Hey, Fluttershy!
So I'm in Port Pegasus now, it's a small town by the ocean to the west. And it's pretty nice! Never thought I'd like it, but it's got its charms! I've been here for a day or two as I write this letter, and I will be for a while.
The first night I got there, I was completely broke. So the bartender, she's a Zebra named Zara, offered me a job as an assistant. What the hay, I needed the money and I guess I wasn't in too much of a hurry! So I agreed and now here I am! The job's okay and she pays me well.
You can send letters to this address for a while, if you want to! I'll be here a couple of weeks or so, I don't think it should be a problem. It better not be!
Still missing you like crazy, Fluttershy! I miss all of you, and by now I think I'm getting more and more homesick than I realized. Yeah, Rainbow Dash, who always wants adventure and fun...is homesick. I can't help it! Ponyville is my home now, with all of you there. But I still need this, I can't give up now. I've made it this far!
And Tank! Give that little booger a hug for me, will you? It'll be like a hug from both his mommies.
Keep smiling, okay? The first thing I want to see when I come back to you is your smile.
I did NOT just write that. Jeez, being romantic is hard!
Am I doing a good job? Do you feel happy??? Loved???? Come on, work with me here!!!
You really bring out such a weird side of me, you really do.
But that's just why I love you. You're that awesome.
Anyway, I'd better put this down and get to work. I'll write you later, of course.
I love you!
XOXOXOXOX
Rainbow Dash
Dearest Rainbow Dash,
How wonderful! This sounds like a wonderful opportunity for you in part of your journey! I hope it all goes well for you, truly. From your letters so far, in terms of your journey as a whole, I am very glad this is going well!
Our friends are doing just fine, though I'm sure they'll be telling you all about it in their letters to you! I'll leave it to them, but I will confirm that they're doing as well as can be.
I don't have too much to report on my end, I suppose. Elizabeak had chicks, all of which are so cute and very healthy! Angel Bunny has been better behaved, and of course Pinkie brings Tank over every now and then. He's doing just fine, but he does miss you very much. He's looking forward to seeing you, too! But he is holding up, he's quite a trouper!
I go to your house at least once or twice a week to make sure it's clean, and so far everything's fine with it, too!
As for me, I'm just going about my usual routine and spending some time with our friends when I can. Oh Rainbow, I miss you so much! It just isn't the same here without you, knowing you're not a short flight away, either. But I promised you that I would wait, and I am waiting. I promise you now that I will greet you with a smile! If it means that much to you, then I would be very happy to oblige.
You do your best and stay safe, okay? Dress warmly, be sure to eat right, take care of your belongings, and get plenty of rest. Overall, I hope everything will come through for you. I just want you to be happy, no matter what you truly want in your life.
I love you so much, Rainbow! And I always will, no matter what. Return home safely, my love!
Forever yours,
Fluttershy
A chuckle escaped Rainbow Dash as she happily read Fluttershy's letter whilst in the backroom of the bar. Since she was just starting her day when the mail came, Zara allowed her to go read it in private in the backroom for a little while. The bar was opening, with some guests and patrons already breezing in for a morning drink.
Letters from her friends had come in, all of which Rainbow eagerly read, saving Fluttershy's for last.
“Good reads, hon?”
Slightly started, Rainbow looked up with mild embarrassment upon seeing Zara in the doorway as she came in to retrieve some bottles. She nodded, placing the letter into her saddlebag.
“Yeah, pretty much,” she said.
Zara chuckled, smiling toward her. “Well come on, let's get to work.”
“Okay.”
Rainbow followed her boss out, carrying a couple of bottles in her mouth to help along.
It had been a few days since she started working at the Inn's bar, to which she worked as an assistant to Zara and even a stand-in when she had to step out for for a few minutes. Her job was to help replace any bottles of liquids on the shelves when they were empty, go around the tables collecting empty bottles and glasses so they could be washed after the bar closed, serving a costumer when Zara was busy with another, and simply learning the drinks, how they were mixed or blended, and so forth. Each day, Zara paid her some bits, while taking her fees for her room out of it each night.
Overall, it wasn't a bad job, certainly not something Rainbow dreaded. Not her first choice of a career, but at least she was making money. She even received good breaking hours, and even got to venture out into town with Zara to pick up supplies from the warehouse. At the same time, she liked the town and found it charming. At nights, before going to bed, she liked to go walk out on the boardwalk by the ocean, enjoying the views it offered. All the while wishing Fluttershy and her friends were there with her to see it.
