A Day in the Life of Lunar Night Is a similar story and a better one in my view that I ended up writing. Please read that one.
I'd advise to not read this story. Other than the cringe, I wouldn't really recommend this story to anyone lmao. For my first story, I'm not really that proud of this one. Also, that's why above this, I mention the Lunar Night story because it's a much better version.
If you still decide to read this crap of a story then just keep reading the story description before going onto the story itself.
Heads up No.1: This story isn't perfect I know. This was just a really silly random idea I decided to come up with so just keep this in mind if you decide to read this anyway.
At best this story is like a 5/10. I just wouldn't want somepony wasting their time expecting to read something good when it's not.
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Heads up No.2: If the idea of humans turning into ponies isn't your thing then you can continue on looking elsewhere for something different.
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This story makes use of the Random tag a lot
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This isn't your usual or normal Human-to-Pony story, this is a really random Human-to-Pony story with a twist.
What happens when you see a shooting star? You make a wish! Even if doesn't come true anyway.
But, in this story, it does. See, my friend and I decided to do just that while Star Gazing and wish to be ponies as a joke. Then when morning came, we wake up to realize that it came true and now we're the ponies that we wished for.
Oh, and we had a shopping trip to get pony merchandise planned that same morning.
So, now aside from that, we have to get used to our new bodies while being extremely happy that we are ponies, have fun annoying my mother, deal with the haters, the fans, and just what is the deal with that crazy pet pony lady that keeps stalking us wanting to be her pet ponies?
Oh! And you can't forget little girls because they just love ponies. But, we will get this shopping done no matter what.
Then at the end of our shopping trip, we both find out why the wish came true in the first place.
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'Other Tag' is for Thunderclap and humans.
Hey you wrote something!!!!
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But is it decent and super random though? XD
I had this idea for months now and I'm just putting this in story form
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I haven't read it though... I just saw the name and thought Is the to my DaringDo? turns out it was
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Oh ... hehe
well, I can't wait to see what you think of it though when you do.
They make such a cute couple
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Which is me in the story (Victor/Thunderclap) and my friend (William/Thunderlane)
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That's sweet
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Yep
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Just saying it as a complement
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Okay.
Good story so far
I'm glad you chose me as your grammar editor though, otherwise the criticism wouldn't be as good xD
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Hehe
thanks 
This is good
FAV
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Thanks
anything in it that you liked so far?
hmm, interesting
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ok, i'll give it a read!
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Yay
hopefully it's random enough 
5124952 i just read the prologue.
ok, i'm no fic expert but i think you need an editor and a proofreader.
(i think everypony does at some point)
it's not a bad concept, i mean, a gay couple and Pony TF?! I'm totally in!
but yeah, you could improve a little.
So, there. Maybe i'll read the second chapter...
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Kinda odd since I had two different people go through both chapters to edit and whatnot
but alright.
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That's IMO
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It's alright
I have at least 4 to 5 more chapters planned for this story so hopefully I can do better then.
5125029 Okie! you just got yourself a like and a favorite, Sir or Madame!
I expect big things from you!
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I'm a guy
and thanks 
Hopefully I can deliver on that since I was hoping to do a one-shot sequel to this depending on how good this story gets.
Oh, and the two guys in the story are me as Thunderclap and my friend as Thunderlane
5125063 yeah, i could see that
Edit post chapter 2: That's a PRETTY understanding mother
I must say that it does indeed feel a little weird that the mother is waaaaay okay with that. And also the fact that she somehow knows how to instantly adapt everything to be pony-friendly. But hey, it's not a bad fanfic. I'm actually looking forward to the next chapters. ^^
The only thing I suggest you do is take a little longer to detail the place and the dialog. There were some parts which I read that were just like cutting butter with a warm knife. You need to try and keep the focus of the reader on the story. For example, instead of "She set the brush down", you could write "She set the brush down on the sofa, with a few lightning-blue hairs entangled in it". It's a longer action, and therefore helps the reader picture the scene better, trapping his attention.
Well, that's it for my critique. Again, looking forward to the next chapter! ^^
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Haha, in less than an hour at that
it just felt much easier to write it that way instead of having her mad at us that we became ponies and having to take longer in getting used to that.
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I really felt like going in that direction that she would be just fine with it after a little while even to the point where she wouldn't mind being a pony too because it felt easier for me to write that
instead of " 
MY SON IS A PONY?! 
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Just how?! " XD I'm glad you like the story 
Also Thunderlane and I getting used to our new bodies might seem kinda quick, but, I hope that I was able to explain that part just a little in the letter scene until I explain it better at the end of the story
Okay, I can change that brush scene to how you said it and look it over again to see if I can add more to it. As for the other parts where you said that were just like 'cutting butter with a warm knife', is it possible if you can message me those parts? And then I can take another look at them and see just how I can make them better
This story is really making use of that 'Random' tag especially in the next chapter
expect the unexpected because in the chapter in which Celestia and Luna explains why they did it in full detail, it'll leave you saying 'What?' 
