The cool night of Manehattan was bristling with activity. The once quiet city was awakened by the sound of an ear piercing scream. No one knew where it came from, but they knew that someone was in pain. Police ponies were now flying around the skies in search for something. Most of the lights from within buildings were now turned on as ponies looked out their windows to look for what caused all this activity. A lavender unicorn ran across the roofs of buildings. Behind the mare were three other ponies. One was an orange colour and had a tied up blonde mane. She ran beside the purple mare with determination in her emerald eyes. The second was all pink and was literally hopping behind the speedy duo. The last mare was a snow white colour with a curled indigo mane. The four jumped over an alley as they continued to follow the long rainbow streak that flew across the sky.
“With all these police ponies outside,” Twilight Sparkle said as they trailed the rainbow streak. “Whatever made Fluttershy scream must've been big.”
“Police said that it was some sorta creature,” Applejack began to slow down as they saw the rainbow streak curve around. “Nothin’ like they’ve ever seen before.”
“*Gasp!* What if it’s an alien?” Pinkie Pie squealed. “We could throw it a party!”
“Considering it tried to fillynap Fluttershy, I doubt it darling.” Rarity smiled. Her smile faded as she noticed Twilight and Applejack standing at the edge of the building, completely frozen. “Something wrong darling?”
“What…”
“In tarnation’s…”
“Is that?”
The two other ponies caught up to the shocked duo. Their expressions mirrored theirs as they looked at what they were staring at. In the centre of the building across from theirs was a tall dark figure. Its white eyes stared at the group with surprise. Around its waist was a silver belt. Two long black ears stuck out from the top of the figures head, almost making it look like a demon. Rainbow Dash finally landed next to the group. Fluttershy got out of the rainbow ponies hooves and looked at the figure in the centre of the rooftop. Of all the things the main six have seen, they have never seen such a monster such as what stood in front of them. The bright moon in the sky shone down on the figure, revealing the large red symbol on its chest. The cool wind of fall began to blow, making it feel like they've been standing there forever.
“What is that thing?” Twilight said in barely a whisper. Even though she was scared, she was also interested to learn more about the dark figure.
“That’s the thing that tried to fillynap Fluttershy!” Rainbow glared at the creature. She flared out her wings so she looked larger to it.
“A-Actually-“
“Maybe we could try talking to it.” Twilight suggested.
“Screw that!” Rainbow yelled. “No one tries to fillynap my friends and gets away with it!” Rainbow flew towards the dark knight, revenge in her eyes. The dark knight narrowed his eyes as he waited for her to get closer.
Terry quickly sidestepped the angered Pegasus. Rainbow landed on her hooves and slid to a stop. He turned to face the cyan mare and got into a combat stance. Rainbow Dash growled and rushed at him. The dark knight quickly blocked two blows and dodged the third. Her hoof was caught in mid-air, stopping her in her tracks. She tried to use her other forehoof but it was caught also. Terry smiled and slammed his forehead into hers. Rainbow stumbled backwards, clearly dazed. The dark knight took this to an advantage and kicked the mare backwards. Rainbow quickly recovered and rushed at him, pure hate in her magenta eyes. Batman quickly dodged the mare’s fury of blows. He caught another blow and punched the mare right in the gut. The neuromuscular amplifier caused the punch to have more strength. Rainbow fell to the ground, clutching her gut in pain.
Applejack jumped from the building and tackled the dark knight. They both fell to the ground, the farmer mare on top. Terry winced as the mare began to punch him repeatedly in the face. He grabbed the mare’s forehooves, straining under the mare’s resistance. Terry was surprised on Applejack’s strength. He placed a foot on the mare’s chest and kicked upwards. Applejack flew up and landed on her hooves. Batman quickly got up and beckoned for the mare to come. Applejack smiled and rushed at the dark knight. Batman grinned and didn’t move. He glanced over his shoulder to see that Rainbow was getting up, rage in her eyes. She began to rush at the dark knight with rage. His rocket boots quickly activated once Applejack twirled around.
