One night Berry Punch came home one day drunk. She wanted to have an expensive alcohol she bought but she couldn't find it. In a rage she blamed it on her daughter Berry Pinch. When Berry Pinch said she doesn't have it. Berry Punch started to abuse her. Unknown to Berry Punch there was a grey pegasus that saw the whole thing.
Gore just in case.
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awesome story!!!!!!!!!!!
NO NO NO NO NO THAT IS A HORRID ENDING! SHE NEARLY KILLED PINCH! IT DOESNT MATTER THAT THEY FORGIVE EACH OTHER, AT MOST HE SHOULD REMOVE THE NEVER SEE AGAIN PART! BERRY WILL DRINK AGAIN, SHE WILL COME HOME DRUNK AGAIN, AND THERE IS A CHANCE SHE WILL BEAT PINCH AGAIN!
A bit short and sudden some chapters, but i would say make her getting a therapy at least and it should make more sense.Or someone who help her with her drinking behavior.
the reason why i left it the way it is, so you ponies can decide your own ending
my guess for the ending she stopped drinking( or atleast set a limit) and never abused her filly ever again. And Derpy stalks berry punch to see if she can find something else to snitch her out on.
4717027 U Mad Bro?(Trust me, after beating your child to near death, I'm sure it had to change her in some way, don't go all cap and rage, that's for five year olds who play Call of Duty :I)
4717746 may I remind you she does not remember anything? If she ends up drinking to much she might do this all over again, they should have banned her from alcohol if she MUST keep her daughter
4717646 It's whatever you want the ending to be.
4717935 agreed on that, alcohol is just a trouble maker and I think anything strong should be banned, and I mean IRL, not just for berry punch
That is... beyond ridiculous. That's not how the criminal justice system or childrens' services works at all. Or medicine for that matter. Breaking that many bones should have required multiple surgeries as well as lasting effects.
The ending reads like the cheap glurge even Jack Chick would reject. Forgiving must be tempered with reason, which a foal that young doesn't have; the court certainly owes her nothing and would be compelled by the rule of law to imprison her following a trial. A jury would have to decide if it was attempted murder, assault with intent or aggravated assault. All three certainly would apply. She'd get years in the slammer. And lose custody. Honestly, Pinchy would be better off as a ward of the Equesteian state than with Berry. She needs rehab and a lot of therapy and even then might still be unfit.
I only wish it was possible to downvote twice.
I'd suggest getting an editor/proofreader. I like the story, but it's kinda hard to understand...
I rarely down vote stories but the ending to this one was shockingly bad and uninformed. This is not how the court works at all in child abuse cases. At the very least Berry Punch would still go to jail for awhile but still be allowed supervised visits.
5592787 I was trying to was somewhat keeping with the my little pony theme where the pony learns a lesson and how they react. I agree it's not my best works but hey it was one of my first stories I made. An A for create.
Maybe longer chapters? idk
5592787
Well, keep in mind that this isn't Earth, it's Equestria and therefore court is probably going to be different.