“Tell me hon, what is your little marefriend like? I don't believe you talked extensively about her,” Zara mentioned. “If you want to.”
“I guess I can,” Rainbow shrugged. “Her name's Fluttershy. As you know now, she's a Pegasus like me. Really kind, sweet, smart, and has an affinity for taking care of animals, especially since she can communicate with them. Sure she's incredibly shy, has a hard time speaking up, can't really assert herself...but she always comes through, especially when you mess with somepony she cares about. Nothing can stop her when she puts her mind to something. Not the strongest flier, but when she tries her hardest, she can do it! And you know, she's different from me in a lot of ways, that might sound like a bad thing, but who the hay is ANYPONY kidding?! That's all part of why I love her! Because she's Fluttershy! Maybe I'll never understand, but she's the perfect pony for me, partly because she's different.”
“Mm, you're very insightful and passionate about it. I hear that a lot from customers when they talk about realizing that just because somepony isn't all like you doesn't make it a bad thing,” Zara remarked with a chuckle, smiling.
“Yeah! That's it!” Rainbow nodded wildly, nearly tipping over a bottle, which she managed to catch.
“I take it she's pretty?”
The cyan Pegasus snickered, shaking her head. “Pretty? Beautiful! She's got these eyes, these awesome blue eyes...! Her mane, all pink and soft as can be, and her smile! She's the cutest pony I know. But it's nothing compared to her heart!”
Chucking, Zara patted her back a little bit. “I see. A lot of ponies do come here often, talking about somepony they love who's waiting for them back home. They do say a lot of the same things, but there's always one thing that stands out to me when they talk about their significant other.”
“What's that?” Rainbow looked at her curiously.
“They always have some kind of a look in their eyes, and even a special kind of smile when they talk about the one they love. Someponies say that it's the mark of somepony in love,” the Zebra bartender replied, glancing toward her at the corner of her eye. “You don't have to take my word for it, but I see it all the time, and I just know. You have it too, Rainbow Dash. I can just see it in your eyes.”
“....Well....thanks?”
“Don't mention it. But you know, given what you told me, there's something I want to show you.”
“Huh? Okay, what is it?”
Zara smiled in a knowing way before she tended to a customer. She then began mixing a drink before she responded to the Pegasus, “This one pony who came to town had this puzzle with him. It was a beautiful puzzle, one of the sun rising in my homeland. It's right here, in this frame,” she indicated to a frame on the wall behind the bar.
“Ohhh...” Rainbow gazed at it curiously. “I saw that when I first came in!”
“It's lovely, isn't it? But tell me, what do you notice about it?”
“...I don't know, looks ordinary to me.”
“Keep looking, hon,” Zara encouraged.
Rainbow raised an eyebrow, but decided to humour her. She gazed at the puzzle, trying to see what was wrong with it. It was a red sky with a yellow sun rising over the dip in the horizon, with the shadowed silhouettes of elephants, lions, tigers, giraffes and buffalo in the distant foreground walking to the right. Nothing about it seemed out of the ordinary, to be sure, so Rainbow was wondering what in the world she was looking for. She could find nothing wrong with it.
At least, until she noticed one little puzzle square that was not of the same colour as the rest. In fact, it looked empty.
“There's a piece missing!” Rainbow pointed to it, “Why do you have an incomplete puzzle?”
Zara smiled and came up beside her to view the puzzle, “Because, I think it means something. A missing puzzle piece is a bit like a part of your life that's missing. I always felt that it kind of represented that kind of sentiment. Oh, it may sound silly, I know. It's just a puzzle with a missing piece I never found. But for that, I think it means a lot. The fact it took you time to find that it had a missing piece means exactly that, it takes time to figure out that something is missing in your life. More specifically, what may be missing. Where it's missing in your life, in your mind and in your heart.”
“...Wow,” Rainbow murmured, her eyes wide. “For some reason, that actually kind of makes sense.”
The Zebra chuckled, “I know it sounds silly. But think about it, if you wish. Now then, let's get back to work. The morning rush will be coming along soon.”