This isn't your normal Human-to-Pony story.
First bold is just "wat". Feelingception lol.
Second bold is confusing. I mean, he had a pretty awful morning so far, getting his iPod to explode and landing face-first on the ground. Unless you were trying to be ironic, in which case it makes sense.
I'm just highlighting this part because he really thought of all that really fast. It feels kinda unnatural to have a thought train like that.
If it were me, I'd do something like:
"Wait... Is that... Are you... Are you Thunderclap?"
"Sure am! And you are Thunderlane!"
"What?" - William threw the covers to the other side of the room and looked down only to find a pony body in the place of his human body - "I'm Thunderlane! Oh my god!" He looked at his his butt: "I have a cutie mark on my butt!"
And you'd continue from there. This way, it spaces out the train of thought and makes it feel more natural.
Again, OMG at the speed of his thoughts! I think it would be interesting if both Thunderlane and Thunderclap came to the conclusion using a dialog.
The bold part is something that doesn't make sense. How can he know Equestria exists just because he turned into a pony? I mean, the shooting star could have made them the only two ponies in the entire Universe. It's a bit hard to realize that, but since it is you that's writing the story and you know that it was the Princesses that turned them, you automatically make the characters inherit that thought. And this is not very interesting, because that could be a possible hook for some suspense, drama, or randomness. If I wrote that, I'd make them very confused about all that, trying to come up with all different sorts of possible explanations of how the transformation happened, and finally make one of them notice and point out there's a letter on the top of the table.
Again, the only characters in the story that know about the cameras are the Princesses. They didn't mention any cameras in their letter either, so what made Thunderlane think that there were hidden cameras all over the place? He couldn't possibly have that thought, so I'd recommend him thinking something else about the letter.
I think that this proposition would have been better put by one of the ponies instead of the mother. She couldn't possibly go from "Oh, my son is a pony" to "Let me use his pony name". As far as we know, she probably doesn't know that they have pony names, so it would be a long shot of an assumption for her to say that. Yes, I'm thinking that the mom might be a little too OP for this story. XD
When you have just two persons talking to each other, it's okay to put a line after another line because we know that the other is talking. That doesn't apply to more than 2 persons, though. I mean, who said the last two phrases? I have no idea.
Besides, instead of having two "Nope!", you could have put:
"Nope!" - said the mom and Thunderclap in unison.
Just feels a little bit better to read.
He went from thinking about the saddlebag stuff to the episode instantly. It really disconnects the actions. That could be avoided by putting some actions between those two lines, like Thunderclap looking over to the iPad and then asking the question, because it justifies the hook to that thought.
Okay, that was a bit of a turn down for me. I don't know why, but it somehow feels awkward to have his mom turn into a pony too. If the adventure is all about Thunderlane and Thunderclap, then bringing up the idea of having someone else as a pony is a little bit distracting. (Of course that if another pony joins the story, it'll be okay, though.)
Who said that? :v
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Anyways, I hope you take what I said about your story into consideration to improve it. You have the potential to become a great writer, but you need to work on what I said to you first. ;)
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Okay to answer your reply in parts
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First part: I changed it around some so I don't have to use 'felt' and 'feel' at the same time XD hopefully it's worth it.
As for the Ipod Touch ... I actually smashed it with my hoof
, but I was so pissed about being woken up that I didn't catch on that I was a pony until I fell off the bed and started speaking while rubbing my face. Hopefully that made some sense? 
But, I did add on to that part also so readers can know I'm talking about being a pony rather than being ironic 
Second part: Oooooo! can I use what you just said? >.< XD I can mention you in the author's note. I'm surprised I didn't think of something like that but I know I can do better about him realizing he's Thunderlane.
when I had it planned to be revealed to me and Thunderlane at the end of the story XD so I fixed that.
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Third part: About the camera... I have no idea why I made that mistake
About her calling us by our pony names, I changed that around so it was me asking that
The part about her wanting to brush my mane and tail, I fixed that up too so it can be easy enough to tell who's saying what.
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Fourth part: From the saddlebags straight to the episode, I added more so that part can make sense ... hopefully
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Fifth part: About her becoming a pony, while I did have thoughts about making her one, I decided to just do that in the Epilogue if I do one. Now in the letter scene a third person was mentioned so there will be another pony appearing in the story later on ;)
But I did add on so it looks like she still hasn't decided yet like this:
- Her face reddened. "Why did you have to go there? Eh, nevermind, I haven't even made up my mind about being a pony anyway so lets talk about something else like what happens now?" -
My mother said "Fair enough."
so I fixed that.
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So hopefully I fixed up everything
XD
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Haha
poor Thunderbutt.
Ermegerd! That bit with "Free Falling" was awesome!
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I'm glad that song was made XD because it gave me the idea to come up with that scene XD
I love it! can't wait to read more!
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I'm happy you love the story
this story only has 3 chapters left.
And tomorrow I'll start on Chapter 4.
awesome. will there be a sequel?
maybe have thunderclap and thunderlane visit Equestria for a little while.
