I'm a writer, always have been always will be. My intrests are for making stories mostly about Changelings, because really; they need love to. Enjoy my stories, leave a like and comments.
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Well as i like to say "IIIIIIt's Show Time!"
Four views and four likes within a minute of posting?
Stop upvoting your own shit.
Continue its so awesome!
3034822 im not *Raise eyebrow* im just as confused as you are
You dont know how happy you made me when you posted this . I mean this is gonna be an awesome story i
just feel it . Hope to see more updates
Ps. Nice cover art
3034802 very much
3034841 Thanks, i was looking for a good picture that would protray Shadow rather nicely and well, found this
3034822 The counter doesn't register people who have view it fast enough
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The author can't like his own story. Maybe, just maybe, there were four people who read the previous story and like this one as default.
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Thanks for being a complete tool dude, everyone wants to be just like you!
And who gives a flying fuck if an author likes his/her own story? If you have a problem with something so miniscule as that, then you have problems.
Also you can't talk shit since you haven't written a single story. Go write one then talk smack.
Thank you and enjoy your pathetic day.
Now for my comment on this story.
Like.
Favorite.
Read later.
Loved Changeling Heart and I hope this lives up to that story. Continue!
Read the story and man I can't wait to see what you do next.
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My reaction
3034822 Get yo scum ass outta here bitch.
I came!
3036969 I saw
3036984 I witnessed scripture
sweet it has a kick ass cover art pic already
why are most featured stories all so interesting and yet so short? I hate waiting for months before it reach decent length.
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3040123 lol
Ok... This reads decently.
Plot seems solid as well.
I'll be watching this. Let's see what you got.
~Skeeter The Lurker
3040218 You've earned ALL of my hate. It was just... there... and you... didn't... and then... HHAAATTTEEEEEEEE
3039737 i plan on making the story longer in the comming chapters, this one was just the first, so i thought i make it, too the point type thing, do not worry. they will be longer (or ill try to make them longer)
3035605 *Watches you eeeeeeee as i smile* thanks
Excellent! I can't wait for more!
Somehow, the formatting and the mistakes here and there made my reading a bit painful. Maybe that's just me being a Grammar Nazi but at some points I really saw some parts that just messed with my head.
The plot seems good, that I can give away but in my personal opinion, the overall grammar could be better. The formatting doesn't really bother me as much as the grammar did at some points. My main advice right now is to get an editor or proofreader to get rid of some issues with you grammar.
Otherwise, keep up the good work, mate.
Soooo, they know the combined changeling armies are coming already... and the Princesses don't think to launch a preemptive strike?
I mean, come on, the stupid bug-ponies are just massing in a nice clump, a lovely target for a solar flare. Or why not come themselves, with the Bearers already wearing the Elements and just blast the crap out of them?
Where's the changelings' subterfuge? The masses of secret spies and saboteurs? Their greatest asset is their ability to physically blend in perfectly, and once more they fail to exploit it. An open attack against Shining and Cadence is utterly foolhardy and SHOULD be futile.
Seriously, have the changelings still not figured out that SHAPESHIFTING makes infiltration a whole lot easier than open movement? Assuming the ponies haven't developed a perfect changeling detection method (which I'd think would be a top priority when dealing with a race of shape-shifting parasites), the best strategy for the bugs would be to slip into the Palace or wait until the blissfully ignorant royal couple is outside and then assassinate them. The drones would of course be captured or die in the process, but what's the loss of a handful of throw-away soldiers compared to eliminating the two greatest defense assets of the Crystal Empire?
Then, once they're dead, move in your disguised army and attack openly, swiftly taking the territory in the confusion.
Chrysalis' strategy in the TV show succeeded in spite of her own poor intelligence-gathering solely because the ponies had no idea changelings existed. Moving openly now would be suicide for the changelings if the Princesses used all the means at their disposal to stop them.
Not to mention, I'm certain other races aren't exactly fond of changelings either. Enlist a few dragons, the griffons, the minotaurs... against the already lessened numbers of changelings, equip your army with amulets to detect changeling magic or have unicorns cast widespread disconcealment spells... it'd be a massacre.
No, in open combat the changelings are strategically outclassed dramatically. The fact that 6 mares with no military training bucked the crap out of dozens of them speaks volumes about average changeling combat capability. They're like Zerglings, really, only useful in a massive rush of numbers against poorly defended targets.
It's a good thing I'm not evil. Nopony would stand a chance.
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I wasn't aware it was possible for the same person to give four upvotes...
oh got the names the names they burn my eyes !! the scream I AM AN OC LOOK AT ME I AM COOL
but despise this it ok
Gotta love the protective fathers and such.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I spy stewie griffin
Hmm I still think I like the first one better but who cares (Insert picture of twilight with rainbow between her hooves that says "nobody cares" here)
only 3 comments (excluding my own) and this is such a good chapter too it had depth, back round info and most importantly love intress advancement
I just finished reading this chapter and i think it really good... i hope to see more, its good so far
It should probably be 'Carved'. Unless, ya know, Crystal is actually part dragon. Or Shadow. Either way, that would be an... Interesting plot twist. Also, putting 'small' and 'little' right next to one another is kind of redundant. This ends the message from your friendly local Grammar Nazi.
Anyway, nice chapter.
whoa, cocoon is wicked pissed
Bitches be trippin'
I don't get Chrysalis motivates in it. But probably you will tell that in time :P
Hello I'm your friendly neighborhood grammar nazi :3 now then the grammar -_-
1. Either has an I it's not ether unless your talking about a highly flammable liquid that smells good
2. STOP SAYING THE SAME THING OVER AND OVER AGAIN
3. It's carved not craved
4. Please stop capitalizing father and mother and daughter it's annoying
That's all I can remember that really stuck out for me. There was a lot wrong though. Do you have an editor? Not saying I'd be one but if you don't have one you might need one and if you do you might need a new one or just get more
3159107 Revenge :3
Again, all the problems of all your other chapters: you still make stupid mistakes constantly and refuse to get an editor. This is seriously a major turn-off.
More!
so awesome!
This is Getting Epic
Can't Wait For More
Do you just not care about the mistakes you make? I say this every chapter: get an editor to fix the simple mistakes, it's not that hard.
3187956 Lol your picture it's...... Cute
dyeing for next chapter
While this story is good, GET A DAMNED EDITOR!!! The grammar mistakes are horrendous and stupid.
‘Well…you couldn’t do anything to save your Mother when you were but a small little foal.” She then casted me a wide, evil grin. “And now, you can do nothing to save your own children from me.”
Wwwwwwwwwoooooooooooooowwwwwwwwwww
Also, I don't mind the grammar much.
Good plot progress but I suggest getting this edited. It needs it bad.