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Stories I Have Edited/Preread For 9 stories
  • Stories I Have Edited/Preread For 9 stories "Honestly, I think your characterization needs work. I liked the scene with the books, though." Stories I helped preread/edit for. Several of them I only edited parts of, others I edited in their entirety. Whether my input improved the final product is another matter.
    Created by cleverpun
    - June, 2015
Found 9 stories in 125ms

Total Words: 471,690
Estimated Reading: 1 day

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  • CCC: cleverpun's Critique Corner 40 stories "Here's my latest report. I think you'll find it is quite excellent. I even collated it myself." I have critiqued/reviewed all the stories in this shelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • Lengthy Comments 37 stories "Omigosh, let me tell you about this story I just read!" I wrote a longer comment on this story in place of a review. Chances are I didn't finish it or didn't have enough to say, and thus it didn't qualify for CCC. Or perhaps I read it before I started doing review blogs.


  • cleverpun's Description/Title Reviews 13 stories "Are you sure that's supposed to be there?" I have reviewed the descriptions/titles of all the stories in this bookshelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • cleverpun's Concise Critiques 22 stories All these stories have been reviewed in two sentences or less. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • Favorites 56 stories - 1 unread chapters "Oh man, this is so awesome! It's almost as good as Daring Do and the Shattered Sarcophogus' third printing!" Stories worth recommending.


  • Stories I Have Edited/Preread For 9 stories "Honestly, I think your characterization needs work. I liked the scene with the books, though." Stories I helped preread/edit for. Several of them I only edited parts of, others I edited in their entirety. Whether my input improved the final product is another matter.


  • Stories I Wrote Which Are Bad 9 stories "Honestly, dear, I know we all have our little lapses in judgement, but... What WERE you thinking?" Stories I wrote which are not very good. They might have one or two redeeming qualities, but I strongly recommend NOT reading them. Please read one of my other, better fics instead.


  • Pending Requested Review 0 stories "OMIGOSH Rainbow Dash you are so cool please pay attention to me look I wrote a story!" Requested for review. Higher priority than standard RIL. Check this blog to make your own requests: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/590650/taking-review-requests


  • Tracking 2 stories - 0 unread chapters "Uhm, it looks like it might be nice? I mean, not that it looks bad! I didn't mean... Sorry, please don't be mad." Intriguing, but not favoriting quite yet.


  • Read Later? 474 stories "Eh, I'll do it later, I'm right in the middle of this thing right now." Stories which may or may not get read, at some time which may or may not be late.

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  • Interviews 408 stories Stories that have had their author interviewed


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When Starlight Glimmer escaped capture, everything that could've gone wrong did, in fact, go horribly wrong. Now, with a fatal wound and an indefinite time to live, an unlikely—and hideously unwanted—savior finds her.

The good news? She needs only to solve a riddle she's never heard before she bleeds out.

The bad news... well...


Rated 'Teen' for intensity and slight gore.

Enjoy!

And a special thanks to the ever-prodigious Pearple Prose, Dubs Rewatcher, cleverpun (bless your heart), and Idsterian for aiding and proofing for me in this quest for undisputed power story. You guys are just wonderful!

Featured 6/21/2015... Somehow... Huh.

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Frederic Horseshoepin was born to be a pianist.

Frederic Horseshoepin was the most gifted student his instructor had ever taught.

Frederic Horseshoepin was the top of his class in music school.

Frederic Horseshoepin has been chosen to play a concert at Cantergie Hall.

So why has Frederic Horseshoepin never been good enough?

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What happens when you realize that your feelings for one of your friends aren't quite the same as your feelings for the rest of them? Do you just prefer some friends for others, or is it a sign of something deeper? What do you do with those feelings? Hide them? Admit them? And how will the rest of your friends react when they find out?

Twilight is going to have to do her best to find the answers, because they're anything but obvious.

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Yes, this is a story about romance, but I'm trying to use it to explore the relationships between the characters and see how they'd really react if romantic feelings ever did crop up, and how such a development would impact the cast as a whole.

Now with a TvTropes page!

