You ever had those days when you think the universe is out to get you? Well I'm one of those days right now and it seems that the universe decided to screw me over in a whole new way by sending me to a different world.
Oh but that's not the worst part. The worst part is that I was wearing a costume before I gotten whisked away and well...
Lets just say that it ain't a costume anymore.
Inspired by "Rise of Darth Vulcan" by RealityCheck, and credit goes to Uberdeathninja and his story "Malideus" for starting all this craziness.
Editor: NightmareKnight
Rated T for creative use of swears and gore.
On Hiatus due to horrible math grade and grounding. Expect update near the end of the month.
I will read this later. You have me interested just by the bloodthirster in your story pic.
woo! thats one hell of a story so far i love it! keep up the good works!
I really like this chapter
A 40k nerd wearing power armor in equestria would be more destructive than an actual space marine.
Needs some proofing;
"Scared executioner of Khourne"
YESSSS! Show them the power of chaos!
As a Chaos player, I offer some plot advice:
KILL! MAIM! BURN! KILL! MAIM! BURN!
Something you should have him say at one point:
"Our enemies hide in WOODEN BAWKSES, DA KOWARDZ! TEH FEWLZ!! We...*Asthma attack* We should take away their WOODEN BAWKSES!"
and:
"MILK FOR THE KHORNE FLAKES!"
3886309 Not a Bloodthrister, Tis Skulltaker himself.
Is this Skulltaker from Warhammer or Warhammer 40K?
Not that it makes a real difference. Just curious.
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Khorne him self!
I'm the worst chaos servant there is if I did not recognize the blood god.
That was pretty good, I hope you continue this I love it
I love how this whole genre started because of me... and realitycheck, to a lesser extent.
Oh, but I'm off on a tangent. Keep up the good writing, my good man! Take my favorite!
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*Snaps fingers* I knew I forgot to mention someone! I'll put in a shoutout for you next chapter for starting this whole genre.
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Thank you, it's always nice to be appreciated.
Write on, fellow author!
There needs to be a group about stories like this
Edit: Well what do you know. There is
Human randomly ends up in Equestria... check...
Human is a brony and loser... check...
All that's missing now is the human immediately becoming evil and all-powerful and starts slaughtering ponies to create the Unholy Trinity of Awful HiE fics.
I think I found another AWESOME story which has caught my attention...bravo, I shall watch this closely
p.s: WARHAMMER ROCKS! (Nids all the way)
3887490 Did you even read the story?
Okay, here is REALLY important question.
How did he just wave off the destruction of the TV? So all our guy needed was for Alex to start talking about how the amulet might be real... And then all of sudden he forgets that he still has a broken TV?
Other than that, pretty good, though I hope the quality will not only improve but there will be more interesting plot development.
That is what made me love Darth Vulcan, after all
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This guy made me laugh in a non-jackass way.
3887935 You have no idea how many fics have started out exactly like this one. Why this one is garnering so much attention is beyond me.
Heresy?
HERESY!
i.imgur.com/L2xRt.png
*BLAM*
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It's part of the recent "Non-Brony in a costume is magically transported into equestria and becomes an evil overlord" trend.
3888392 It's basically the same as all the wish-fulfillment HiE dark fics (you know, where the humans are immune to magic, automatically super-strong, faster and stronger with better survival skills than a Navy SEAL, or just outright become gods and exterminate all da ponies). Just now the humans are wearing fanboi cosplay.
Well, Skulltaker, Herald of Khorne is the picture...
Guess I better read this, due to my recent conversion to the Blood God.
(Just started a CD army :P)
NICE cover art and nice start to the story
still haven't been able to get through Malideus, have The Rise of Dark Vulcan and SO waiting to see where you take this
and I promptly lost it
totally agree with him there
20G for the winner of a costume contest? NICE!!!
loved the descriptions of the power suit
and seriously, your life long buddy is being sucked into interdimentional rift and you let go when he tells you to? some loyalty
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Why do you not embrace the loving plague father nurgle?
