A mysterious pony appears on the outskirts of Ponyville one day. Lighting Dust and Trixie are walking together one day, and they find her unconscious on the side of the road. They start caring for her, only to find out her memories appear to be muddled, and nopony recognizes her. So, lead by a cryptic dream, Lightning Dust and Trixie try and find the mare's home whilst seeking revenge. Pinkie gets jealous, so she tags along to befriend this enigma of a mare.
Set before the season 4 finale.
Contains TrixieDust. (TrixieXLightning Dust)
No proofreader, pre-reader, or editor for lil' ol' me, so if and when you see a mistake don't hesitate to point it out! General feedback is always appreciated, negative or positive.
Chapters (3)
Tsundre x2 ?
Why so omg it's a pony.
*Tips Trixie over*
4828447 From a writing standpoint? I'd hope anypony would be shocked to see a passed out mare, more so with a possibly of a dead body.
From a narrative standpoint? I suck at set ups. I didn't know how to get Lighting and Trixie to care for a pony without it being OOC, (thus the dead implications) but I still wasn't able to do that.
I'll try and fix that.
My confusion meter is high on this chap.
Guess it felt forced.
*goes to relax brain*
Those personalitys.
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Do you have any tips for keeping them in character or making it not feel forced? I struggle with those.