Subject 27 is a dark, gritty, action packed and slightly sad story that revolves around a small boy possesed by a deranged demon. The poor child grows up to be a soldier of fortune and eventually is hired by a military scout interested in his particular set of skills. During his service, the man who will become Subject 27 is sent into the pony realm by a military test gone horribly wrong while nearly wiping out all of his memories of his entire life. Join Subject 27 on his adventures through the world of Equestria as he tries to reclaim the memories of his past while fighting for his life, love, and future.
Liked it, i will be tracking
this should be interesting...can't wait for more mind f**ks
hopefully will make more sense later...
so the name of the pony controlling the facility is Dr. Helping Hoof? (doesn't he work at the ponyville hospital?) where is this? who is this shadowy being who's riding in subject 27's mind? and what does he want?
never mind, don't answer those, I'd rather find out as the story progresses and experience more awesome mind f**k moments
okay, you've gone from mind f*ck territory, to whatever's higher then that, is it mind rape? no that's something else, but whatever the term for it is, keep doing whatever it is that your doing
can't wait for more
I think he just skull-fucked your soul with that story.....mine too for that matter.
Wow, I'm getting some serious Bioshock vibes here, and not just because of the expressions and phrases you lifted from the game.
Holy sh*t.
523090 I, instead , Lol´d at the Half life 2 pun...
nicely written... but I think Im going to back away slowly...
Glad that chapter 4 is getting the reviews I was looking for, it will be a tough act to follow after writing 4. I'll try my best to get 5 out before Sunday, I'm currently working 3 different jobs so what ever free time I have I've been writing the story. Currently at a writer's block in 5, Not knowing what direction to take with it. But I can till you all this though, there will be giblets
Looks good so far.
unholy shit!
yay for soul contracts
this is some good shit right here bro. keep em coming at the pace you can manage cus this story has my interest in a fucking vice
I'll be releasing a censored version of "Return", I've gotten a few emails asking for one, I'll still keep the uncensored one as well. And thank you guys and gals for being patient with me, chapter 5 (not the censored Return) well be done shortly and y'all are in for a treat very soon
SOOOO AWESOME
His badass level is over nine thousand! I really like how you found a good way of giving the main character special powers!
dat badass cliffhanger
so awesome
..... i think i need brain bleach
i suspect a John Marston style ending will NOT be happening.
BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF BAMF
BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMF
god this guy is awesome
uh...
when will the next chapter be out?
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Sorry mates for taking so long to come out with the next chapter I've been writing a crossover chapter(s) with a good friend of mine for are story's. His name is itsmyfuneral and his story is really good read. His part is roughly 20k words long and we are now doing my part which shouldn't take to long to do I should have chapter 6 - 9 out before Sunday. So please me patient with me on this
575227 yay moar chapters soon
FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF i hate it when im on a reading spree then the chapters run out......
yay 4 chapters today!
579472 Agreed.
528341 Lamar!
579837 It is no danger to you, but it could try to hump your head...
580785 well when your the size of human the leg just wont do it for yah :P
wow, that's a lot of mind f**ks...
and I assume Colt and Daimon are from your friend's story?
oh, the link to your friend's story doesn't work, how about just giving us the name of it and letting us search for it
EDIT: never mind I found your friend's story by going to your favorites
Name: itsmyfuneral Story: The Darkness Within Us All
Yes Colt and 27 are friends in the story, enemy of my enemy is my friend sort of deal. I hope the crossover was acceptable for everyone. He and I will be doing more work together later on down the road.
And yes Colt and Daimon are from his story, my story and his are both in the same timeline.
Damnit. Curse you and your cliffhangers!
shits getting real
"store cleric." does each store have it's own divine spellcaster? and if so, which domains do they specialize in?
GOD DAMMIT FADE!!!!!
YOU JUST HAD TO DO THAT DIDN'T YOU?!?!
YOU ARE LUCKY IF HIS FRIEND DOESN'T GIVE YOU TO DAIMON
588967 Lol, I'm rather English challenged. Even though it's my main language.
588967 lol
Gettin' the feeling that shoplifting is gonna turn into a problem for Colt later.
Also, why, in most fics like this, does Luna always jump to the wrong conclusion when she meets a human?
I like it. continue plz
dun dun DUN!!!
Wasn't that that guy from the facility?
*Drama Detected*
602689 Yes, he was. but he was a staff member, not "The Master", he's all ready dead.
602710 Knew he wasn't "The Master," still don't trust him.
he's gonna die
*IMPLIED SEXUAL ACTIVITY*
Shut up Obviousness Robot! Anyway, fun chapter. No one dies, everyone drunk, good times had by all.
I WANNA GET DRUNK IN EQUESTRIA!!! Yes, out of all that has happened so far, that's where my mind goes. DEAL WITH IT!!
oh shit....
yeah, totally saw that coming as soon as going to a bar was brought up...
Can't wait till the next chapter. Are you going to go back and fourth between Cloud and 27?
tartarus....if he goes there everything there is gonna die.
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No no no. If he goes there they will simply have à change of management :D
hmm, a split first person narrative, should be interesting, just be careful, the character's inner thought processes shouldn't be too similar, though given how you've written Cloud, that shouldn't be a problem,
the major problem with a split first person narrative, is that now you have to show both characters' views and thought processes for every event, not to mention the internal character development, thus slowing down the story by half (I'm assuming you're using a 50/50 split), so let me give you this warning: Be Careful, but it looks like Cloud will be having her own separate plot line, thus solving the 'different view point on every event' problem
am liking how attached Cloud is to Subject 27, another great chapter, keep it up
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