Rainbow took one last look at the puzzle, the incomplete puzzle with one missing piece. Something of a symbol of something that was missing in one's life. She could see where Zara was coming from, even if on the outside, it was just a pretty puzzle with one piece missing. She smiled, though, and then went back to work.
Dear Fluttershy,
You know, I normally would be writing to Princess Celestia about this kind of thing, I think any of us would, but I think I learned something interesting!
Zara, my boss at the Inn's bar, showed me a puzzle that has one piece missing. She keeps it in a frame behind the counter, right? Well you'd think it was just some pretty puzzle with a piece missing. But she said it's symbolic of the fact that life can sometimes be like a puzzle with a piece missing. An incomplete puzzle. There is no definite piece to fill it in. You know, it kind of makes sense! As I thought about it, I realized something.
You're my missing puzzle piece. Wow, that sounds really cheesy and sappy. But seriously! Up to recently, my life was a puzzle with a missing piece I never knew wasn't there! Sometimes it takes a while to find it!
When did I get so philosophical?! I need to get my head examined. What has love done to me?!
Aww, but I love you anyway. You know I do.
XOX
Rainbow Dash
Dear Rainbow Dash,
Awww, you're very sweet! That's such an interesting lesson to have learned, don't you think?
I could see where you were going, about the missing puzzle piece. It certainly is true that we come to a lot of times in our life where we feel we have a missing puzzle piece. It can be just about anything, big or small, it's still a piece of the puzzle that is yet to be found. Perhaps maybe Twilight might have a book on philosophy I could look into, I have to admit this is intriguing.
But anyway, I'm glad things are still going well for you! Right now, you're my missing puzzle piece, same for everypony else! We miss you!
I love you, Rainbow!
Forever yours, XOXOX
Fluttershy
Fluttershy,
There was a Pegasus at the bar today. She looked like you! Okay, so her yellow coat was more golden and her mane was shorter. But I swear, at first glance, I thought it was you. But when I saw it wasn't, well, I gotta say, it kind of reminded me of why I missed you. Now, every time I see pink or yellow, I always have to turn to look at it!
That's not even counting the fact that I always have to tell myself it's silly. I know you're back in Ponyville! So what the hay? I don't even know.
Point is though, I miss you! It's been over a month! I wish you guys were all here with me. It'd be even MORE awesome. You guys would like it here, trust me.
I've got a picture of you with me. I keep it on the nightstand next to the bed I sleep in. Every night, before I go to bed, I look at it, and then out at the moon if it's out. Sometimes I feel like you're there with me. Talking with me. Like we're looking at the moon together, you know?
Hope you're doing okay! I'd feel better knowing you're still happy!
Take care, okay? I won't forgive you if you don't!!!
I love you!
XOX
Rainbow Dash
Dearest Rainbow Dash,
Hee! You always find a way to make me laugh, Rainbow! Reading your letters almost feels like I'm talking to you! Except without your wonderful voice filling my ears.
Awwww, and I miss you too! I sometimes see a light blue pony and start to think it's you, until I see the lack of a rainbow mane or tail. In fact, there was a rainbow today! It was beautiful. I thought of you immediately, but it felt so lonely, knowing you weren't there to see it with me.
Oh, Rainbow, I look at the moon every night. Wondering if you're doing the same where you are. It does help make me feel that much closer to you.
I will take care, don't you worry. I hope you take care of yourself, as well! You had better!
I love you too!
XOXOXOX
Fluttershy
Dear Fluttershy,
Zara took me along to help her serve drinks at a wedding that was going on in town today. But that's not the best part!
When I told Zara about my being able to perform a Sonic Rainboom, she suggested it to the party hosts for the reception, and they asked me to perform one! It was AWESOME! Right over the ocean!!! I could not believe it!! Everypony thought it was great! Pretty awesome to perform it for ponies who had never seen it!
Another awesome wedding, thanks to my Sonic Rainboom! POW!
You know, I'm SO doing a Sonic Rainboom at my own wedding one day. Hooves down, no question, I'm definitely doing that. Hope you're okay with that!
Insert winking right here! Because you can't see me winking, but I am! Just did after I finished writing that! So, it's implied! I think you can picture me winking!
Somepony even got a picture of it! It's awesome! I sent you a copy, you'll get it with this letter. Don't worry, I told everypony else, but YOU get the copy. Go ahead and show it off, but it's yours to keep.
