"Time. Time is strange. Time is esoteric. Time is something none of us have enough of.
Some ponies describe time as linear; a straight line with no end. Others describe it as a tangled mess, akin to a tangled ball of yarn where bits of time overlap and interfere with each other. But both of these are wrong. Time is circular. Everything repeats eventually. There comes a point where past meets present, and everything threatens to unravel."
-Excerpt from The Fall of a Princess by Princess Sparkle
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Sad thing your fanfic didn't go under the projectors... It is in my opinion a pretty good and solid story, with a sense of fatality like in greek legends and similar works. The pace is good, the characters are well written and credible ; and I like the idea of the alicornhood being not only a gift but also a curse, bound to repeat again and again.
Have you tried to submit it to groups?
Get a thumb up and a favourite!
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Since I started doing the pony word thing, I've always been bothered that Twilight tends to be the focus of the "going to outlive everyone you love" thing. Cadence seems like the one who would have a rougher time being the Princess of Love and all that.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I haven't tried submitting it to groups yet. I'm uh, not too familiar with it yet.
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It's in 19 bookshelves, tracked by 5 users, yet only my thumb up is there...
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These things happen. So long as I know at least one person enjoyed a story i'm happy.
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... Is it me or is this circle in the story art turning?
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I searched hard for an image with an optical illusion to it. I'm quite pleased with the it, actually.
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What I also like in your fanfic is that there is something I haven't seen in any other so far : Cadance turning bad.
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I've been tempted to expand on the idea. She's so goody-goody in the show, that I feel like nobody really sees her as a character that could have a darker side. The hard part would be finding something that would trigger such a drastic change.
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Do you mean you are considering writing another fanfic with a bad Cadance?
If you do, I sure will be there to read with trepidation.
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Yes. That is exactly what I mean.
Though I won't be able to give a time frame for when I'll fit it into my schedule.
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Then I can't wait!
That said, take all the time you need!
Thinking about it, here is one possible way for Cadance to turn bad :
After the events of Season 6's premiere, Cadance would remember Sombra, as well as the Changelings. With reports of Changelings sighted near the Crystal Empire's edge, she would swear she'd defend her husband, her foal and her subjects from any threat from now on. Stumbling upon Sombra's dark magic book, she'd start reading it to know more about the dark arts, so she could counter it if needed. But as she does, this knowledge would spread the seeds of corruption in her mind (and growing paranoid of Changelings), until she decides to learn how to use it, to protect those she holds dear... Growing hungry with magic power, she would start looking for more. What would happen from there would be up to anyone's guess.
How far would the Princess of Love be ready to go to protect the ponies she knows and loves? Good question.
I swear that cover art is moving
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Good story, though!
Not a bad story. I'm always a sucker for "Evil Cadence" fics despite there not being that many of them out there on this site. Just a couple of errors I noticed throughout it though:
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How can the effects of Cadence's negativity on the Heart still be seen today when Twilight mentions Cadence crushing it beneath her hooves later on in the story?
2.
I believe the word you're looking for here is "exile".
And finally, 3., which is more of a formatting error that caused the last 1/4 or so of the story to switch over to italics.
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Fixed the issues you found. Reworded number 1 on your list and corrected the other two things. I haven't revisited this story in a while, so I hadn't had the chance to notice.
Thanks for pointing these errors out to me.
7220656 Not a problem.
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Well yeah, if you want to get technical about time and history...
Is it just me or is the cover art for this story moving? great story by the way.
Nice outline! I hope you write the whole story someday! :B
...Not trying to be a dick, but seriously, this is mostly just explanation, leaving no impact in the final two climactic scenes. c.c
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I know... It's one of those stories I've always meant to revisit, but I keep pushing it off.
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I hope you do, Nightmare Cadence is a thing I really like.
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Hey, I'm still hoping to see this rewritten or another one like that written.