This is the story of one Mark Crow a seemingly normal eighteen-year-old in Equestria. Found by Celestia in a machine that had him frozen and protected from the ravages of time. However he is more than what he seems, I mean he did save the world.
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This story is looking good, but there are a lot of errors:
Should be "were".
Should be "planet's".
Should be "bodies, tiny"
Should be "fangs, wings; they were completely unremarkable,".
Should be "it, creating".
"eachother" is not a word, it should be "each other".
Should be "I'm".
Should be "honesty", "skeptical", and "in joining him: that there was magic".
Should be "expedition".
Wow. Just, wow. This is difficult to read. Break this up into multiple sentences, and it should be "wield".
Should be "too".
Should be "he; however".
Another quite long sentence. Should be "burst", "snake's", and "people's".
Should be "he felt. He".
You accidentally put two spaces.
Double space again.
Long sentence. Should be "a part".
Should be "its".
Love the intro. Part history part legend in the stories tone giving it a 'magic' quality, good job.
I don't know why, but I heard the song played during the opening cut scene of Legend of Zelda: Wind Waker, the one that plays during the recap in legend form of Ocarina of Time. This, in other words:
Holy F@#$ing Shit dude, that has got to be the most badass legend I have ever read from a fan fiction.
6639908 that or Donald trump dropping out of the elections
7115254 I see we have creature from darkness here aiming for total chaos.
THE LEGEND IN THIS FICTION IS REAL!