Oh, wait, you're probably asking me why, aren't you?
It's because of you I even performed it. I owe it all to you, Fluttershy. Every time I do one, I do it for you. I do it thinking of you. This time was no different. Don't tell anypony else that, okay? Especially not Rarity. But it's true. If I hadn't defended your honour that day, I'd never have done it. So I really owe it to you.
If that day didn't mean something to me, I'd have to be an idiot. But I know that no matter what, you're a significant part in why the Sonic Rainboom was possible for me to perform. Friend or lover, the fact it was thanks to you means the world to me. I'm sorry if I ever made you feel otherwise. But don't forget it, okay? Even in our worst times, that will never change.
And you know what? I wouldn't have it any other way. I wouldn't change a thing if I could go back in time!
So thanks a lot! You deserve it!
I love you, and I miss you. Performing that Sonic Rainboom made me wish you could see it. I hope from now on, you'll never miss one again. Love you, Fluttershy!
XOXOX
Rainbow Dash
Dearest Rainbow Dash,
Oh, Rainbow! I can't even begin to tell you how much your last letter touched me. To think you feel that way when it comes to the Sonic Rainboom! I'm very flattered, no, beyond flattered. I really don't know what to say, except, well, it means so much to me.
Of course, you know I feel the same when it comes to that day. If not for that race, if not for you standing up for me, I would never have discovered who I am and where I want to be. As I said once before, it was thanks to you I even earned my cutie mark. I hope you never forget that, my love.
That's wonderful for you, of course. I'm so glad you were able to perform the Sonic Rainboom! Unfortunately for me, you were too far away for me to see it. Which is a shame, but oh well. Perhaps next time I'll certainly see it!
Good luck to you!
I still miss you too, and I hope you're doing all right out there. Take good care! I love you, I love you!
XOXOX
Fluttershy
Dear Fluttershy,
Darn it! I don't know how you do it, but you always manage to bring out this side of me. Heartwarming! You have a real way with ponies, you know. Especially me and our friends!
You're just so much sunshine, you know? Sunshine! You're my sunshine! Hey, that's a good name for you! I'll call you Sunshine!
Tell anypony else and I will make you pay.
Darn it! I can't even threaten!!!
See what you make me do?!
Oh darn it, I want to hug you now!!!
Okay, I'm going to stop going crazy now.
Really, your words somehow touch my heart. Everything so sweetly said by you is impossible not to smile at, even if I try to hide it sometimes. And you know what? I'm kinda glad for that. I think I need to have somepony who can say things like this, and bring out this side of me. At least with you, it's so easy.
It's all part of why I love you so much.
By the way, there's one last thing.
After I finish this job, get enough money, and get back on the road, I'm coming home. I can't stand being away from you, away from home, away from our friends. Not anymore.
I'll let you know when I'm leaving.
Love you, my sunshine!
XOXOX
Rainbow Dash
Awwwwwww this is so cute! I love this chapter, it is awesome! I love the letters, they are so in character and masterfully writen. I love it all!
Keep up the great work!
As always, stay GREAT!
D'AWWWWWW.... These letter between them are so adorable! You wrote them out so well. I even read them in their voices. You did a great job with this chapter, and I patiently await the next one.
the emotions ... Amazng... Rainbows letters were just so rainbow dash. I love how she rambles on and how sappy she is getting. Fly home soon rainbow dash. Sonic rainboom all the way home
But I still think her coming quietly only letting fluttershy know and arriving otherwise unannounced just to spend some time with fluttershy would make for some very d'aaaawwww action. Even more so than in this chapter. You are continuing to build the story nicely I love where it's going and I can't wait for more
So heartwarming and cute!. D'awwwww...
The letters are pretty interesting to read and they are well done!
This chapter is great! And I'm eager to read the next one!
By the way, I added this story into my "Top Favorites (Starring Fluttershy)" on my user page.
P.S. One tiny error I've noticed is that all the letters are in bold italic, except one letter.
I mean the letter that begins with this:
Dear Fluttershy,
You know, I normally would be writing to Princess Celestia about this kind of thing, I think any of us would, but I think I learned something interesting!
This will no doubt pull on the nostalgia strings of anyone who has been in love before. Its written with such uncompromised purity, the warm and fuzzies are becoming something of an epidemic with this story.
