The Break-up

by DawningAegis

Chapter 8

Adagio was the most unfamiliar in her new form. Over the time being banished to the other world, she has grown accustomed to her human body, moving it to entrance. Now, in a form she has never experienced, she screamed for a straight five seconds. She lifted her hooves to her eyes, looking at her tail, unsure of what to do with her new form. Aria and Sonata tried their best to calm her down, which helped slightly. Aria and Sonata helped her up to her hooves, and she remained in a steady balance. Upon taking a step, she immediately fell to the ground, causing a slight giggle amongst her bandmates. She decided that she would lean on Sonata for support, who would occasionally dash to something with realization that Adagio was balancing on her, causing her to trip and make Aria roll her eyes with a smile. Adagio would sometimes attempt to move her fingers, hand have a stab of disappointment when she only felt the singular hoof that was her replaced hand. This disappointment was something that made Sonata and Aria uncomfortable, as if Adagio was so accustomed to her human body that she would be in that than anything else.

"What's going on?" Sunset Shimmer entered the room to see the three bandmates together, happy to be there.

"Oh hey Sunset! Figured out that spell?" Aria asked, waving a hoof.

"Your timing couldn't be better! We are finished with the research, and we figured out what we can do to change the effect of the pendant. There is only a single question I need to ask."

"Which is?"

"Do you want to be as your original Siren form or be as a pony in Equestria? And if you want, push this form back to the other universe?" Sunset's offer was almost insulting.

"Sunset, I think we would prefer our new forms compared to the Siren form. I feel like some of us don't want to go back there, and some of us can't go," Aria described, painting who was who with a motion of her hoof. Adagio made it almost too clear she would not stand her original form, and Sonata shivered at the thought of returning.

"Okay," Sunset stammered, realizing her offense,"I'll go with Twilight to get the spell started. I suspect you'll be needed in a couple of hours."

"Okay, you need anything from us, we'll be helping Adagio with trotting." Aria then turned to Adagio, taking small steps then falling, then getting back up.

"How do you manage?" Adagio asked, puzzled by how Aria and Sonata learned to move as a quadruped so easily.

"I don't know, but it was pretty easy." Sonata either didn't know that Adagio was wanting her old form or impossibly hid that she knew.

"Anyway, I think I should figure this new pony thing out," Adagio planned, seeing what she can do for what time she has.

"And we can get tacos!" Sonata cheered, jumping into the air.

"They have tacos here?"

"Of course they do!"

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About three hours later, the three Sirens gathered around Twilight, who stood solemnly still. She was with pinpoint focus, connecting the pieces of the spell. The Dazzlings were to remain still, which was no challenge for Adagio and Aria, but Sonata started to gather some anxiety.

"Adagio?" a little voice squeaked out from Sonata, not wishing to disturb Twilight.

"Yes Sonata?"

"What if it doesn't work?"

"We both know that it will work. Sunset Shimmer and Twilight Sparkle would only do this when they knew for certain it would work," Adagio comforted, winking at Sonata. This made her smile. A loud sound came, like the strike of a ponysmith's hammer. It echo'd throughout the room, which was rather large. The Dazzlings were on the opposite side of the entry, while Twilight was in the center. Sunset Shimmer watched from afar, making sure that the Dazzlings followed their queues. When that sound came, all of the Dazzlings froze into a standing position with their eyes closed, mouths frowning slightly out of anxiety. Twilight had three light blue sapphires shaped and sized like the original pendants that they wore, and they were slowly orbiting Twilight. They got faster and faster until a light blue blur went around Twilight as she started to float into the air. Suddenly, she spoke.

"O, Elements of Harmony! I require your aid!" Twilight's call spawned what the would be Elements of Harmony. She somehow was able to call on them without the aid of her friends, although very weakly.

"To Sonata, I create this pendant so you may require sustenance from spreading the Magic of Friendship through your song. I enchant thee with the power to call on the Element of Laughter!" Sonata floated into the air, the blue representation of her element bouncing around her.

"To Aria, I create this pendant so you may require sustenance from spreading the Magic of Friendship through your song. I enchant thee with with the power to call on the Element of Loyalty!" Aria then floated after Sonata, her element orbiting her.

"And finally, to Adagio, I create this pendant so you may require sustenance from spreading the Magic of Friendship through your song. I enchant thee with the power to call on the Element of Magic!" Adagio rose, going higher than Sonata and Aria.

"LET THY SONG BE HEARD!" Twilight shouted, the gems that were around her stopping and speedily moving onto the necks of the Dazzlings. They were tied to them as soon as they touched them, in which they began to sing. Their voices were load and clear, being much more invigorating and valorous than their previous deceitful tone.

