This story is a sequel to Come, Fly with me
Short stories about Doodle Heart and Savant, following their life as partners.
I made this to gather all my short stories about these two in one place.
The plot may differ from story to story, but they will all be sweet Slice-of-Life and romance.
I write these stories as an exercise so please come with feedback, I welcome it with open arms, both on grammar and general nitpick.
Doodle Heart belong to my great friend: http://dragonfoxgirl.tumblr.com/ visit her for some great art.
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Truly a beautiful story about these two
The sequel is as good as the first one.Keep going
Of course all artists should have a clean couch in their studio, in case they need to draw prench fillies.
This part reads weird for me.
Can his part of the dialogue start with lowercase? I'm still new to the written conversation part of english grammar.
Can't find what that is in google. I need an explanation.
Should it be "two large cups"?
Again, I am still new to most of the english language, but "at hoof's length" seems to be better.
Hooves
5222726 Choocaa is a herb tea, mostly made up for the sake of this story, but the influence is from Terrerre, a cold tea they drink in Paraguay.
You caught a few typos, gonna fix those right away.
As for Hoofs, that is correct in plural form.
Everyone assumes it is hooves due to all other words ending in 'f' are that in plural, hoofs being the exception.
Thanks for the feedback, greatly appreciated!
Cheers!
5222871 I looked it up, and apparently, both hoofs and hooves are correct.
I know about terere, I am from that crater too.
All I have to say is on some points where there were no commas to separate each event, confused me a bit but it was understandable.
Toffaz, it's in your plans continue it?
6554212 Hi, no, not likely that I will.
My focus is on other things than ponyfiction right now.
I'm glad you enjoy my stories though.
Cheers!
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Yes I know... But it would be great if someday in the future you do it.
Anyway thanks for the story, I really love these characters, I wish you the best friend.