-CRACK!-
Terry shot up in the air before Applejack could buck him in the chest. He looked down to see the farmer mare’s back hooves hit Rainbow Dash right in the face, launching her backwards. He landed right in front of the shocked farmer mare and punched her right in the face.
“THAT’S ENOUGH!”
-BZZZMMM!-
Terry quickly back flipped away from a magic bolt. He looked up to see Twilight and Rarity standing on the rooftop across from his. He reached to the back of his belt and grabbed two batarangs, not leaving his gaze off the two mares. He glanced around the building in confusion.
“Where did the pink one go?” Terry said to himself.
-POW!-
“Hm?”
-SPLAT!-
The dark knight quickly dodged a cake from hitting him. He glanced across the rooftop to see Pinkie Pie putting another cake into a cannon. He raised an eyebrow in confusion. He didn’t even know what he was looking at. The mare glanced at the confused man and waved. She then pulled a string that was attached to the cannon.
-POW!-
Terry dodged another cake and tossed a batarang at the cannon. The sharp blade embedded itself into of the cannon. Pinkie looked at it in confusion. She gasped as a red light turned on and began to blink.
“Party’s over.” Terry said to himself.
-BEEP!- -BEEP!- -BEEP!-
-BOOM!-
“YOU RUFFRIAN!”
“R-Rarity don’t!-“ Fluttershy tried to plead to the white unicorn but it was no use. Rarity jumped from the top of the building and onto Terry’s. She glared daggers at the dark knight. Her white horn began to glow a soft light blue as she charged up her magic.
Terry tossed a batarang at the mare. Rarity gasped and stepped to the side, but the blade sliced off some of her indigo mane. The two stood in silence. Applejack rubbed her head and glanced at the scene. Her emerald eyes turned into pin pricks as she saw a piece of Rarity’s mane on the ground. Rainbow and Twilight gasped in shock. Rarity shakily glanced down at the piece of her mane on the ground. Her sapphire eyes locked onto Terry’s white eyes. Terry took out another batarang and stood his ground. He could literally feel the rage building inside the marshmallow mare. Rainbow grinned and chuckled.
“You’re dead now, freak.”
“I’ve been told that many times.” Applejack and Twilight gasped as they heard the dark knight talk.
“You can talk?” Twilight asked.
-BZZZMMM!-
Batman quickly dodged the gigantic beam of magic that shot out of Rarity’s horn. The beam managed to graze his right arm. He looked at his arm to see a large tear on the suit. The red interior glowed in the night. Terry held his arm in pain, feeling the hot energy of the bolt begin to burn his skin. He dodged as another beam almost hit him. He back flipped away from another beam and landed on top of a water tower that was on the roof. Terry quickly reached into his belt and took out a circular blade. The saw hummed to life once he activated it. The dark knight sliced through the side of the wooden tower. Water broke through the wood and landed on the enraged Rarity. The mare screamed as she was drenched in the cold water.
“Time to cool off.” Terry jumped off the tall tower and stood in the center of the building. He glanced over at Twilight and paused. She was the only one that didn’t attack.
“Why did you attack Fluttershy?” Twilight asked. She wanted to jump down but was scared of getting too close.
“I didn’t attack her, I saved her.” Terry glanced over his shoulder to see Rainbow and Applejack getting up.
“Bullshit!” Rainbow growled. “If you saved her, then why the buck did you attack those cops and attack us?”
“Self defense.” Terry looked back at Twilight. “You can ask her yourself. She was there.” Twilight looked over at her frightened friend. Her gaze was moved when she saw a large group of police ponies flying over to them.
