After the Cutie Mark Crusaders get Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon in trouble in Cherliee's class, they decide to get their revenge. In the form of kidnapping Sweetie Belle's crush, Button Mash.
Is it illegal? Yes.
Will it be worth it? Maybe.
Will the CMC try to rescue him? Probably.
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Kind of short and sudden, not much substance to it. There's a few grammar errors in there, too. Like, for example, using 'to' instead of 'too'. Then there's the odd spelling of Cheerilee's name, for some reason, and she's referred to as a Mrs. at one point instead of a Ms.
All in all, the concept sounds neat, but the story itself could have done with some fleshing out.
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Button....how could you fell for that
Anyway ,great one-shot
Ignoring the fact that Button was a total idiot, he needs to beat those games without cheating!!! I'm can't believe him! But anyway, this was pretty funny. Especially the ending.
Well that was a waste of time on Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon's part, nothing to lose, nothing to gain (actually the former I am not so sure about, considering they got caught).
In my own personal headcanon, after the story finished, Button immediately screamed "I AM HERE AGAINST MY WILL!" And so Filthy Rich had to give his very special princess the talk about what kind of touching a proper young filly shouldn't be doing to a poor naive colt. You know, since the general consensus in fanfiction is that the gender roles are basically the opposite of Earth.
And then he bribed Button with lots of video games.
He is expected to be released from the hospital, and totally doesn't hold a grudge towards Button's mother for putting him there.
And thus began the road of very awkward Diamond Mash ships.
Cute story. Though one of Diamond's strengths is using insults that the CMC can't simply prove by asking somepony else. Just take the way they delivered their followup/recovery of Sweetie not being invited to go to Manehattan in Twilight Time, which only furthers Diamond's belief that Sweetie Belle probably can't be trusted at such important social events in fear of being embarrassed by her own sister.
I could see DT being barred from Carousel Boutique for just blatant lies about her. And nothing was mentioned as to whether they really did talk to Rarity and just twisted her words to mean something she didn't intend to be taken in such a way.
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Nice story in any case. Somehow I can totally see both DT and SS dating Rumble at the same time. Though totally oblivious as to why colts dislike him and fillies always wanna be around him.
Sweetie Belle and DT are most huggable ponies. I really like their manes~
there must be a part 2 to this! I DEMAND IT!!!
And the award for "Best out of context line" goes to...this fic.
Loved this fic.
Nice idea for a story but there are a lot of very basic mistakes. None are quite so jarring as the character switch there though.
This got funny the moment Sweetie decided to not do anything! Good story.
Apparently friends aren't worth saving.
I would show Miss C the note (ovs)
I wish We could hear her explanation for this!
4847877 Seriously though, whats the worst that could happen to him there?
I imagine it would go similarly to what happened in "a dog and pony show". The only question is: Which side would relent to the annoyingness first?
I can only imagine hat poor Filthy Rich is thinking.
Poor Button Mash.
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Okay... is it just me or has anyone else considered what Button's mom will do when she discovers her foal isn't in his room the next morning. We're looking at a frantic neighborhood search by the community, followed by an Amber Alert and a plethora of panicked ponies pursuing perceived perpetrators prolifically around Ponyville. No telling how long Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara will spend in juvenile hall. On the bright side, Ms. Cherilee's will be a lot calmer.
4853497 Maybe she'd be glad he got out of the house for once :P
Okay, what do you mean with the second paragraph?
I think they hit something else.
When did Sweetie Belle get there?
And is Button an OC, or a pony that was seen for very few frames? Would that not give him the "other" stamp instead of the "OC" one?
Y'mean gasped, not gassed, I believe.
Other than that and a few spelling errors… it's pretty good! I'll be off to read the sequel now.
Just found this. Excellent plot twist. You earn a favorite.
And moustaches.
4853497 His Mom is always trying to get him to go out and play. Not to mention she seems like the most collected and chill mom in ponyville. I doubt she'd ground him after Filthy Rich explains to her, in a reassuring and calm civilized explanation, that her son was perfectly safe and sound tied to hi daughter's bed.
<awkward silence>
"MY SUN HAS A FILLY FRIEND!? THAT'S MY BOY!"
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"WHAT DO YOU MEAN HE WAS TIED TO HER BED!?"
"Da stashe, Mom. It's just too strong against the la~dies."
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Worst case scenario, she'd just ground Buttons and have "the talk" with him and how only mommy and daddy are allowed to play with ropes.
*Silver Spoon*
duplicate posts?
Lool, that bait.
Pokeball - nope
Masterball-nope
CheatCodes- instant Button.
While there are several smaller problems, I like the thing overall. The kidnapping was priceless and the ending very entertaining. I wonder if the Stockholm Syndrome will set in soon, otherwise I don't see much romance here.
I tried to read it, but since I'm in the middle of editing another story, I couldn't get through the errors to enjoy the story. I am frustrate. raar.
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No, no, it makes perfect sense to gass in shock when you see something, well, shocking.
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Because Button Mash.
"It's Rapeing time." Diamond Tiara said in his ear.
How shocked was he that he nearly shit himself?
4995090 you just made that line even funnier for me XD
Two things made this priceless: The sudden jump to kidnapping and Filthy Rich finding Button tied down. A little too short for me, but still funny nevertheless.
I can just imagine this going down now:
*Van drives up.
Creepy guy: "Hey kid, I got cheat codes in my van. Come get 'em."
Button: "Oh boy!"
*Van drives off. Button never seen again.
4853497 ALLITERATION!!!
Cheat codes?
His mom didn't teach him proper gamer integrity.
Busted...!
Button Mash:
XXYABABX.
Don't tell anypony.
I love this story! It's halarious, can't wait for more:)
Mfg I'm lol'ing so flipping hard right now XDDD
Read your story XP
Short get the ending was hilarious with how awkward it was
What? Don't be sorry Scoots. It was an awesome tackle
We were playing a game!
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If you ain't cheatin', you ain't tryin'.