Something has happened all across Equestria, things have died and now everything is gone. Almost none have survived and those who have, believe they are alone in a world of death and destruction. No one know why or how it happened, but now there are no ponies to pose that question. A world in despair the remaining, unaware of each other's presence, roam the land of Equestria till chance may happen upon them that they may one day meet.
A first person adventure through the eyes of some of the favourite mane 6. A tale of loss and mental battles. One can only hope our loved characters can cope, enough at least to find meaning in all that has gone wrong.
Chapters (8)
September?
I like the idea but "Now after a year of recollecting my thoughts of events prior ..." does that mean that each of them survived on their own for a year without finding each other? Surely Twilight would have been able to send up a signal like a flare to attract attention, and Rainbow Dash would be visible up in the sky.
Also, where did they get food? With no farms, any stored food that survived would run out quickly.
And what did they do in winter when it snowed? (Thinking out loud here.) Hmm actually, the seasons are changed manually by ponies aren't they? With no ponies around, the world is stuck in the same season. Same with the weather. Hang on a sec, the sun and the moon are controlled too. So either the Princesses survived and never bothered to contact the other survivors or they're dead and Equestria is stuck with an eternal day. Which would roast the planet, Then again, the laws of physics are bent or broken in so many other ways on this show so who knows.
Haha, I guess I didn't mean to analyse it this much.
Don't mistake critisism for hate anyway, this is good work and it was fairly well written. I'd like to see more. Thank you.
Tracking, needs to be a little more clearer, though.
272910 don't worry, i have it all planned out. and i don't quite see that i have hinted that they DIDNT find each other, however you have a point and thanks for your constructive criticisms.
as for food: keep in mind AJ has a cellar filled w/ apples, and twilight can conjure stuff w/ magic, and idk bout RBD but im not there yet.
272431 why yes actually, if you have seen this on deviant art (i high doubt any1 would have though) the description mentions that this story was quite inspired by that song, actually thats why i started writing it. good on you for noticing :)
i guess it's kinda what happened with rainbow factory :)
273081 would you care to explain a bit? if you mean the tracking of who is speaking at the time, then i can tell you that the way i intend to write is it will always be written in this order; Twilight, Rainbow, AJ
So half of the 6 survived? Alright... The plot (ot the way you conveyed it) needs work. While some stuff doesn't make logical sense (as mentioned above and stuff) some things just need to be cleaned up. On Twilight's part mostly.
So what I understood is that Ponyville just got nuked. Okay then.
Few grammatical stuff here and there, but it's still good.
274908 well, tbh if you read carefully, both twi and aj mention seeing layers/multiples of the bombs layers, indicating that most of equestria got bombed, not nuked, as nothing would really survive a nuke like the way i describe some things. especially not a year w/out getting radiation poisoning. i do understand that twi's part is a bit weird, but do keep in mind i have no editor to tell me im writing something stupid. i just write what sounds good. hopefully, p2 (which is already written) should maybe make stuff a bit clearer.
and about how the sun and the moon rises, if you wondering, dw, i got it figured out, when i get to it (which will probably be in part 4 or 5).
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!
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i didn't want him to die, but i think he gave his life to save his sister. how else did the door close and get heavier idk, cuz idk wat happened either.
Why does this say it updated today when there's still only one chapter?
Not complaining, but it went to the top of my tracking page and I was like, "Sweet, update!" Then saw it still only had one chapter and was all, "Wat?"
286846 ummm... i don't know really. if it's still not working you can always read it here: http://maliciousbadger.deviantart.com/#/d4rnket
i'm sure it got published. i wouldn't know what is wrong with it.
Right, there's the food problem solved at least.
406595 glad i was able to touch emotions in some people (the whole point of this story). unfortunately i didn't really write this chapter as well as i would have like, to myself, i find that im suck at writing dialog, so this much dialog in a text was quite advantageous on my part. im glad you think otherwise. i thought it sucked but i guess everyone is prone to being the largest critic to their own work.
sry was on a tangent. in short; thanks, and don't die, else you won't be able to read the next part and cry your heart out once again.
Please make it a happy ending!
Don't make an ending where the commit suecide and just before they die they see eachother and realise that they where never alone.
PLEASE
553409 well i won't be say that there will be a happy ending and everyone is alive again and yay and shit. no. but i can promise you resolve. and if you have been reading carefully you will realise that there is an antagonist in all this. everything will come together neatly. this story is written as a sort tragedy, so it is bound to be sad one way or the other.
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Whell I'll be wating for the next chapter
P.s. A fanfic where everybody lives and go yay? No thanks, that would just be wierd!
Awesome chapter! Can't wait for more
). Anyways, I'm sure that this story is in good hands, keep up the great work
553882 I'm glad that you're not making one of those endings. I hate when something bad happens and then someone licks a rock and everything is back to normal like nothing has ever happened (strange metaphor
558915 eyup, and because of the long hiatus, im working double hard to get the next part out, its already 1/3 done :D and i have a day off tomorrow, and LoL is broken so looks like i got some writing to do ^^
Great chapter!
Nooo, not Rainbow. Hopefully Twilight can fix that wing.
Why are you making it seem like Dashie is dying?.... you know that means you're not gonna have a good time right?
either way, excellent job with the story! also happy to see athe three reunited again!
Well fuck.
Interesting...
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES FIRST!!
This kind of sounds like a idea similar to end of ponies. Dont know if youver ead that or not.