-POMPH!-
Twilight’s turned around to see a puff of grey smoke where the dark figure was. She raised an eyebrow in confusion but her expression was turned into shock once the smoke cleared. Three buildings away was the dark knight. He was much faster than even she thought was possible for the mysterious figure. Before she could call for it to stop, a long rainbow streak flew off after it. Twilight looked from Fluttershy to the fleeing figure. She stomped her hoof in frustration and galloped after the duo. Even though she knew she couldn’t catch up, the alien would have to stop eventually. Fluttershy watched as Applejack got up and chased after her, determined to take out the creature.
Terry sprinted across the rooftops of buildings. He jumped over alleys with ease and continued to run. The sounds of wing beats made he glance over his shoulder to see a cyan bullet on collision course for him. Behind the cyan bullet were the lavender pony and the orange mare. He glanced back at Rainbow Dash and winked. Rainbow clenched her teeth and flew up closer to him. Terry glanced forward and grinned. He skidded to a stop, letting Rainbow fly completely past him. She looked back in confusion. Terry pointed ahead of her, causing her to look back at where she was flying. Her jaw dropped as she looked to where the dark figure was pointing at.
-SLAM!-
“Appropriate use of a billboard.” Terry watched at the rainbow haired mare slammed straight into a billboard. The Pegasus fell to the ground with a thud.
-THADUM!-
A large spotlight shone onto the dark knight. He covered his white eyes and looked around in horror. On each of the buildings around him were more ponies in uniform. Some were flying in the air, creating a perimeter around the dark knight. Others stationed themselves on the roofs, their horns pointed at Terry. More lights were shone down on the Batman as more of the ponies decided to file in on the rooftop, completely surrounding the dark knight. He looked around for an opening, spotting only one but it would be incredibly risky. The orange mare and the lavender unicorn soon joined in on the large group that surrounded the dark knight. Terry stood in a combat stance, but instead opted to just standing still and raising his arms in the air. The group of ponies still surrounded him, not moving an inch. Rainbow Dash began to get to her hooves and watched the spectacle that was happening on the building. More spotlights began to shine down on the dark knight, making sure that they won’t lose him in the dark.
“What’s that in his right hoof?” Raindow asked. Batman smiled and threw the smoke pellet and a flash bang on the ground. The bright flash caused everyone to shield their eyes as the smoke masked his trail. The smoke began to clear, showing nothing but the bare rooftop of the building.
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“But… How?” Twilight gasped. She stood in silence as the police began to fan out and search for the missing creature. Rainbow Dash stomped her hoof on the ground and flew off, joining the search.
“Slippery critter ain’t it?” Applejack whistled as she walked up to Twilight. Twilight merely stared at where the dark figure was and then back at the billboard. “C’mon Sugarcube, let’s get back to the police station and maybe Fluttershy can give us some answers.”
“Y-Yeah, alright.” Twilight turned around and began to walk away with her friend.
< * / * \ * >
“Where the hell am I?”
Terry stood atop one of the tall buildings of Manehattan. He clicked a button on his belt and turned off the cloaking device he had on. The cool wind of fall blew on him as he gazed down at the city. The sun began to rise over the horizon, indicating that morning was coming. He looked at the tear on his arm and sighed. He didn’t know where he was, or even if he was still in the same universe. But one this was for sure that whatever these were, they didn’t like him. The rainbow one was loyal to her friends, too loyal that she tried to fight for their safety. But the lavender one reminded him of a scientist discovering a new creature. If anything, he was the creature here. Terry sat down on the ledge of the building, letting his legs dangle over the edge. He watched as he saw the uniformed ponies searching for him. He sighed and got up. For now he needed a place to stay and hide or he’s going to be running forever. He pressed a button on his belt, activating the cloak. He’s going to have to be more careful since it’s more visible under UV light. The retractable wings outstretched and he jumped off, gliding over the city.
He had other things to do than fight colourful ponies. Like finding out where he is.
I hope im first and MOAR PWEASE!! When yer able.
Will Friedle would be proud.
you know i can't wait until they get an earful of how stupid they are, and react they are.
Oh and i want to see twilight face once she realist she make the some misket like she did with the zebar
this was epic!