912785 D'awww, I try!
913048 Yay! Hearing the letters in their voices would be all kinds of awesome.
913717 Thank you! Oh, don't worry. She's going to be.
913807 Hey, thanks! That's sweet! I'll fix that, thanks for pointing it out. :3
913824 XD Oh goodness, I don't know! But thank you for the sentiment.
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I usually read characters' lines in stories in their voices, too! That's exciting!
When I read such an interesting fanfiction like this one, I feel like I'm watching a real episode of the show!
913891 Oh, you can't be serious!!! Nooooo!
913994
Yes, I am serious!
Please, stop making me blush by writing such adorable replies!
Awww, forget it... Continue replying that way! I actually like this heartwarming feeling!
By the way, I think, it will be awesome if the story hits at least 100 000 words!
Forever!
So sappy! Still enjoyable though. Looking forward to more.
914053 I totaly agree. I would love to see this story hit 100, 000 words. And with the way you write 913840 I'm sure you could easily do it. A few really cute scenes with Fluttershy and RD (first date, some snuggle time etc...) could easily put it up there. (At which point the warm fuzzies will reach nuclear explosian point.)
A few things I didn't have time to write before church started... I love the OC Zebra. Zara is super cool and you are continuing to build her charcter well. Makes me wish I could see her again when RD takes Fluttershy over there to see the sights. They way you write her makes me like her. She's such an insightful creature and comes accross as the perfect someone to talk to about love and who can help anypony out. She has some great life lessions. Just the perfect of kind old mentor that everypony needs
Something clicked with the puzzle scene. Yet another great remeinder of how Fluttershy completes Rainbow Dash. The letters that followed it were sweet and added extra weight and emotion to it. I was a little shocked when near the end of this chapter you had allowed a month to slip by. Ouch. Poor Fluttershy. But I know from experence how time can pass when somepony feels like this and everything about thier relationship over the distance rang true. I can't wait to see RD suprise Fluttershy. "Love you, my sunshine!" - D'aaawwww. (Good thing its ok to cry in church.) Right... now I got it all coverd, I hope you don't mind the extra post. But I just had to get something up as soon as I finished reading this. Your story is too awesome. Each update makes my day 20% cooler.
Keep up the awsome work.
Forever! Yus.
914185
We can never have too many warm fuzzies!
But if we are going to explode from sweet cuteness overload, why not?
913840 It's a virus I hope you continue to spread. "Warmandfuzzyitis" - causes the victim to explode, and then explode again, with endless sunshine and rainbooms. It's legit now.
If this becomes anymore adorable i might explode. This chapter was really Fun to voice act but i cant help feeling something bads going to happen.....
(Why did I use my Jolly Rodgers ( banjo tooie) voice for Zara
913840 Girl, you always brighten my day with your responses. I had a terrible day today and your reply makes up for most of the misery.
Please don't change your character. Your kindheartedness Always makes me happy.
Remember to always stay happy.
913891 I love reading good stories in the characters voices.
As always, NintendoGal55 and MysteriousBrony remember to stay GREAT!
914185 Well thanks! Zara turned out really well, I think! I don't mind the extra post at all!
914945 I'm very sorry to hear that. Keep on smiling and keep on going, never give up! No matter how tough times may seem. It's all about learning to survive life's obstacles. If you can make it, you'll be a lot stronger for it.
As Pinkie says, smile smile smile!
Good lord, what is with the lovefest? I think I'm gonna hur--
*currently in the hospitable with Type II Diabetes*
914968 *sniff* Thanks for the encouragement. I really appreciate it.
I hope you have a great life! You totally 100% deserve it!
As always, remember to stay GREAT!
914968
I can't wait anymore. I just want to say it now.
You may not believe what I'm about to say.
But I'm going to say it anyway. Because it's true.
The more we communicate,
the more I'm convinced that you are one of the kindest, sweetest and cutest girls I know!
To be honest, I rarely say anything like that to anyone ,
because genuinely nice people are rare. And it is always nice to meet them.
I like people who are nice to me. And you are one of them.
I hope I don't make you feel uncomfortable by saying all these things to you.
This is the last thing I would want to do.
P.S.
When I finished this comment, I felt like there are tears in my eyes.
I don't know why I feel like that. I just wanted to say something nice to you.
I wanted to say even more, but I couldn't find more words to express my thoughts.
