cider? Apple Bloom wants to know, and dooms all of Ponyville into finding out.
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If Zap apples make such phenomenal jam, why aren’t they used for the Apple family’s other famed delicacy: cider? Apple Bloom wants to know, and dooms all of Ponyville into finding out.
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1st comment
What a sweet story. I could also see this happening in an episode! Have an upvote and a favorite!
Excellently paced and literally balanced across two timeline points. You have earned the like and the favorite for this story.
1: Any reason it stops so suddenly?
2: What exactly caused all the shattered glass? I must've missed something.
3: Found a few spelling mistakes.
Favorite Pony: Check
Coherent Story: Check
Original Idea: elusive check.
Up Thumb submitted.
"—uck, that's who bought that stupid cake!"
A good story with an interesting writing style. I don't think I would have liked the time skips if the story was any longer but for this one it was well done.
Hmm, destroyed all the glass in town... What have you come up with here, BurningInferno?
7125998
1, It was the end of the story.
2, The giant explosion broke all the windows.
Don't particularly like the sudden stop at the end there...
Apple Bloom, what the yay! did you do?!
I'm guessing the Zap Apples started a thunderstorm that shattered everypony's windows.
Oh, poor Spike.
I love the way you're pacing this story, flashing between events before and after what I'm guessing will be the last scene (or one of them): whatever happened that did this. I don't think I've read anything quite like that before, but you're doing it really well!
Hm, so I was wrong about how you'd time this. No matter! Onward!
Well done! Have a like and a follow!
D.. did... Did Rarity BLOW UP!?
i'd have thought that there'd be more... "oomph" if you had started the story with applebloom's one on one with twilight.
7125998
1. Continuing the theme and turning it into a joke; a lot of earlier scenes end in interrupted dialogue
2. What 7126559 said. Next to last chapter
3. By all means point them out and I'll correct them
7127209
I could see that… Oh well. Selling the time-jumps really demanded keeping a strict before-after structure. What I like about the way it opens is how perfectly the phrase "it all started out innocently enough" fits
7127158
But no, no she did not.
All's well that ends well, I suppose. Nice story.
I loved it! Great story! The unique structure really worked and made it a fun read!
This was a great story. I have to admit that I too missed the punchline about Spike being the one that bought the cake. I thought i was a Crystal Empire thing . Poor guys gonna cry when he realises he doesn't' get to eat it. Although, even if the glass was still mixed in he would be able to eat it...
Quite an amusing story! The Zap Apple parfume is a great idea, and gives a nice little positive twist to this. (As well as fitting AB's potion-making experiments.)
You know... Maybe just me, but the magical fruit getting peeved enough at being used in cider to blow up all glass for kilometers around sounds like something that really should have been noted down and passed around.
7125926 You took the words out of my mouth. Going straight into my favorites!
*Alondro makes Zap Apple cider... the cider gets ready to explode! Alondro glares at it, "I wouldn't do that if I were you..." The cider quietly simmers down lest it incur divine wrath of the Troll God*
7125998 Apple Bloom Accidentally crafted the Zap Apple Nuke. And set it off.
You'd think that her castle would just shatter with the rest of Ponyville's glass... I guess it's too thick.
Clever, and everyone in character. :) I too must applaud the novel double-time POV. But I also agree it wouldn't have worked if the story had been longer.
Favorited.
This is a great story. Well done.
Haha I didn't see an awesome ending like this coming, well done!
I was expecting the cider to give her Sonic Rainboom Farts.
Cutie Mark Crusader Chemistry wins the day, after all.
I have a guess as to what happened.
Very good idea and nicely written. You pull off the two perspectives very well, and I really like the ending. All things considered, that stuff might also make a good mana potion.
Congrats for getting featured! Wish I could say that for my stories.
7128616 So did I
7129033
Just keep writing. I wrote hundreds of thousands of words before I even knew this fandom existed, and I still have plenty to learn. If you think you're a writer, just keep following that passion
...Brilliant.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Loving the before and after you got with this.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Poor Spike.
Forever cockblocked. If not by Rarity, then by the universe itself.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Oooo...
That's a worse punishment than one could ever know.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Magnificent ending.
This was a joy to read. Thank you for sharing with us!
~Skeeter The Lurker
It was a good ending, but about what Twilight commented in the first chapter... Let's remember that Ponyville was destroyed a couple of times...
Alicorn amulet, Love It Need It, Parasprites, Bunny attack, Rainbow Dash...
Wonderful story! Have a like!
7127809 Probably not tried it before so.
Why was the end clipped off?
7130760
Dramatic effect.
So, the outcome ended up being...
Lightning in a bottle.