Eons ago, fiends fought over six crests that were forgotten by time, and ponies took over since then. The Tree of Harmony has been destroyed, and the Elements the branches held were nowhere to be found. None could pin a culprit to this heinous crime. When Twilight receives a half-blank book that's illegible, she gets attacked by a creature seen not by her eyes before.
Would the book, illegible as it is, as well as the first battle that would serve to thrust her into more battles to come and unanswered questions, have something to do with the missing Elements of Harmony?
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Crossover with Demon's Crest, wherein crossover elements will play out much more heavily in later chapters, as will the dark element. Tags will change as needed. More vivid battle scenes, but not too vivid, will show up later on in later chapters as well. Coverart done entirely by me. Updates will be irregular.
I’m not ready to vote yet, but I am interested.
And, I admit, was surprised to see someone writing a Demon’s Crest crossover.
5117212 I understand. I will work on this when I'm not working on my novel; updates will be irregular. I hope you can wait a hefty long time or something.
"Backside" may not be the word you want to use, since it refers to the hindquarters. Amusing though that image is.
Congrats, Twilight Sparkle. You have survived your first boss fight.
5197163 Yes. Edit: changed it to midsection, since that's where the wings are.
5197163 actually her second. Remember Twilight Sparkle and Tireck
5232532 No, first as of this story. Tirek is only mentioned; there is a difference.
5232565 Ooh
5232569 Yeah.
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That wasn't a boss fight; it was a cutscene. If her friends had not been present as hostages, we'd be calling her the Princess of Curbstomping.
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Alright, metroid_freak here, commin’ at ya with his first review in quite some time. Only got one shot at this so we’re gonna do it right (hopefully).
Ahem!
Here we have a Demon’s Crest/MLP crossover, written by DragonBorne Fox. It’s not complete as of this review but we’re gonna see how it’s progressing thus far. Now, I am not familiar with Demon’s Crest but I’ll do my best to do this story justice.
Right off the bat, we’re treated to some good old-fashioned Apocalyptic Doomfire (dibs that for my next red and black alicorn OC name). Of course, seeing as it’s a crossover with something called “Demon’s Crest”, it certainly fits. I like the mirroring going on here; crests=Elements? Guess we’ll find out as the story progresses. I also like the world-building here; to the point but still an effective hook. Grammar is on-point as well, though I might omit the third use of ‘fiend’; the narrative flows much better and we still know who and what you’re talking about.
One crest to rule them all and in the darkness, bind them.
Or something.
More explanation and history lessons; the collision of these two universes feels…natural? They seem to work well together as Demon’s Crest evolves into the MLP universe. Again, just an early impression. Also, not sure if I like the word “inexplicable” here. I might’ve gone with “unmentionable”; just gives off more apocalypse-level “they were huge assholes to everyone and deserve to rot forever in the Pit” vibes.
Saying “No anything” makes sense here but I would actually italicize “anything”; by doing so (making it stand out), it sounds much more purposeful and less like a typo.
The most interesting fact out of this exchange was that, of all creatures, Owlicious was the one to retrieve the book. If that was intentional (which I suspect it was), then you have my attention. It begs a lot of questions; did he just happen to find it while hunting for midnight snack-rodents? Or did he power through Hell itself like Dante? Whatever the reason, it should be interesting.
The book being blank/illegible is also great because it’s gonna drive Twilight crazy.
More questions! Why is everyone going bonkers? What’s driving ponies to drink this time? Also, no need to capitalize "she" after asking her question.
So, Twilight gets mysterious book, confusion ensues.
A wild…thing appears! And rather conveniently after sending the letter, hmm? The last time I saw something like that beast was either Devil May Cry 3 or 1. More questions!
I actually really like how Twilight’s first reaction is “Let’s dance, baby!”
The fight scene was easy to picture; I imagined it in a similar style to the Season 4 finale. That stone transformation spell was interesting, although I wonder if it’s not just a side-effect of being defeated. Did Twilight want to vaporize it or did she just want to subdue it for possible study later on? Still, just in case said finale wasn’t convincing enough, we have re-established Twilight’s rep as a badass. Purplesmart demands all the street cred.
And with that, we have the prologue in the books. It’s solid and interesting thus far, although it leaves a lot of questions to be answered. The real test of the author’s mettle will be answering those questions and leaving no stone unturned.
Expect more as the story progresses!
5596745 I see. :D I'll do your story sometime next week.
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I'm glad you found it helpful! Looking forward to your review of mine as well.
5603707 Oki. :D
Its funny. I watched a Demon Crest 100% Run like last week. And now I find this.
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Can't wait for this to be finished!
This looks interesting!
6395530 ^^
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Indeed.
Have you thought about continuing the story?
10093051 Yes. But it's one of those "how the fuck do I go from here?" moments that kept it on a standstill for so long.
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Have you thought about restarting history?
10093157 Yes.
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I could give you suggestions, but if it doesn't convince you, ignore it:
It would be located in an equestria where it falls into a curse due to the destruction of the tree, the elements of harmony are lost in the process, but for a strange reason, the six mane merge creating a kind of hybrid demon-alicorn, possibly due to The Curse that hits Equestria, this amalgam of the six mane is ready to recover the elements to become the alicon and possibly the most powerful demon in Equestria.
10093188 Hrm... alright. That could work...
Keep going. I LOVE IT!!!