When their cart breaks down at the market, Applejack begins to suspect that something may be wrong in Roseluck's household. An entry for the thousand words contest. Stop crying this is serious. CW: implied abuse.
Cars are still parked outside. If the rapture had happened, why was it unrecognizable? Why was the sky blue? Why did no one tell me? Do these things not announce themselves?
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And if this was any other story, the next chapter would be the parents getting the ass-whooping they deserve. Stupid contest rules.
Yup, I want more. Can't blame you if this is all we get, but it's a great setup even if it stands fine on it's own.
Good to see Applejack and Strawberry can agree on something.
Powerful. Masterpiece.
welp time to dig a hole in the woods
This was well done, with the build up to the reveal and the catharsis that we know it's going to be dealt with.
so true we all love that flower cart
aww, the fainting! they really shouldn’t be fainting so much!
if this is Applejack inadvertently making somepony feel worse about something by pointing out all the tragedies within it, well, that does seem to happen a lot with her!
oof…
oh no…
and yeah. it’d have to be something really important to get Applejack and Strawberry working together, and this certainly qualifies. poor flower ponies! with their names and cutie marks it would be all to easy for ponies to simply assume they were living their best and most fulfilling lives just like anypony else. well done with this one, thank you for writing!
Hmm. I see where you’re coming from with a more serious look at the Flower Trio’s overreactions, but it falls flat for me. Having to accept both the continued presence of their parents and the abuse those parents are inflicting in one go is a bit much for me. I admit, this is very much a subjective position, but the swerve into “Actually, these people are suffering” just felt too extreme... for me, anyway. I was the minority opinion among the judges. And I do appreciate Roseluck’s increasingly horrifying mantra; an excellent touch there. Thank you for the entry and congrats on the judge prize.
Howdy, hi!
Beautiful example of metaphor here and picking up the clues without it being outright stated. I love the rising horror as it clicks to what is happening within the context of the story. Greatly told and some excellent catharihism in the form of some vigilante justice. Banger read thanks!
Hello! I read all the stories from this contest that won recognition, so have a review. Well written and quite affecting, especially in that repeated line from Rose. Took a hit for me personally in that I tend to dislike vigilante justice endings, regardless of the provocation. I'm sure less squeamish readers cheered, though.