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The repetition of weather looks a little bit clunky. Maybe, "They would freeze up in an instant if exposed to this chill/gale/frost/blizzard," or something.
Kinda nitpicky, but for maximum impact, you could describe how bad the shock is to her, how much it hurts, etc. Every little details helps when building drama, I find.
Too.
Nothing wrong with it. I just thought it was a great piece of description. I know this feeling only too well.
Again, the repetition of the word.
Too.
Not entirely necessary to point this out. A simple indication of a scene transition taking place is enough. You know, one of these guys: *
By.
It's not often I have the pleasure of running into a word I've never heard before.
It's called a Stetson, if you didn't know.
Everypony.
Well, this is one of the most beautiful stories I've ever read. Sweet, adorable, and absolutely wonderful. Fluttershy and Applejack are delightfully in-character, and the whole scenario was really well-thought out and handled.
I almost feel like a monster comin' in and pointing out all these little flaws now. Almost.
FlutterJack. Who does that?
Thumbs up for creativity.
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4900653 Don't feel bad, i heartily thank you for doing so. If there is one thing in specific I hate that sometimes shows up in my writings, it's repeating a word like that. And I obviously don't catch everything when I'm editing, so I always appreciate others catching things. Although I do actually own a Stetson :P
I do really like the word calescent. Not only does most everything think it's spelled wrong, but it just sounds cool. I didn't actually know what it meant before reverse dictionary either.
4900655 Appleshy is a more common-ish pairing for people to like, there just isn't as much fan content for some reason. It's got a lot of art, just not as many fanfics. I sort of ship it myself. Well of course I ship it, I wrote this thing
4901015 Yeah. And why the hell did my comment get a dislike?
4901024 I have no idea. I've never really seen the point in downvoting comments unless it's really, really bad.
Really enjoyed this. Beeen a while sinc i last saw a Appleshy fic, just this morning was thinking that it would be cool to read a new one, or write one.
For a second there, I thought the description said "Fluttershy gets lost in a cold."
And I said "What? Is she sneezing everywhere?"
4901287 I READ MINDS!
4901326 She should probably end up with a cold after this, but that'd ruin the moment. Eh, Fluttershy sneezing would be pretty dang adorable.
An adorable and sweet Appleshy. I loved how the two interacted. It was calm and peaceful, just as I imagine the two would interact if they had a chance to spend time together.
Great work as always! Such a great read. I never realized how cute AppleShy actually was until now!
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Eh, I do it all the time, too. Doesn't help when you write and edit five minutes before going to bed.
There's nothing wrong with calling it a cowpony hat, of course, but I just didn't want to take the chance.
I'm gonna have to start using it now.
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LOL!
4902173 Yay! I always like it when people tell me that I've written them in character. It was harder with Fluttershy and AJ, but I'm glad it worked out well
4902903 'Tis much adorbs, this is true :D
4903792 I always wait a few days before editing and typically end up doing it on the weekends. Timing is everything
I'm kind of conflicted about this one. It's a nice fluffy story, but that's really all it is. Pure fluff without any real substance.
Additionally, the presence of the romance tag implies shipping, and while there is a healthy dose of friendshipping here and a dribble of subtext, I think the romance tag is false advertising.
I can’t in good conscience upvote for those reasons, but I see no reason to downvote either.
4919124 That's really close to what my EQD denial had in it too :P I was planning on going through this weekend (if I can get off my lazy bum) and fixing all of that. It's kind of bad when you forget to put a visible point in for story XD
Appleshy is best Applejack ship
5093044 Appledash is tied for it. Right now I'm feeling more cuddly, so yes, Appleshy is best Apple!Ship.
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True, AppleDash is really popular... but AppleShy is just so cuddly!
Warm fuzzies, warm fuzzies all around.
Awww! This was so sweet. I wish I had a special somepony to do the same with.
I was getting nervous when Fluttershy collapsed in the blizzard. I was like "nuuuu don't die!"
I loved it :)
aww so cute appleshy is so cute
So adorable, but I am disappointed in one thing. You missed a perfect opportunity: " 'sides, why would you want a hot apple?" That was the perfect opportunity to say something like "I already have a hot Apple right next to me."
You can has review!
Cute and sweet!