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Well... this is where it gets really random
I was thinking of doing a one-shot comedy, random sequel fic where Thunderclap (Me, since I'm self-inserting myself) goes to Equestria to stalk and bother Daring Do since she is my overall favorite pony XD
That idea came to me a few weeks ago and aside from that, I can't think of anything else to write for a sequel to this.
That's some interesting mental magic happening to them...
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Um... which parts exactly?
Well, I meant what parts made you say that?
5282036 The reactions/interactions between Rumble and Thunderlane.
And I suppose the general reactions of the citizens on a whole, but that one is different. Don't ask how but it is.
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It may seem odd that Rumble and Thunderlane bonded that quickly yet not knowing each other as humans, but, I really wanted to do that to make it cute. I'll just explain it in better detail when I post the Epilogue.
As for the reaction of the other people... well... since this story is taking place where MLP:FIM obviously exists I wanted to do a mix reaction of surprise, happy and anger and just 'what the..?'
instead of just sticking to mostly just one reaction which would get boring fast.
Other than Celestia and Luna using their magic which changed some stuff on Earth which explains how some people were aware of our presence to other crazy things happening.
But all will be explained including my idea behind this whole thing in the epilogue
For the people who disliked my story ... is it too much to ask as to why you didn't like it?
I know my story is in the middle of the road between great and bad... but, really, I would like to know why you hated it from your point of view... but, I guess that's too much to ask for... I want to be that type to accept your reason so yeah.
Ok, here is my Review of this story, first of all, it felt really rushed! I felt the pacing was kinda messed up here and there and not to mention the shameless sighs that this is a bad fan fic, BUT!!!! I didn't hate it, I found a certain charm to it, its like a bad movie that you still really like, I found the ending was very weird and felt... Meh is the only word I can find to describe it, the main problem you had was the characters were simply too cool, yes that is a thing, they had no big flaws and felt flat, but all and all I enjoyed it and hope I run into more of your work in the future
5-10
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I know people will think of this story differently. But, I accept your reason.
I might seemed rushed only because it was my first story and all and some people might think "This story would be better if the transformation happened like 2-3 days after me and him made wishes." And it's true that I was thinking that, but... I just didn't have that mind set to come up with other things that can happen between the night of the wish and the day my friend and I transformed so I can make the story longer and not as rushed.
And the other problem that was brought up to me was that: I made it too easy and my mother so quick to accept
as for that .... well, I will admit that yes I did only because I really wanted her to be happy enough in this story so I did what you ended up reading... I really liked it anyway 
as for the 'Easy' part. In transformation stories when a human ends up as a pony they usually learn how to walk in the first chapter and if it's a pegasus then, make a real attempt to fly in a later chapter which I did in Chapter 3 which is alright, but I know I could've done better. In my thoughts of making this I decided to just have me and Thunderlane already know how to fly as normal Equestrian ponies after Celestia and Luna used their magic on us ... if that makes any sense. In the end in Chapter 1 I only made it so we can only fly a bit and then in Chapter 3 really do some flying while between Chapter 5 and the Epilogue we really learn all the basics from RD.
The Epilogue was more of a revisit some of the other people, my mother, and just a recap of what happened during the time in Equestria so I guess it can seem weird
This story was a really simple one that I wanted to do which I'm surprised that it even passed 27,000 words.
and can't forget super random since I'm a really random guy so I decided to use that tag a lot in the story.
I still plan on doing a one-shot sequel to this I hope.
And I also decided to do a different take on this story where I transform into a different pony. Some of the things from this story will be in that one but, overall, it'll be different for the most part and not as easy as this one and hopefully longer. In that story I decided that I'll transform into Blueblood so hopefully I can add some comedy also
because a few months ago he was one of the choices I was going to use to make this story.
But, thanks for your thoughts on this and the score
since you're only one of a few people that would take the time to do this and I'm glad you enjoyed it still 
hopefully you'll enjoy the other ones I write when I do.
5463148 Blueblood would be a good idea as long as you write him well, be careful Prince Blueblood is the hardest character to write while keeping him in character and keeping him not being hated
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Well, with only "The Best Night Ever" to go on I shouldn't have a hard time writing him. Now, I do want to assume that maybe at some point after that he apologized with us not knowing. Which makes things interesting because in the story I would want some of the humans bring that up to me about what he did to Rarity while they throw a cup of soda at me for being a douche or something XD
Basically I would rather have fans and haters of him to make the story interesting. And at the same time I can act just like him while since it would be me transforming into him, my personality would stay as well instead of a transformation where my personality would cease to exist.
Also, I plan on this being a story where the real Blueblood will be in it and I'll just look like him and make things awkward
and I know just how to do it.
But, only time will tell if this shopping story ends up being better than the original or not.
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Sounds like the beginning of the gala song.
I’m liking this story better than the Lunar Guard one.
Dawwwwwww!!
I would have done the same. Foals are just so cute!!
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AHHHH AHAHA!!!
Oh please describe her as this!!!
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I can't believe you like this cringy as hell story of mines