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On the longest day of the thousandth year, the stars will aid in her escape, and she will bring about nighttime eternal... if she has the strength.
But how can the Bearers of the Elements be gathered without a villain to fight or challenges to face? How can they see the need for harmony and friendship? And without them, what will happen to them, to all Equestria - and to Luna?
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Clearly, Celestia needs to disguise herself as Nightmare Moon and trick Twilight into making friends and blasting her, then hold up Luna at the last second to intercept the rainbow.
Is there going to be a sequel to this
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, somehow I don't think the Elements would approve of it. 
I don't have any plans for what happens next, and neither does Celestia, unfortunately... If she was desperate enough to try to get Twilight Sparkle to make friends, the Element of Magic (at least) must have really stringent requirements for its bearers. So until Twilight is somehow convinced to make friends, everything is blocked. And as ingenious as 5955858 's plan sounds
Hmm... Shining Armor as Loyalty, with Cadance as Generosity and Kindness? Or send Twilight on a mission to recruit soldiers for the supposedly-coming war, and hope she makes friends there?
Wow. This… just wow.
This is quite poignant.
I can't help but cry out for more, but it doesn't really need more.
Yes!
Thank you for taking up my prompt, 't was a good read.
Apologies for the late response, I'd wanted to say a bit more than a simple “omg, thx lol”, but ended up taking... a little longer than expected.
You may have set out to write an alternate take on the prompt, but I don't see any contradictions to the original idea.
Hmm. You don't know how to continue the story?
Well, reading “The Nightmare Crumbles” made me want to give it a shot myself, so I wrote a few bits and pieces for a rough draft:
“The Nightmare Crumples '2': (Not) Without a Fight”
No definite plans to write a full story, but if I ever do, maybe we can collab / brainstorm on it?
Or, alternatively, if this gives you ideas on how to continue here, go ahead! Feel free to contact me for brainstorming ideas.
... Oh by the way, I had originally submitted the prompt to both the "MLP writing prompts"-reddit group AND to fimfiction's The Idea Exchange. So, feel free to submit your story to the "The Idea Exchange" group. ^_^;
6032123 Wow, good continuation, though there're a few things that'd need to be fleshed out more... I don't have much time at the moment, but I'll think things over and hopefully say more later!
Negative comment here.
The Author's Note ruins the whole mood of the fanfic. I'd suggest writing this in the description. Seriously. It damaged the mood severely.
Ooh, that's a fantastic start! You've got me hooked, now... argh. "Completed."
Now, I really super duper dislike commentors who respond to stories with nothing but "Moar!", so don't take this as such. What we have here is IMO a really fantastic premise, and well presented, but there isn't really a story here yet. So I can't really accept the "Completed" tag as accurate. I'll flag it as "followed' and hope that someday I see an update anyway. :)
I might also mention that this story reminded me a bit of The Return of Princess Nightmare Moon, for those interested in similar ideas. It's not the same premise, mind you, just something that felt echoey.
6659865 It seems week to just say "Thanks," but I don't know anyway else to put it.
Yes, there's lots of potential here for an AU. On a larger scale, without the Elements finding new bearers, would Discord go free? Would the Crystal Empire return? Would Tirek escape? But the story would probably focus on the more personal and philosophical level: Celestia trying to maneuver Twilight into accepting friendship and harmony. And, secondarily, I dropped some hints that the Elements have a magical connection to all Equestria, and their having bearers will lead to the six virtues of harmony being more fully practiced... and Celestia thinks that's urgently needed.
But, I don't have any good ideas for where to go down this track. Celestia would need a really good excuse to get Twilight to return to Ponyville. Maybe Twilight will run into Moondancer again, before she totally walls herself off? Or maybe Celestia will lean on Cadance to invite her on some expedition? Or... maybe none of this will work before Nightmare Moon regains her strength, and Celestia will need to fight her again?
I've got several other story ideas that need more time, including a couple more AU's that could be expanded (if I ever finish the one-shots). But thanks for the good words. And if I ever do continue, I'll be sure to at least tag this story in a blog post.
(By the way, check whether you actually followed the story - I didn't get any notification about it?)