"Let these Sirens be redeemed from their past, and let them bring their Song to one and all!" The gems on all three of the Dazzlings sparkled, bringing a new feeling to them all. They raised their voices of their song. They we surprised, but then decided that this blessing should be appreciated, and they began to seek the Magic of Friendship. Not out of spite, not out of need for Equestrian Magic, but to spread it and renew it.

"What now Adagio?" asked Sonata, barely floating off the ground with her base.

"We make amends for what we have done. We will show that we have changed, and we will be strong for what will come." Adagio looked around, getting nods of approval from Aria and Sonata.

"Strong for tacos?" Aria cut in, bringing the humor to the table.

"I hope so. Let's go grab some before we go," Adagio snickered.

"Agreed!" Sonata said in a loud voice. After their delightful dinner, the three reformed sirens looked to each other, smiled, and went to the portal. They now went to the opposite world, not banished, but free. Reformed. With a whole new view. Whatever came at them, they would not face with deceit and lies, but with honesty and integrity. They stepped into their human bodies, smiles on their faces.

Comments

[TonyTheMage]

"But I didn't say bye!"

[Clocklike]

I'm sorry, but I didn't like it. At all.

I'm a shit reviewer, so I can't explain in details why I feel this way.

It just... felt so non-canon, convenient, OOC, WAY too fast paced, a lot of tell-don't-show, forced out situations for plot convenience and some spelling mistakes (but that's not really the issue).

Well, it wasn't all bad, as I gather that you're 100% novice at writing fiction.

...

I wasn't joking when I said I sucked at making reviews.

[The Lunar Rebel]

This was quite an enjoyable read; of course I agree with Clocklike on the pacing part, but it was still a good story anyway

[DawningAegis]

5176419 Yep. I agree with everything you said about it. I only just started free writing, and I did make things way to convenient for my characters. I am going to work on this. I feel like I could have done better, but I soon decided that I just wanted to get it done rather than enjoy writing it and giving it some sort of conflict. Maybe I should experiment with something that already has a good conflict.

[Morning Dusk]

5176390 what do you mean how do I know?

[Morning Dusk]

Whelp, I'm (sadly) only expecting one or two more chapters out of this.

[DawningAegis]

Thank you everybody for the support! I only wish that I could have made a better story.

[SnowFallMLP]

Will there be a sequel to this? You kinda left us at a cliff hanger... what happens next? Do the people accept them or ar they still afraid?

[DawningAegis]

5191793 There will defiantly be a sequel. My problem is that I have school and there are some time issues, but there will be a sequel at least by the end of 2014

[SnowFallMLP]

5193802 Yay, and i feel the pain, i have school (being a seventh grader and all :/ ) and it is hard to keep up with stories. Do take your time /)

[DawningAegis]

5220539 1.) English is my first language. I do make tons of mistakes because I'm not even in High School. 2.) I think that handling characters like the Dazzlings and the Mane 6 was a poor choice to start with, since knowing their real characters is quite difficult, and that may be why I made then hellbent on doing good. I also feel as if I come up with more concept than execution. I know I could have made this better, it's just that I didn't really know how to handle it. 4.) I get it, pacing is my problem. I think I need to find something that I just can't shove along.

[Csquared08]

This was... bad. I liked the concept. I like where you tried to go with the concept.

But the pacing was absolutely dreadful. You really needed to just take your time and take things slowly.

To help fix these problems, I strongly recommend finding an editor. A quick group search for "editor" should turn up a lot of places offering help.

[DawningAegis]

5220846 Thank you for the feedback. I know some people who can help me out on editing.

[Wonder]

Ok, I'm just gonna say it. THAT ENDING WAS SHIT. Don't get me wrong I loved the rest of the story but, seriously, since when has there ever been any reference to twilight being able to summon the EoH without here friends... And I was disappointed at what you did with the dazzling instruments... Just...no.

[DawningAegis]

5238261img3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20140423034814/roblox-apocalypse-rising/images/thumb/2/2a/Anchorman-well-that-escalated-quickly.jpg/500px-Anchorman-well-that-escalated-quickly.jpg All seriousness, I agree. I rushed this out too quickly to actually have good pacing/a good ending. There is a lot that can be improved on. But I am gonna say that I think I did well since I'm only in 8th grade.

[Wonder]

5246858 only eigth grade? Well good shit bro. I'm finished school and I can't come up with better stories. Good job.

[jaroslav]

"Sunset, I think we would prefer our new forms compared to the Siren form. I feel like some of us don't want to go back there, and some of us can't go," Aria described, painting who was who with a motion of her hoof. Adagio made it almost too clear she would not stand her original form, and Sonata shivered at the thought of returning.

There is nothing bad about being seapony. And i am surprised they were even able to change their species. I bet such a dark magic is forbiden.