All i can say, MOAR
Rarity's mane got sliced off by Batman...again.
3046886 well atleast this time it caused her to have some backbone and fight instead of fainting on the spot
more PLEASE
Looks like a good story, and I'm interested to see where it's goin'. Reading List for now, and we'll see if that goes to Favourites by the fifth chapter, eh?
Not sure about the grammar in the statement, but I will concur that they really should have learned their lesson after the whole Zecora incident. Keep it up, this story is coming along in leaps and bounds!
I have to say that the chapter was not disappointing. Great job!
Bruce would be ashamed of how long it took Terry to defeat those ponies. Good chapter. The ponies really have no luck when dealing with any Batman.
Batman Beyond? OH GODDESSES YES!
I'm pretty sure that should be blows, not bows ... unless Rainbow Dash was tossing bows at Terry.
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Fixed! Thank you!
3047127
Trying not to make Terry too strong!
But thanks for the feedback!
Well this second chapter came out fairly quickly. Is this going to be a regular thing, or did we just get lucky and catch you in a good mood?
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I actually don't know. I've been in such a mood to write that I've almost bee writing a chapter a day for this!
As long as people like it and their happy, I'm happy!
3047705Then you should be very happy with this story.
3047127
But Bruce Wayne Batman is the original he is basically invisible I'm sure he could of got away from the mane 6 rather quickly like I dunno ........ 10 seconds flat.
Really?
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Frankly, I don't mind negative critics! Its nice to know the mistakes you've made so you don't do them again! To learn from them! I agree, it would've been better if he told me the problems. But I'm fine with his honesty!
So 3048032 thanks for being honest!
All I can suggest is use a thesaurus some because you overuse words.
3048235>>3048246 There were a lot of issues that jumped out at me when I was trying to just read through the story, and I am already editing one story so I did not want to take the time to do an editing pass on this one because that would take hours. If it were just one or two I would have written them down as I went, but as is it felt like I was running into some issue or another every other sentence which is more than I was willing to deal with. You should really look into getting an editor because mechanical errors is the biggest issue you have at the moment.
3048369
Looking into it! Thanks for the heads up!
3048386 No problem.
3047751
Err... The word you are looking for is "invincible", not "invisible". Batman is not Invisible Man
if any super hero person can get caught so easy by the law or ponies for the matter then they would of been dead long ago sad but true fact if you think about it.
man i bet that was the easiest escape he ever had to pull probably had a lot of fun doing it~!. aw batman you deal with a lot of crazy things from super natural magic,hostile aliens, gods of all kind and there powers, unknown technology, other dangerous things and survive and has eventually had to dealt with space, different dimensions, time travel and hero framed to look evil at some point man he can handle a lot of things he just that cool! he awesome i can't help but hero worship him. im a dork arn't i?
but anyway im not going to worry about him yet in this story he a smart guy that can out smart the police easy and can escape a lot that have twilight and others going crazy so that be fun!
3048727
This is the Terry McGinnis Batman, not the Bruce Wayne.
But thanks! I hope you enjoy the coming chapters as much as you enjoyed the first two!
So, you kept him human...
You have no fucking idea how much I love you
-Kiryu
3048739 he done some crazy stuff so he get there soon enough ~! and i will enjoy it promise
3047237 I would pay to see that.
Poor Terry. He hasn't even had Bruce's experiences with Etrigan the Demon to be ready for stuff like magic, but he adapted fast.
And it is great to see someone finally crossing the DCAU with the ponies.
This chapter was actually an improvement compared to the others. Although, repeatedly describing him just gets old and redundant. I understand describing him as a dark figure, but mentioning the belt and his insignia in the same ways as before is making seem a little unimaginative. Other than that, I really liked the fighting sequence. I'm really curious about a number of things, which I'm sure you'll answer my questions to with future chapters. Great work so far.