6660397 Heh. To paraphrase your response:
If you want another, here's one that I don't recall seeing used anywhere before: Celestia could approach Twilight and say "Twilight, I'm going to level with you. I knew Nightmare Moon was returning and I wanted you to use the Elements of Harmony to cure her, but my plan to arrange that subtly just fell apart in a way I never expected. To use them you need to make friends with the following five ponies..." And then we can see how Twilight manages when everything's out in the open. I'm sure it'd be hilariously awkward, but Twilight's a good pony and I bet she'd ultimately come through.
Just a thing that popped to mind. As I mentioned it looks like you've already got plenty, so pick whatever suits your fancy whenever the mood strikes you. I'm not demanding "Moar!". Just quietly hoping for moar. :)
I marked the story as "tracked", perhaps that doesn't give a notification like "favouriting" does? I haven't been using "favourites" much since "tracking" became available.
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Okay, I have ideas. I guess the thing is I don't have inspiration to build them up and develop them into a story.
And your idea about Celestia explaining everything to Twilight is also good! I've seen it used exactly one place before, with a very AU Twilight who's acting as Celestia's prime minister. It might be interesting to do it with a canon Twilight, though... maybe Celestia explains everything as a last resort after all else has failed and time is running out?
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Hey, uh, about that sequel I wrote a draft for 2.5 years ago... The story hasn't really gotten much more fleshed out then it was back then, and I figure I may as well post what I have and see how people react to the "experimental writing style".
Just three things missing:
I just can't help it. You've literally come up with the perfect title for the concept, and now I just can't think of anything to match. And I have tried to for 2.5 years.
Uh.... do you have any ideas for a good title for my "semi-sequel-but-can-also-be-read-as-a-standalone" to your story?
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To all those who demanded "moar", I have (finally) published a short story following the same basic premise, but with a slightly different focus.
- MLP: FiM
- Drama
- Sad
“On the longest day of the thousandth year, the stars will aid in her escape.” Celestia was prepared to face Nightmare Moon in battle. What she wasn't prepared for was to face her in a hospital bed.this was an intregueing idea
This is a story right here. Or at the very least the start of one: An Equestria without Harmony. How would everything change without the Mane Six ever forming? How would Discord be stopped? Or the Tree of Harmony be fixed? Also, anyone else find it weird that the only time the Elements were used besides to stop Nightmare was for Discord? The only other time they get to be used is for fixing the Tree and that's it. Weird to have such important items be not so important.
8774426 Glad to see you expanded those scenes a bit and published them! And thanks for the link back!
8776313 Yes, that's a very interesting idea. Doylistically, I'm sorry the writers didn't use them more, but even then I think it's pretty clearly implied the Rainbow Power was because they were previously the Element-Bearers. Watsonianly, my headcanon is that the Elements are very important to quietly build up Equestria by background magic... but unfortunately, I've never really had a chance to show that in any story. This 'verse would be a great contrast, but I never really had clear ideas for a sequel; I was planning to touch on that in my Moon Has a Harsh Mistress, but that's bogged down partway through.
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Heh! This story is currently in the top 50 "currently popular" stories.
8783815 I noticed - and it was in the "Popular Stories" list on the homepage a couple days ago, too. And your story was at the top of the feature box!
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Yeah, imagine my surprise.
I did not see that coming. At all.
To me, this was this silly little one-shot draft that I wrote nearly 3 years ago and that, despite my repeated efforts, just couldn't flesh out into a larger story. So, eventually I got around to polish it up, and hit publish. There were a few comments. It was nice.
When three hours later, just as I was going to bed, the story appeared at the bottom of the featured box for 20 minutes and then got pushed back out, I was happy.
...So, I come home from work the next day, am not even checking on the story, just want to see if there are any chapter updates, and...
YOU HAVE 243 NOTIFICATIONS.
...what?
YOU HAVE 248 NOTIFICATIONS.
wha.... ? What did I do??? Did some really famous author post about the story in their blog or something? Is there, like, a controversial flame war going on in the comments section of my story for some reason??
YOU HAVE 253 NOTIFICATIONS.
Is the story in the popular section? This never happened when my other stories hit the popular section...
Okay, let's see. Frontpage. Popular stories box? Nope. Featured box? Hmm, not in the 5th place, not in 4th pla....
Hm
Damnit, now I have to use my imagination to figure out what happens next! Sigh.
good story.
Continue ?
That hit hard!