This story is a sequel to My little pony: Celestia's secrect
Twilight Sparkle have been haunted by scary nightmare about the evil king Sombra
This is a continued story to my Celestia's screat
This story is a sequel to My little pony: Celestia's secrect
Twilight Sparkle have been haunted by scary nightmare about the evil king Sombra
This is a continued story to my Celestia's screat
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You need to work on capitalization. Words such as Sweetie Belle, Ponyville, Equestria, and Princess Luna should all be capitalized.
Issues with dialogue, too - there should only be one speaker per paragraph.
Spelling is okay (although I have a feeling that's thanks to spellcheck), but grammar needs work.
Can't say much about the story, as it's a sequel to a story I haven't read.
Have you tried reading your story aloud? It really helps to catch errors.
6076113 I will remember that