"You know," Fleetfoot said slyly, "you grew up in Cloudsdale."
"So that means you could fly with us." Spitfire grinned, full of confidence as usual.
Rainbow stared at them. "Fly?"
"Uh, we mean practice," Fleetfoot quickly added. "You could practice with us until Soarin's better."
"What do you say? Wanna be our third?" Spitfire looked at Rainbow expectantly.
Giving them an extravagant eye roll, Rainbow shook her head. "I'm flattered at the opportunity, and I'd love to do it ... if I weren't already committed to helping my friends."
Spitfire prodded her. "You're sure about that?"
Glancing over at her team, Rainbow saw Bulk Biceps busily flexing his muscles for Fluttershy. She smiled. "You do realize you're talking to the Element of Loyalty, right?" She hopped up in the air and did a little spin. "I'll fly with you someday, be sure of that, but not if it means betraying my friends." Giving Spitfire a challenging grin, she added, "And besides, it's not like you guys really need the practice, is it?"
Now this would've made the original a lot better.
No need for Rainbow to feign injury; just admitting that you don't want to join the other team due to the fact that you're an Element of Loyalty makes the situation a whole lot easier.
Oh yeah! She does that in S05 E15.
This is actually a rare case where I prefer the full episode to the shortened version you do here.
Her jumping at the chance to fly with her idols directly, even temporarily, and then being torn between her friends and her idols/hometown actually fits with her character more.
Plus, Derpy makes her first significant return in the original, which is always a plus.
Extra space.
"OP IS FOR 'RAINBOW DASH!'" Bulk Biceps shouted at the top of his lungs, as he is wont to do.
"Uh, actually, it's 'RD'."
"SOMEPONY KILL ME!"
Calm down, Derpy.
~KBO.
And then the Cloudsdale team asks Derpy to fill in for Soarin'.
Should've made her choose some different pegasi from Ponyville to be on her team instead of picking the two worst fliers you could possibly have on a team.
6520897 I would love to see that.
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It's what I do.
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Exactly!
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It's okay. The Wonderbolts ended up practicing with Derpy.
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Impossible is nothing!
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Oh, now that's picky.
Fixed.
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This is now story canon.
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Well, in the episode, she still
winsqualifies despite having the two worst fliers, so I figure that counts as OP enough already.6523135 It is what I do, I am the nitpicker. I pick the nits.
Curses! Her Loyalty is OP!
6520897 Klutzyness notwithstanding, Derpy seems to be a reasonably strong flier. She wasn't the one that messed up the water-tornado, that was Raindrops.
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Dash became a Wonderbolt last season, so shouldn't she already be on their team?
[Insert Opera Car Meme]
Twilight is OP!
Spike Wins!
Apple Jack Wins!
Ponyville Wins!!!