Graduation is quickly approaching Canterlot High. While Sunset Shimmer is happy about this celebratory milestone, something has kept her believing there's more to do back in Equestria. Along the way, she begins to think back on her past, try to understand things she had never questioned before, and take an extended return to Equestria. Little does she know, she would eventually uncover an incredibly dark and unexpected truth...
Oh sweet! I've seen you a couple of times. Loved your works on Sunset, back on DA.
Nice to see you putting this here as well as DA. I would recommend grouping a bunch of these chapters together, though, they're way too short on their own.
God, this is awful...
Why have a picture per chapter? It really spoils it a lot and takes away from what could be a good story
As a bit of constructive criticism, I agree with 11186064 and 11186098.
In my experience, (and this is just my preference) chapters at least 1k words long are good. Short chapters can be a little jarring.
FimFiction is a different medium. It's totally understandable that you'd want to show off your artwork, and I do love them... maybe place them at the end of the chapter instead of the beginning so it doesn't spoil the contents.
This is fraught with tense inconsistency, both between and within parts.
Sure feels weird seeing this on fimfiction compared to deviantart but I like it, just rereading this makes me more hyped for what's to come, not to mention my eqg finale I'll be making that'll becoming out this summer. Won't say much but human sunset is in it as well as the return of someone nobody expects will see returning.
I am all for bucking status quos but a 93 word chapter? This isn’t the best medium
Something tells me the actual graduation won't turn out how Sunset hopes it to be.
Sunset...?
In the shower?
To quote Jayne Cobb, "I'll be in my bunk"
Safe travels sunset.
No se porque todos se quejan, el que haya imágenes en el fic me hace imaginar que esto es un cómic, ademas de que a veces me da el diseño de un personaje que no recuerdo
Ehhhh la gilda humana es una completa perra, creo que más que la gilda que se mostró por primera vez
Bueno bueno bueno, pero que tenemos aquí?
*Mira la imagen de sunset en la ballera*
Pero que rico, un buen arte que puedo apreciar
Good luck, Sunset, and have a really great trip
And now Sunset's about to witness the disaster we know now as Twilight's 2nd coronation.
The only unrealistic thing isn't the presence of magic in Canterlot High, but that Sunset didn't get any college scholarships with a 3.9 GPA score of all things! XD
Not really a surprise party if it's the word on the street eh?
Well, at least Sunset doesnt have to worry about having something to wear.
Y'know, compared to Twilight's first coronation, the second one was kinda... casual. I mean, I get alicorn ascension is a big deal and all, but Twilight's being crowned ruler of all Equestria. You'd think it would be on par with the first.
Cool story. Added to my read list.
How is this a slice of life story?
You and me both. 🙄
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This story provides not only an expanded look into Sunset's life outside of school in the human world, but also a glimpse into the life that she had before she left Equestria.
This story will also provide a look at the life led by Sunset's human counterpart and how pony Sunset's actions have affected it...
Twilight is definitely gonna have a freak out once those ladybugs show up! 😬
Well at least the ladybug thing is an honest mistake, right? Twilight won't think Sunset's backsliding a little, will she?
this easily a 9/10
How rude!
Ouch!
Yep.
That sure was an awkward moment. 🙄
She's right Sunset. You'll come to a decision sooner than later.
Rude!
Oh boy! 😬
You sure did Coco, Rarity would be so proud of you for this.
Uh huh.
I have a gut feeling we'll see the pony versions of indigo zap and sour sweet sooner than we think. Maybe.
Poor Lemon.
It sure can.
Yep.
Don't give up yet Sunset, they could possibly still be out there, or even someone else in your family too.
Fingers I mean hoofs crossed. 😥
I hate to say this but I hope it doesn't get any worse. Hopefully someone like Starlight can vouch for Sunset, since not many on the ground know Sunset well enough.
Welp, seems like she's in some hot water now! 😰
Sometimes I forget how awful security guards are, even if they're still doing their job.
Hopefully someone will stop him before things get worse.
I’m pretty sure Twilight knows what a video game is as Rainbow Dash and Applejack were playing a video game in rainbow rocks and Starlight saw her fair share of things while in the human world
What did I expect from that two-face, regardless of whatever dimension she's from...?
Hopefully now Sunset is safe.
Well, at least she's safe. For now that is.
Now I remember how much I hated this guy from Sunset's Backstage Pass.
Hopefully she doesn't forgot that she left it there.
That was too close. 😓
I knew we couldn't trust her!!!!
That's not important right now!!! 😡
She's not lying, your the one who needs to listen to her as she's telling the truth!!!!! 😠
I'm glad that things were all sorted out for Sunset and that Sour Sweet's true colors was exposed.
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How do you know all of that? Your response makes it sound like you're helping the author write this story.
It's a shame Celestia and Luna may have left already. I bet Celestia would want to see her former student again.
But at least Sunset will have a proper introduction to Twilight's friends (even if they are incredibly familiar)
She has Rainbow, but that's not the reason why she wasn't there to see it.
Sadly yes Fluttershy.
Someone's in trouble.
Should of guessed that was gonna happen.
And that's what matters.
Damn, I did not see that one coming.
Oh?
Sure is Rarity.
Same goes for your counterpart too.
Since when did Rainbow Dash like Rock Leather outfits?
Uh huh. 😏
Ngl, I sometimes think those two are almost like sisters with so much alike.
Impressive.
Because what really matters is that your happy Sunset, even if you'll have for make sacrifices you don't want to make.
Not to mention hard.
Oh Spike.
Agreed.
Exactly! 😏
Wow, that is sure an old letter alright.
She's right, if Twilight was able to make things up with Moondancer, you can as well Sunset.
D'aww! Hearing her past with Celestia makes me want to see them meet again.
Same problem, different castle, eh Twilight?
I feel like youre giving subtle hints to some things.......
I can't wait for when things actually start to turn around, seeing the direction of this fic, it seems like this might have 100 chapters or more 0-0
I'm ready for super long fics! >:)
Lol just the thought of Sunset having a Master's degree in magical studies while her friends haven't even graduated high school yet is quite amusing. Then again, she's a magical prodigy who may or may not be older, and they're only teenagers (with superpowers).
Guess Celestia kept it after all this time hoping Sunset would return and continue her studies.
That worked out well.
Should of guessed that was gonna happen.
Sunset had now unintentionally encountered all five Shadowbolts.
Um... Coincidence?
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I think not lol
I hope wherever her parents are, they know that their daughter is alive, and searching for them.
Guess that means that either her parents got divorced when she was little, or she sadly passed away...
Well, looks like Sunset won't have to deal with a negative attitude like the human Indigo has, as it seems like it's the opposite for her counterpart.
Oh I'm definitely looking forward to that, since Sunset missed the boat on meeting Celestia again (not to mention the group hug), due to being late and almost imprisoned.
Celestia definitely knows something. Either she knows Sunset's mother is deceased (or divorced) even when she was a filly or (and this might be a bit of a stretch) maybe she is Sunset's mother.