Twilight is restrained, unable to fight back the horrible words that Rainbow Dash is telling her.
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lol
I liked this.
I actually did, it was a quick, fun read.
I feel Twilight's pain...
If anyone introduces Twilight to Fresh!Sans we will have a problem.
Twi Lite gut rekt m8.
I r8 dis storie den outta den.
That ending, so perfect.
Well dat was pretty funky, especially tha ending. I wonder why Twilight don't give a fuck bout it so much, is cuz her big-ass booty strives ta bo so grammatically erect all tha time, biatch? Any way I wouldn't wnat ta be near Twi when her ass is relievin stress.
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I no rite m8 ?
Twi Lites been keepin da brane fokken anal-o-meter to 11 bro !
If it was me, I would go more than rabid psycho on the ambassador.
Cool idea.
Pfffhahahahaha
Kappa
i felt my braincells die a little at the so-called slang in this story...doesn't stop it from being amusing though
Poor Twilight, what she really needs is to view slang as another language. Then it doesn't have the same effect. Reminds me of this actually...
That story was painful. I will now go read another story, followed by another story, followed by another story, followed by another story, followed by another story, followed by another story, followed by another story, followed by another story, followed by another story, followed by another story, until I forget this story.
how did i get here?
thumbs up.
lol 👍
Is it wrong that the bdsm elements of this story turned me on a little bit?
If so, I don't want to be right.
Anyway, I'm pretty sure Rainbow Dash doesn't get the Z-word pass, and also that as a scholar Twilight would respect and appreciate pidgin and patois, in this case what seems to be your bastardized version of whatever the zebra version of Ebonics is.
Found this story though a link in the comment section of this story:
- MLP: FiM
- Slice of Life
Rainbow Dash writes her first novella. It's a very serious book about serious topics. She asks her friends to proofread. This should go well.10141081
Provided by yours truly!
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I'm certainly glad I found this, through the same comment section. Both stories got a chuckle out of me.
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I'm not sure what 'Ebonics' is, but Rainbow Dash is using a really blatant variety of black vernacular English used mostly in urban areas, typically among urban African-American people. It does seem a little odd that zebra ambassadors from a country meant to represent Africa would use it, but they might have been joking around.
As for Twilight, it's well-established that she often panics at the unfamiliar and does not enjoy error and the informal. She's a scholar, of course, but she often shows the 'my way or the highway' kind of neatness that many scholars do in demanding order and formality, something that a dialect isn't. (Not to mention, there's a lot of humorous fanon that shows her freaking out in many meme-y ways about AJ and her countryisms.) She isn't degrading the zebra in any serious way and the story approaches everything from the point of comedy over Twilight overreacting, not a dramatic story about species prejudice, which Twilight doesn't have - just an exaggerated reaction to something unfamiliar in the form of a dialect.
What can I say?..
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Amusing
Still. After what I've learnt of the art of writing successful books...
Well, both "show", and "tell" are tools, and you've misused them. More "show", less "tell" -- that's what they say.
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Ha! I saw this comment like a week ago and I'm currently watching airplane and had no idea that it was the source of this clip! I had to immediately come and make this comment