The chapter was great, but there was one thing i didnt like.(dont hate me for this!) The language...the way Rainbow Dash cursed some what lost my love for the story...You see I`m a reader who loves fanfics that have charaters that stays in charater. For example, Fluttershy would never say 'Yeah' she would say 'Yes'. Let me show you:
"That's correct, I am an animal care taker as you can see."
That is Fluttershy being in character.
This is not:
"Yeah, I am an animal care taker as you can see."
Sure its not much, but I like it when she says "correct" not "yeah".
When Rainbow Dash Said "Screw that!"
I was like "dang,she's out of character..."
Then when she said "Bulls***!"
I facepalmed...
It would have been better if she said "Forget that!"
But that's my opinion, sorry for saying all these things. I guess I could call myself a "In character nazi person" when i see fanfics like these hehehe...
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Maybe, maybe not. After all, you can take away a gun. When the weapon is built into the body of your enemy, disarming without injury is not really an option.
Besides, he had no idea what a horn is to a unicorn. He simply knew he was being shot at, and did what he usually does: go for the weapon. If he had known, then you might call it an overreaction, but only with respect to the Batman ethos of non-lethality, like you said.
By any other reasonable standard for combat situations, he was is the right. The cop used lethal force with no justification. He could have killed the moron, and it would still have been self-defense.
Wonder what other kind of shenanigans Terry might get himself into in a land of pastel ponies. . . Lol
I can't wait for the next chapter. I mean literally I can't!! But I will wait anyway
Terry is my favorite batman as well, although he is a lot quieter without Bruce to snark to all the time. I wonder what he is gonna do for power, I remember hearing that the cloaking feature drains the suits battery quickly.
Me likey xD
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Fighting scenes are one of my strengths! There will be more fighting sequences in later issues!
Yeah I suffer from over using words. Its actually terrible but its not contagious!
3049098
That was my fault! I got slightly carried away with making Rainbow. But, it's a good thing that teen rating is on!
3049325
Give it a chance at least! English isn't my first language!
But thanks for the feedback!
MUST HAVE MORE!! If that's ok....
3051854
Got an editor! Or getting one! Later chapters will be edited by him
As for the boom tube, that was honestly the best I could think of. Having him be brought over there by Twilight would be too generic. Plus, I didn't want Terry to just instantly befriend them like every other story.
Thanks for the feedback!
This is pretty much how I felt when I read the chapter
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Keep up the good work.
It was great
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I remember them being used by Darkseid in Justice League, so it's interesting that Terry got there via one.
You mean 'ahead', right? She was already looking behind her to see Terry. So, by definition she can't look behind herself again.
Also, Batman actually heard my call of advice........
I must abuse my newfound powers.
BATMAN!!!!! GET A MANTICORE SIDEKICK!!!! Don't just pass this off as being silly words in a comment. Very rarely do you see manticore sidekicks(friendly or otherwise). You also don't see Wendigos. But in all seriousness batman. You need to conserve your consumable items(smoke bombs, exploding batarangs, flash bangs, etc....). Since you no longer have access to the batcave, there will be no resupplying anytime soon. Unless of course you find a way to turn poison joke into a makeshift explosive. In which case you could possibly f*ck everything over. But at this point I'm just ranting. So here, have a high five from your new subconscious voice. /)
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Fixed! Thanks for pointing that out!
I don't think Batman could get a manticore sidekick. Considering he's in Manehattan and Ponyville is slightly far away.
3053905 Who's to say their aren't manticores, hmmm? We don't know for certain that they aren't there. We don't know jack about them other than that they look like the spawn of an animal orgy. Yes, you read that correctly. Animal orgy. That is the essence of the manticore. For all we know they could live inside volcanoes and golf on the moon when no ones looking.......
My god that gives me an idea for a fic.
....I'll..... be right back.
3049098Bullshit.
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No problem. I actually noticed less errors in this chapter. I am enjoying the story. You are already a better author than many if you can take criticism and use it to become better.