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Snow paints the busy streets of Canterlot white while colorfully bundled ponies frolic about. The sounds of joy fill the air even more than usual. That can only mean one thing, Hearth's Warming is right around the corner.

This year Div, a member of Princess Luna's House Guard, has a conundrum. To liven up the holiday spirit in the palace the princess and her guards will be exchanging gifts. This has Div nervous, what are you suppose to get a princess who already has a kingdom?

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Pffffahahaha!

"Everypony out, I've set the self-destruct for five minutes.

Yeah... Runic would totally do that. Even if it wasn't true this time!

We had over three minutes still

Oh, he wasn't kidding. Yeah... Runic would totally do that.

Miley rays show nothing

When you invent science you get to name it what you want!

rendered physics as we know them obsolete.

Runic fails to realize he does this frequently!

Very fun story! I really enjoyed it =D You certainly have the characterizations down.

Muting the decorations and simultaneously enhancing their charm was a light dusting of snow still drifting down from the sky.

What a gorgeously painted image. Well done, Hoof Ross. :raritywink:

Three rosy-cheeked, colorfully dressed mares were pulling along a lone, dazed stallion as they belted out their holiday cheer. As they pranced by the stallion's eyes met Div's and a moment of understanding passed between them.

heh, heh, which cheeks were rosy? *ahem* Hmmm... I wonder what this foreshadowing is all about.

He thought the forbidden thought which one must never have during the holiday season, believing that things were perfect and nothing could possibly go wrong.

nnnNNOOOO, you never think those thoughts! Not during any season!!

Unrolling the scroll Sergeant Stone read, "It is encouraged, but not required for each member of the palace to give a gift to their princess of choice who will reciprocate."

Aww, that explains Silent's mood entirely. I was wondering if it was something like this.

"It may say here this is only encouraged and not required, ponyfeathers." Stamping his hoof he continued. "I have it on good authority that every pony in Princess Celestia's House Guard is giving her highness a gift and I'll not have our princess receive a single gift less."

Legitimate laugh out loud. :rainbowlaugh:

"Stop thinking so much with this", placing a hoof over his heart he continued, "And use this."

Awww... If this weren't you writing, I'd think this story was going somewhere sweet. But I know better. I won't be trolled by you a second third pancakes another time!

Taking half a step forward Silent Knight seemed to loom over Div pointing at the package. "That is not what I asked guardsman. What. Is. It."

Just answer the stallion already!

"Everypony out, I've set the self-destruct for five minutes. If you don't want to be turned inside out, get out, now!" From the back of the shop, a single mint colored mare dashed from the hoof care section out the door into the falling snow.
Fluttering down from the counter Runic grinned at Silent Knight. "Gets'em every time."

:rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

"Please-please-please can't we take a peak. Imagine how many extra rocks I could store if weight was no longer a concern … do you suppose it's bigger on the inside too?"

You are killing me here with the literal LOLs! Would you STAHP

Holding a hoof to his chest for a moment he went on. "I have everything I need right here."

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YOU TRICKED ME AGAIN

I was prepping myself for the non-sweet because you're a troll AND THEN YOU TROLLED ME BY DOING THE SWEET.

I hope you're happy with yourself.


Really well done. Everyone felt perfectly in character. I smiled, I giggled, I chortled, and I cursed your name. I think that deserves a favorite!

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Troll

Hey now, syrup is sweet and pancakes are among my favorite things. Besides, Div is AAM's character, I'm not going to do (on screen) naughty things to him.

The clean crisp air rang louder with the sound of singing as a small group of four ponies moved slowly down the street. Three rosy-cheeked, colorfully dressed mares were pulling along a lone, dazed stallion as they belted out their holiday cheer.

I can taste the alliteration. Yummy :3

As they pranced by the stallion's eyes

It's not a Q&B story without prancing!


I really liked the pacing of the story, and the buildup to the poem at the end was surprising yet endearing. Really cute! Runic and Silent's personality came through well (#grumpy Silent is best Silent), and the descriptions were good.

Personally, I wish that there were more breaks in sentences. For instance, having

Passing by he couldn't help but overhear Firn Bristle and Rose Mary giggling about what they had gotten Luna.

be changed to to

Passing by, he couldn't help but overhear Firn Bristle and Rose Mary giggling about what they had gotten Luna.

But that's just my opinion. It still works without it!

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#grumpy Silent is best Silent

I was unaware that another Silent Knight existed. :trollestia:

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