Hex Swirl, a traveling magician has an unfortunte accident in the Everfree forest. He wakes up in care of Applejack who takes a liking to the stallion. What secret is he keeping from the ponies? What will happen when a pony from his past returns? Join Hex and the others as they uncover a secret long hidden from the world and magic unlike any of them have ever seen.
This is part two of a series I'm working on. Part one is 'The Dreams We Share.' Read that to get more info on Dash's colt friend Storm Chaser.
Chapters (15)
interesting....
How come I think I spotted some thing from Doctor Who?
Good story.
I will watch this....I know it's a 'tragedy' but.....
if there's not a happy ending, I will be quite displeased.....seeing as how interesting and well-written this is.
Doctor Who references.
Doctor Who references everywhere.
Anyway, good first chapter. Liked and favorited.
2671402 My one weakness.
I don't even care, man. I'm reading this!
Hell yes another best pony x OC, 1 chapter in and I'm already loving it. God damnit though I wish you would finish drowning in love and changing the guard but what ever I will never turn down Applejack. Keep up the good work and more doctor who references!
Love it!
Yay! Go AJ!
Ya know you've got problems when your name is "Hex"
Nevertheless, intriguing, I shall enjoy this I think
I like this.
Now...
Where is more?
Few things I'd like to point out.
1)The normal typos and grammatical mistakes, but that happens to everybody.
2)If you're writing a story in third person and you put a thought in there it's best to slap some italics or an apostrophe rather than quotations or leaving it bare.
All in all, I like it. Someone's been watching doctor who.
I'm looking forwards to seeing more of this. Don't disappoint me.
ANOTHER ONE
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Make More
or DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
I love it, SO MANY DOCTOR WHO REFERENCES!!!
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2700047 Oh just wait. More are on the way.
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FINALLY I MADE IT HERE
, so this is your third AJ fic(still haven't read the first one yet)Lets see if it's as good as the story that got me hooked by you with a review:
Still obsessed with Naruto it seems.
Why does this sound familiar
?
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Makes me always wonder about Shadow Clone Jutsu. How do you know which one is the real one and which is the clone if their an exact copy of the caster?
I'll never get tired of that, just like the infamous Doctor Who? question.
Why do I get an X-Men vibe here? If Twilight's an 8, then what classes are Celestia and Luna
?
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Is anypony getting a Rocky and Bullwinkle vibe here?(show always confused me since they showed episodes out of order and why it each chapter had two titles.)
If this wasn't already stated of being a AJ shipping story, I would have assumed this being a Twilight ship instead(especially when a story started out like this. *cough*Sparkle of His Eye*cough**cough*)
Sword in the Stone reference anyone?
Will a certain unicorn make an appearance here maybe?
(although it would had been a surprise if you didn't already confirm it by putting her tag up
, great way to take away the surprise)*end of review*
Well this is a hit right off the bat, good show, jolly good show
. Seeing as this is your third AJ fic(poor Pinkie
) Have you thought of branching out from using the main characters of the show? After all you've only done this with two of your stories, it would be nice to see some other characters getting their shot in the spotlight(Trixie, Derpy, Spitfire, Cheerilee, Zecora(good luck with the rhyming), Lyra, Bon Bon, and a whole bunch of others that would take too long to list(and I'm lazy))
2701283 The first set of clones with the wolves were just images, like holograms. Relax there's plenty of surprises in store for later chapters
and Trixie will be making an appearance.
I also plan on writing a Trixie X O.C. fic, just haven't had the time with work and writing close to 5 fics at once.
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This is a beautiful chapter.
I get that spaceballs reference.
2762813 Ha ha! Yes!
YAY, STORM IS BACK!!!
She's happy ----->
dat dreams we share reference
I needed that. Glad to see storm chaser is back. And as allways a good chapter. Just please, don't take two weeks on the next one.
Well that was fun to read
Got some arcs going, some development, some plot, I like it, I like it
I feels refreshed, now watch me pull a review out of this hat:
Ahh, I never get tired of Doctor Who references.
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Yay, Storm Chaser is back
.(Any reason why him out of the others?)It's been so long that I forgot what his personality was like.(pretty sure he wasn't a jerk)
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Am I getting another case of Deja vu
(or was that from somepony else who made the same mistake.)Pinkie Pie works in a bakery NOT a restaurant!
He must be ninja, He mastered the art of Genjutsu(Naruto reference)
You put a gleam, I put a clap.
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It's seems that everypony has some type of Stare.
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Again, never get tired of Who references(Nightmare in Silver I think? Loved that ep)
Does this mean that he's related to Starswirl the Bearded in some way?*end of review*
This was a AWESOME chapter.
After reading just two chapters this looks like it might be one of your best stories yet. And you finally brought your other OCs into your story(how long has it been when I suggested this?) And just like last time you end it with another cliffhanger that raises more questions. Cant wait to see what happens next chapter.
I see that 'Red Vs. Blue' reference.
Still with that crazy ending, I can't even begin to imagine how Twilight will feel when she finds out Hex likes Applejack! It's kind of like a love triangle but it has to be more of a circle. Just Applejack and Hex, get out of there Twilight you already got shipped. Not a triangle, but more of a circle.
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YES! Someone who get's the reference!
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2787951 It'll tie in with another fic I'm writing.
We need to get Ashleigh in here now to say that one line and i could die happy.
Edit
Ow that I've read the entire chapter I just wanted to say, holy hell. Can you say love triangle!
*see's filly applejack*
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2787951 she could marry echo specter and shoot babies out her V
2788892 Oh no I have a much better idea. It'll be in the next fic of the series.
2788962 sweet. Hey I got a few OCs that I just created. Wanna use some? They're free! There all on my blog
2788984 Already have them picked out.
Another chapter so soon
as if my magic *poof* and just like that a review also appears
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Congratulations, now I got that song stuck in my head. Thank you so much.
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I know why you did it this way, but gotta ask, Why didn't Hex just use a levitation spell to save her?
Together their making magic *wink wink*
Oooh, a love triangle(why did I think this was gonna happen? Was this because of what I said two chapters ago?) Way to keep it exciting and different from you other stories, I applaud you.
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Cant believe that Trixie would do that!
Is she a bitch? Yes, but a slut? No.
Challenge accepted
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Well this chapter was certainly juicy
, Cant wait to see where you'll go with this love triangle part of the story. And pictures always help to make the story better(I still like competing to see which can provide pics for the chapters
)
Sounds suspiciously familiar...Somepony we know?
First time seeing chapter: Small Problems? Do they have a problem with something?
After reading chapter: Small Problems! Little filly AppleJack! I see what ya did there!
2789190 Ok
So Twi and Jackie both got a common interest
Trixie's a slut 
Dashie's still hitched, Mr Swirl's into southern belles 
and speaking of which...What in Tartarus happened to her?!
Lol
so funny. And oh oh.
Yay, you got this one out much faster than I predicted, not complaining of course. But anyway, I feel like the relationship is moving a bit to fast. Then again I'm one to talk about that but I digress. There were a few spelling and grammatical errors but all in all I loved the cheaper. Filly applejack, priceless! The pictures were wonderful and the head cannon about star swirl the bearded was simply awesome. Keep up the food work comrade!
That was pretty funny.
But poor Twilight.
I feel so bad for her now.
Rainbow danced on a pole for storm...
2802715 Just wait for the next chapter.
2802746 I just hope someone sees the picture of rainbow blitz and storm dancer it will be really funny