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They say the cost of peace can come in many forms, and for Musical Elegy, that is no exception.
On a quiet evening in, he finds that the price he must pay may save the life of another.
Thanks to:
The Parasprite for providing the inspiration behind this fic, as well as allowing me to use his OC.
Abcron for prereading
And finally Jaestring, Brosparkles and Insanity PKlegend for helping me with names. Hope you enjoy!
EDIT: Coverart is temporary until I can get something better.
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Oh dear god...
~Skeeter The Lurker
Hue.
3201518 Saturation.
I feel involved!
I LOVE YOU BUD! 
I didn't do shit on this story.
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haha
Aspiring is a good word.
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werent you just saying last night how you're going to be nicer to people
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Sorry, I was under the impression that aspiring had a good connotation.
Regardless, I upvoted.
Hm... For a slice of life story- I'm, getting a lot of vibes.
Bad ones.
Other than that, needs a bit of polish and it should be better.
I TOLD YOU I WOULDN'T LIKE IT! I TOLD YOU!
But because it's good to other people I'll like and favorite.
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It's ok, Swirls. You can tell us the truth.
You actually liked it more than you're letting on.
Ah, I see this has some connection with your other one.
I'd give serious thought to rearranging this sentence, though, mate.
Might I suggest "Too distraught to let his eyes drift shut, he hadn't slept a wink himself?"
Might be a good idea to specify first before defaulting to the word "pastry" so as to enhance the imagery.
"...intently watched his every move" is a bit punchier.
I'm not about to say that this is out of character for an elder to say, but I would rephrase this to say "isn't this awkward." Also, you might want to get rid of the adverb. You don't want to overuse them, or else the "-ly" bit starts to taste like too much salt.
"Pinprick" refers more to sensation of pain, not a size. Try "pinheads" or maybe "pinpoints" (that last one is still best used as a verb, though).
Looking forward to the next chapter, despite my nit-picks.
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Sadly, my nitpicky friend (I say that with as much humor and respect as I possibly can), that's it for this particular story. Mayhaps I'll come up with another one sometime in the future if the gods of the written word deem me worthy, but until then I'm probably going to be quiet on the story posting for a while. I'll still be bouncing around the site like a pair of tits on a particularly hyperactive woman, leaving comments in my wake the whole time, but other than that, my page is going to be pretty barren for a while. Thanks for reading, though, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.