Not much here to see, really. This is just here to make sure that anyone who reads this to completion knows that there is a sequel. Wouldn't want people to read this just to think that it's all over, when it isn't.
So, here's a link to the sequel. Enjoy.
And here be the link to the sequel's sequel. Enjoy that too.
AVANTE!
-Jet Howitzer
P.S. With this acting as my most popular story to date I figured I'd come here with a question regarding fan art. Namely, is anyone interested in making their rendition of Taupe? Seriously, he's gotten so little described about him, I'm interested to see what you guys can come up with. Just let me know if you're interested.
P.P.S. Rising Sun, the prequel to this, is undergoing a rewrite. Hopefully I'll be able to finish it this time.
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Aha I thought the word " I would give to you" was like trying to announce a title or something. Didn't expect it to be literally the title.
Is it really a sequel? I know it has a specific name in literature, when two stories are written, each one taking place during the same set of events and time period, but the only difference is the character it follows. The only example I can think of is "Ender's Game" and "Ender's Shadow". Just asking. Not trying to be a dick. Did I mention I'm pretty sleep deprived right now?
Red, Green, Yellow, Brown when bad.
THERE. THOSE ARE THE COLOURS OF APPLES.
STORY COMPLETE.
Puts a 57 word chapter. Gets featured.
FUCK SIR, you are a troll! I though there was seriously a new colour of apples ending!
1118536 Well, if you noticed in the beginning, I made it clear that he's been in town for a while. It's sudden in the plot of the story, but in terms of their relationship, he's known her for several months.
1132876 You're welcome! Hooray for author reply! Anyway, you should know never to look at the comments when reading a story. They're always full of spoilers.
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Usually one reads the story first then the comments (so that's your own fault), also it's not nice to be calling others names like that.
1137646 It has yet to be written, actually.
1152512 A Gary Stu is an example of a character that is perfect, or nearly perfect, in all ways. A Gary Stu never seems to meet a problem that he can't overcome, and he never makes any real mistakes.
1155925 Yeah, but where's the fun in acting in a rational manner? Half of the problems in life are caused by stupid decisions, and this is no different.
what did you do?
1222243 I DON'T KNOW! I edited the last chapter some, in order to put the link for both sequels, and now this! SRSLY! Don't know! Not that I'm opposed to it.
D:
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I thought there was a new chapter that I missed and I got excited by then I saw this and I realized that it was just a thing. Curse you Howdy
You stole someone's chance at the feature box asshole!
1222695 To be fair, I wrote Rising Sun well before I even knew of Cerulean1313. I have been watching him for some time, but I only recently got into reading all of his works. Rising Sun was my first attempt at writing a longer story, and so I wasn't exactly as creative as I probably could have been. Anyway, glad to know that I've got another person reading my story.
1226325 I do, in fact, know what you mean. Perhaps I know what you mean better than you know what you mean.
I claim upvote #500! Started reading only so I wouldn't be confused when reading the sequel but damn I have to say this was an amazing read. Thoroughly well spent time reading this, thanks for the opportunity. Time to start the sequel(s)!
...eh. It started out passable, but then the story went all Baywatch Nights and it fell flat for me.
It didn't help that Applejack spent about 2/3 of the story as a glorified body pillow. She's a brilliantly expressive character, but you didn't really tap into that at all. She was pretty flat for the first act, and for almost the entire second act she didn't even talk. She got abducted without a word, rescued without a word, and apparently got laid with barely a word. This is not a mare who'd sit down and shut up while the OC's did things (such as herself). She'd probably have taught the villains quite a bit of colorful vocabulary while foalnapped, snarked them mercilessly at every opportunity in captivity, beat the crap out of them herself at least once...here, she just didn't really come alive at all.
1245270 Hey. I ain't even mad.
1247161 Who? Red? It might just be too late for that. I've already got quite a bit of the sequel written, and so I make no promises.
Read in one sitting. I guess its my own fault, but I expected something totally different to come out of this. E.g. I was not expecting a grand adventure, something I avoid totally. Basically, I had no idea what I was getting into, and as such, I was surprised and disappointed.
Tldr is that I ended up reading a genre I don't enjoy because the synopsis never alluded to the depth of the darkness of the climax. Also, IMHO, the tags don't match. It at minimum needs an adventure tag added in.
-M@
1256533 What? What feels are we talking about?
made me think that I finally had a favorite update ONCE AGAIN. I was hoping for a different story because well... I like readingdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_sad.png
If I had any artistic ability at all I would help you out, Jet. As things stand, all I can tell you is that he has a brown coat. :3
Also as a side note, I thought immediately of this story when I recieved some Taupe dye in Guild Wars 2. So way to go, your story has impacted me enough to displace a color for relevance to a word in my mind
1256750 Don't worry, the sequels will be seeing plenty more updates over the coming weeks. I have some fairly grand plans for them.
1256761 That makes up for the false update any day
But for now, I'm re-reading Silent Ponyville
1116056 have you already forgotten about Zap Apples?
This Howitzer. Updates a complete story (3 weeks, mind you) by adding a few words to an "Addendum" and gets featured. How do you do it? Oh, I also love what you've done with the artwork it really adds a bit of continuity (can't find the right word...). You deserve a
I would be willing to try drawing Taupe, although my quality is mediocre since I'd be doing it by hand and then scanning it. I also probably can't get a drawing done until the weekend due to homework and such.
1259221 Hey, anything is fine by me.
1259389 I'll see what I can do
1266845 Fap fap. Yes, quite. Anyway, she was a virgin. I'm actually going to write the sex scene, probably.
1152519 Goddamnit it's MARTY STU! GET IT RIGHT!
1266869 Ask me if I care. Go ahead. Ask.
1266513 um late much!
1266877 Wow, rude much?
1266890 All of the rudeness. All of it. Wait... Sorry, you're not one of my regulars. I hope you enjoyed the story. Be sure to check out the sequels!
1266908 Is that...a Homestuck reference? Or am I overanalyzing it?
Anyway I did. But was she sexed up or put through the training? That is like...the one thing keeping me from really reviewing this. I need to know if I should bash my head in first to forget those mental images if so.
1266945 She wasn't touched during her time with them. They weren't stupid enough to do that, since she was reserved for somepony else. Refer to chapter eleven, in the diner. Taupe eavesdrops on a conversation.
As you can see, she was in special training for a client. No public use, and the trainers were keeping her a virgin for the client.
1266966 Thought by training they meant fucking.
So she DID go through the supposedly mind-crushing training then? If so, I'll need to bash my head, unless you want my review to consist of "YOU FUCKING MONSTER FUCK YOU YOU FUCKING FUCKITY FUCKHEAD FUCK YOU IN THE FUCK FUCK YOUR FUCK FUCK FUCK FUCK"
No seriously man I wanted to make a sidefic where he calls Big Mac and they go Rambo on their asses.
...Actually that's an awesome idea that I won't do. I can't ruin good things, now, can I?
1267000 She never got anything. Taupe's meddling (Them damn meddling kids!) prevented them from getting anything done. When he showed up at the warehouse he interrupted what they had planned.
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1267899 Your avatar.... It seems so familiar... I can't quite place it, but I feel like I've seen it before.
1272761 Sequel isn't done, so you know.
Ok, NOW it's time to read the sequel!
YOU DID IT AGAIN! HOW COULD YOU!? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_cry.png
you could use a blog or something like that so I don't get false hope for another story no matter how much I wanna read that next story
I feel violated.