Fruit bats don’t drink blood. However, when Twilight reversed the spell that turned Fluttershy’s usually timid nature into that of a vampire fruit bat, the transformation was already complete. The reversal caused Fluttershy to lose interest in the apples the fruit bats craved. Now, instead of sucking apples dry, she craves the blood of live ponies.
very good.
Thanks Indiana Jones! Glad you liked it!
Need a sequel
Awesome I love the detail you put into Fluttershy's transformation and the atmosphere. I actually loved this
I really like it. Flutters transformation and her use of the stare on AJ.
Poor AJ
This could be interesting. :)
Good one :)
I actually am thinking about doing a sequel to this, so I'm glad to hear people actually want me to do it!
For the EqD prompt, no doubt. This was really good ^^
bites =
real good! need more!
3706064 Your status update brought me here Misty Pie.
Anyways, great story! I love the dark eerie atmosphere here. The detail, the flow, and that cliffhanger of an ending. Keep up the good work!
Holy buck.
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I'm glad you liked it Sanderspie And a sequel to this would be cool
This is quite the dark ending. I believe you're the first one to make use of Fluttershy's stare in bat form.
This needs a sequel now! Don't let AJ die.
You used the word mussels as if you were mentioning clams. Although Fluttershy might have some at home, I highly doubt a herbivore apple farmer would have them. I believe you meant to say muzzles.
3712107 actually i meant "muzzles", like their noses... thanks for the heads up tho, will fix!
bravo
Excellent! I want to see more of this!
I hope Applebloom will stay alright.
And I wonder if Applejack is dead now or becomes a bat pony too?
I found a little typo at the end:
"She tried to lose her eyes but was unable to peel away from the penetrating stare of this vampire."
Do you still plan to continue this story?
Pwet pls continue storys
Alright! You guys win! I put up the new part! Hope you guys enjoy!
Now I'm beginning to wonder if Applejack is going to 'wake up' as a 'new' pony.
4327336 we'll see IF THE AUTHOR MAKES MOAR hopefully
4327428 Don't you worry! There will be more and it definitely won't take as long this time!
4327724 yay!
Whoa, I almost never read dark stories but glad so far I did. This is getting quite interesting. Though I admit I'm a little nervous to find out more.
O fuck.
Well, she went bat mode and drank up, what can I say?
~OreoKookie
Yes, I did enjoy it!
It wasn't recognizeable first that she had begun to suck Applejack's blood again, when she cried at her unconscious body, very well played!
I hope you release the next chapter soon and that you haven't lost your motivation, seeing how much time has passed since the last one!
Aww, poor AJ.
This is a good story I really hope it's not dead.
Yay!
Please make AJ a vampire too!!!!!!
The pacing is a little fast, but it's still a good story.
Oh my.
Continue PLEEAAASEE?! This is a good story and I really want to find out what happens to AJ. Really. You can’t just leave it here!