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Because I'm better.
Welp... It's been nice knowing you Equestria, yet our master calls. Blood for the Blood God! Skulls for the Skull Throne!
3889166 all is dust...
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Plaguebearers are my troops for my Two Bloodthirsters and 3 Daemon Princes of Khorne.
Because 3+ cover saves in trees and 2+ in Ruins is pretty swanky. (and, together, 2 squads of 10 is 180pts, and they make marines cry. I would know, my other army is the Ultramarines.)
EDIT: I also didn't want to paint 3 Green Daemon Princes. :P
And Nurgle smells funny, though I suppose it wouldn't matter after I lose the sense of smell...
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Good 'ol utrasmurfs
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That's 'Our Spiritual Lieges' to the rest of you!
very good read, but I'll put my 2 cents in. You need an editor man.
I like this, will follow.
Interesting.... I have been interested in these types of stories since I read RealityCheck's story, which is called The Rise of Darth Vulcan not 'Dark Vulcan', as you have it written in the story description. And definitely give a show out to Uberdeathninja's Malideus .... cause if it wasn't for this story, RealityCheck wouldn't have been inspired, thus you wouldn't have been inspired (and if we are being honest, I am being inspired by all three of you guys to write my own take on the 'human in badass costume terrorizes ponies' theme.... or even pull an M Night Shyamalan *aka, a TWEEST* and have multiple humans enter Equestria with some good, some bad, and some in the middle).
Anyways, keep up the great work!
Boring.
I'm quietly interested: he gonna be Chaotic neutral guy or went into full berserk of Chaotic Evil.
Well, gonna see this.
a skulltaker
THIS GON BE GOOD
I don't seize the day, I am the day. Wut.
Also:
MORE! FOR THE LOVE OF THE RUINOUS POWERS MORE!!!
This has great potential. It is well written and enjoyable though i would wish you had picked chosen or something like that as a Daemon maybe too OP for Equestria, especially a named bloodthirster.
Eagerly waiting for more.
WHAT?! A foul daemon NOT dedicated to the utter destruction of everything the God Emperor has built?! HERESY!
Good so far, but you could really use an editor.
Thumbs don't stop thumbing when you hit them, this sentence is incorrect and redundant. Try throbbing
Were would work better here
Sacred, maybe?
Decapitate this. and capitalize this
Replace gotten with got, or put a "had" in there
What did he use to buy the TV, Internet dollars?
Wrench, definitely wrench.
Say
Together is not its own plural, you need an "s" on the end of it.
Fifth correction from the top explains this, and there is a little green comma in Applejack's sentence, try to find where you didn't put it.
Twilight sighed in the past tense, that means that the rest of the sentence needs to do the same.
My suggestions on how to make this work better are red.
Again, were would work better here.
For continuity, I would change this to "any pain" as it makes no sense that he could feel like he was in a sauna, as well as nothing, at the same time.
Apostrophes are good, unneeded apostrophes are the epitome of evil.
I am honestly surprised that I was the first to do that, unless someone PM'd it to you. Anyway, this is remarkably similar to the idea that I had gotten from Reality Checks "The Rise of Darth Vulcan" except with less Warhammer and more Demon's Soul. Anywhozer I liked it, and if you don't continue it I will type mean words at you until you do.
Also, feel free to send me chapters for editing if you feel the urge.
3890831 I think it may be because you are the only one with an education who had the time to do this. I certainly don't have the time to be typing this message, and I should get back to work.
3889993 Or he could go like he still had a human mind, Lawful Chaotic Evil good neutrality xD
I've been thinking of how to describe humans, here's what I came up with: Pacifistic demons, chaos lords seeking world order, war-hating devils, corrupt angels.
Let's see where this goes.
I called it. This is becoming a genre.
Could have been worse.
He could have made a Keeper of Secrets costume instead.