A new Earth Pony named Bloomeria has moved to Ponyville and is welcomed with open hooves. Upon meeting a Pegasus named Blaze, she falls head over hooves for him. It's up to the mane six to help her out when it comes to impressing him. But will she succeed?
Special thanks to knightcommander for writing assistance.
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Not bad i have read worse...slightly confusing at the bits in the everfree forest and a grammar issue here and there overall good job. Sorry to be such a critic but i was told to do this anyways...also the plot of this story reminds me of a certain EPisode of My Little Pony Tales so Life Experience or drawing on that or somehting similar? That's just me prying.
Overall good job keep it up and i am sure you do just fine on this site also if ya need another reviewer than knight let em know my inbox is always open....if i dont forget my password again!
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Well thanks for being honest about it. I'm planning on editing this story and resubmitting it later.
I don't recall thinking of an episode of My Little Pony Tales. But now that I think about it, it is a little similar to Just for Kicks. I wanted to stay true to the elements of the show with a heartfelt lesson.
If you have any suggestions, please let me know. Thanks.
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well i was actually thinking of Roll Around the Clock but you are right this is closer to Just for Kicks, but anyways
She asked in verse as she always would. since Zecora always does this wouldn't would be did or has? Other than that monor nitpicks but thats just me being a perfectionest. But the thing is good job like i said keep it up i apologize if i sounded rude i just normally happen to be blunt when i comment sorry if it seemed rude. Anyways now tracking and can't wait to see more from you
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