There's also a dramatic reading in progress on youtube, here.

And also an updated verison of the cover, courtesy of Novel Idea.

Chapters (36)
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Trixie has taken over Ponyville and sealed the town in a giant forcefield. Princess Celestia is in Saddle Arabia for important diplomatic talks, so it falls to Princess Luna to deal with the crisis. She immediately sends the Royal Guard to liberate Ponyville, but this task may be harder than it seems.

Many thanks to the Pony Fanfiction Thread in general, and JapaneseTeeth and CDRW in particular, for prereading this.

Chapters (3)
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Wake up. Go to work. Save Ponyville from unimaginable horrors beyond time and space. Have lunch with your PFF.

Ditzy Doo lives in a different world than her fellow ponies. She sees things nopony else can see—like higher-dimensional spatial anomalies, fae creatures, and eldritch abominations. And she uses what she sees to solve problems that nopony else even knows about.

But this time, Ditzy may have bitten off more than she can chew. Something very unfriendly is trying to enter Equestria through Ponyville’s Town Hall. An earth pony with an hourglass cutie mark has taken an unhelpful interest in Ditzy. The Princess’s personal student has grown suspicious. And, most irritating of all, her alarm clock radio is acting strangely.

Ditzy must race against the clock to save Ponyville—a clock that keeps playing the same song over, and over, and over ...

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Traducción al español por SPANIARD KIWI aquí.
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Many thanks to everyone who preread and edited my WORDS WORDS WORDS:

Japanese Teeth
Sessalisk
Sereg
Kuroi Tsubasa Tenshi
CDRW
Clever Pun
Connelly
Justanotherbrony

Cover art assembled by yours truly, using a Derpy vector by Sierraex.

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Shoop boopy boop boop doop bedoop.

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Something is wrong in the World of Dreams. Luna is unable to patrol the dreams of her citizens, and vivid nightmares plague the Elements of Harmony. When Applejack finds that her friends are trapped in their dreams, Luna gives her one task: she must journey into the World of Dreams to bring Twilight and the others back to the waking world.

But if she falls asleep, the nightmares will trap her, too.

Inspired by the Justice League episode also titled "Only a Dream".
Cover image by Raikoh-illust.

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Sweetie Belle would have been perfectly happy to spend her long weekend in a theater. She would have been just as happy to ignore the fact that she would be stuck with Silver Spoon the whole time as well. When a vengeful spirit declares war on the fashion show being hosted at the theater, however, Sweetie and Silver find an unlikely alliance forming—as well as an unlikely affection.

Can the two fillies work out their differences and defeat The Phantom of the Bitmore? And how will Sweetie Belle react to the terrible secret of the Phantom?

Cover art provided with permission by MustLoveFrogs. Additional thanks to Clever Pun, Meta Four and Absolution for editing.

Chapters (8)
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With a research paper due date on the horizon, Twilight Sparkle recruits Rainbow Dash to help her unlock the secrets of the princesses’ Everfree castle. The further they go, the more it seems like they’ve stumbled into a Daring Do novel. They must escape before they drive each other crazy. Or fall victim to the traps.

(A revision of one of the Hearth’s Warming Care Package stories for Kiki.)
(EDIT: R.I.P. Kiki.)

Beta Reader Special Thanks
Sessalisk
Clever Pun
Meta Four
Japanese Teeth
Fox_E
Gawain Victor Royale
Curious Black Cat
Invidlord
Kegisak
Kayeka
Sereg
The Librarian/Quarter Note

Without their help, this story wouldn't be nearly as refined as it is.

Also note that the old version is still up as a courtesy to my older readers.
EDIT: Change of plans. I have been informed of a way to archive the old version, but still keep it on FIMFic. So if you're looking for the old version, it can now be found here.

Equestria Daily
Equestria Critics Society

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A hero-smith who trains to defeat a dragon and save his village. A classic, cautionary tale from the Grim Gram Brothers.

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Beta Reader Special Thanks
TerribleTransit
Clever Pun
Sereg
Invidlord
BrokenHero0409
Thattagen

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