After a year or so I finally decided that I should make an account on this site to comment and or write because I love reading the stories posted here.
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And in that moment you've lost half your reading audience.
Well, this is the most blatant troll I've seen in years.
Well you described me almost perfectly
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*Inception bwaaaa*
Hehe, sorry but I just decided to leave a disclaimer for the fact that there will be clop, and the fact that there will be OP characters, I also stopped an earlier story because I was told it was to 'cliché', so I realized this disclaimer would be better for my sanity. I also don't care about becoming some sort of popular writer, I just want to make a story that entertains people and gives them something that they enjoy.
Intriguing, needs some grammer correction in parts, but it has got me hooked for more!
Thanks, thing like that actually make me happy to try and continue to make people happy.
This wasn't entertaining. Self-inserts and cliches don't form a good story.
It will get better and more interesting, and the main reason for the cliche warning is because I don't know what everyone considers a cliche, so if I did put one accidentally, then I didn't want to be prosecuted for it.
Okay then.
okay. that was a little bit of a rusty description, but I can shrug it off...
t-that sure is a lot of names. But I'm sure the narrator won't take the time to describe every single one of them in the same awkward manner-
I wasn't ready for this. I wasn't ready for the slam jam.
I enjoyed it, though! Keep writing and improving, I believe in you!
Thanks, that actually makes me feel better about writing this after some of the hate, also this chapter was literally meant to be mainly the descriptive part.
Guards
That is in the title...
10 friends, Nate, TJ, Jennifer, Wesley, Jacob Y, Theo, James, Jacob C, Paddie, and Larry find themselves in The Land of Equestria after meeting up and nearly getting caught by people trying to kidnap them. When they wake up and find themselves changed on a physical, and somewhat biological level that leaves them like the ponies they meet (It's "met" if this happened before they got transformed). Split evenly, two members gain strong magic, wings, and extraordinary levels of strength. Two gain wing and the abilities of pegasi. Two gain magic akin to unicorns. Two gain extraordinary strength and durability. And two gain bat like wings as well as an ability to see in the dark. Can these friends cope with this strange new land? will they protect it, or, will they try their best to leave?
Yes two characters are meant to be a mix between human and alicorn, yes they are going to be immortal, and yes they will be very strong, but their strength will start small and grow over time. And if you are going to say, this story has clichés in it, then don't, please. It's better for my head if you ignore and clichés and try to focus on the story itself.
Also there will be clop, but not at the start/later in the story.
Ok...This is my attempt at fixing the description...In spelling and some other minor errors.
Here's a little tip. When you post a story, your description and title must be grammatically corrected. People want to read a grammatically corrected story. They don't want to swim through a sea of words that they can barely understand. And the title + description reflect the grammar and spelling of the story itself.
Good plot, good characters and good flow doesn't mean much if readers struggle if not unable to read the story.
It is even worse if you attempt to use a more controversional plot point with terrible grammar and spelling.
As for HiE genre itself. You should use a single human, a small group of humans [2-3 (4-6 is stretching it but might be usable with good writing skill)] or straight up a whole community like a small town or something like that. Then there are also first contact stories, human are native to Equestria world and ongoing human-pony relation stories.
As for my personal opinion of this...Sorry to say this, but, while i love the HiE genre, not many HiE make a good impression on me and this isn't one of the better ones.
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Thank you for the help and honesty Amethyst, I will admit that my grammar and spelling are 'sub-par' compared to everyone's, and I don't expect everyone to love this story, all I hope for is to entertain those who will like this story as well as improve my overall writing ability.
Horry shet.
Ff <uuuuuuck yeaahhhhhhhh new update