Elusive has rejected Barb which causes her to be convinced that she's actually been Dusk's waifu all along. Now Dusk has half hatred & gratitude for what his friend Elusive has done. Because come-on, every nerd wants a waifu. No not a wife, a waifu. You hear me yah fu?
Well... I looked at the description and thought 'Hey, I kinda like this premise, Barb chases Dusk and Dusk is resisting, I'm okay with that, dood.'
"Reader Beware" comes to mind for some reason, dood.
For some reason i am trutly scared of reading this...
Okay. This was weird
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A story having attention deficit disorder ruins it... Throw random in there. I'm going to back away slowly...
*shrugs*
I got nothing.
4070807 Why's that ?
Well umm... between the bad references, cliché plot, and horrid pacing, the story is pretty much crap.
But the premise was interesting and I was kind of entertained by it so there you go. Very creative in the idea department, but the execution is lacking.
lol 10 likes? should have gotten 100 likes :P
Cute, great idea.....but way too much adhd added in there and needs to be slowed down.
what the actual holy motherfucking fuck did I just fucking read?
Way to go trahzo, keeping my expectations down since 2013.
Because that would sound so wrong if with Twilight and Spike?
I enjoyed the story itself. But I feel you should do more with it. Add details, maybe some more conflict with Barb getting over/dumped/rejected by Elusive. Or even Barb's attempts to be more "wife-like" such as always being overly flirtatious with Dusk or trying to sneak in the bath or bed with him. You've hit a gold vein so far, just keep digging in that mountain.
Your not the pokemon king cause Red is!
Oh. My. God! My first thought was 'the fuck' before i started sharing it with my friend XD Fantastic!
Wait isn't the same person that voice Ben also the same person that force Twilight? Well my mind is a little broke now.
Decent idea, but switching between present and past tense is horrible.
Decent concept, but the presentation gave me a headache. It's like a troll in script form.
Weird the dragons a resistant/ immune to magic was what I thought was what’s stoping them oh well works ether way