Awwww, what's wrong with me... Reading sad stories made me too sentimental...
What I am trying to say is that I'm always happy to talk to you!
You're great! Don't forget that!
915334 I could't agree with you more! she is the most kindhearted, cheerful, considerate girls I know.
She is just so sweet and her replies always make my day brighter! She is just so sweet and.......................... I just can't express it!
I hope life gives her happiness, and you too!
As always, remember to stay GREAT!
That is all.
But seriously. It's great seeing this updated. I love where this story is going! As others have said, Zara is a great addition to the story. I love Rainbow's journey; it's a great way for her to discover herself and Fluttershy.
I feel like whatever I can say has already been said. This story deserves MOAR- Views, likes, favorites, actually, this would be a perfect cover story! Why can't that happen?
Keep up the great work.
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Oh come on! I'm just me! I'm just a woman who makes these fics for everyone to enjoy and if people are nice, I'm nice right back. I treat people nicely and if they do so in return, that's always a good thing.
But thank you all the same. I appreciate your sentiments and it's flattering! You guys have been nice, so I definitely am going to be nice back.
915397 xD Oh God no!!! This does not deserve that calibre of attention!
Adorable doesn't even cover the cuteness of this chapter. With every letter, it would elicit a "D'aaawww" from me. They seem so in character that being a real episode seems viable. You've totally spoiled me though, so far the updates have come every other day and when there was a 2 day gap between the updates, I was surprised. Meanwhile, I normally expect updates from other stories weekly. Anyway, I can't even begin the explain how awesome this chapter is, or this fic in general! This has to be one of my top 5 fanfics of all time. It's kind of strange how in every chapter prior to the past 2 has been following the plot with Blazing Comet, but recently there hasn't been a single mention of her or the situation with her. Not that it's a bad thing or anything, but it's just what I noticed. And what the other people are saying about your replies are totally true! Even when I felt the comment I wrote was not worthy of reply from the glorious NintendoGal55, your replies are so kind and it -ahem- "Fills my heart up with sunshine, sunshine!" Keep doing what you do and I'm sure you'll achieve your dreams. Just don't forget about where you started!
And as always, FLUTTERDASH FTW
P.S. Also, I think it would make her day if you went and checked out FlutterDash7's fanfic. You know, if you have time.
915426
I sincerely wish you to be happy every day!
You know, I was wondering what your voice sounds like.
And when I was on your user page it suddenly dawned on me that you've got a channel on YouTube!
I think, you can guess what I did right after that.
I've found on your channel a lot of interesting videos. For example, "Top Ten MLP Episodes".
Your voice is beautiful! Even better than I imagined it to be!
Now I know what I can do when I feel sad. I will just watch your videos and listen to your voice!
915426 916832 Same here! I hope you experience happiness throughout life!
Also I watched your video and your voice is beautiful!
As always, remember to stay GREAT!
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I wish you a lot of happiness, too!
If I were writing this, I'd probably raise a conflict... y'know, make RD get mugged or something. That'd make it interesting. But, to each their own, and I can't control other ponies. I just think if there was a part where RD wasn't able to send a letter of something, and Fluttershy got worried or whatever, that'd make the story a bit more exciting.
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Come on you guys...XD I do appreciate it, thanks!
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917754 Can I give you a hug too?
918016 HUGS!
As always, remember to stay GREAT!
918635 HUGS!
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918016>>918635>>918671
Hugs from Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy? Definitely!
I have decided to give up reading the comment section, its just so over the top. Now excuse me while i go and be a hypocrite.
D'AWWWWW this chapter was very nice. I still think that the trip is a bit stupid and unnecessary, but as always you seem to make the best of the story.
Ok, ok, now you earned that muh, but i wont quit bugging you with my CRITICAL RESPONSE SECTION
*BEGIN*
"But I still need this, I can't give up now." You keep using that word... I do not think it means what you think it means.
I mean, come on. What in the hay is this trip for? If it was to think deeply about how Comet really did matter to RD at one point, but that now RD is over her and that is ok and she is ready to move on.... Well then it FAILED. Rainbow hasn't done any thinking about Comet at all during this trip! All she has been doing is thinking about fluttershy (cant say i mind too terribly much ). Sorry, you will never convince me that this trip had any meaning, except of course as a way of making things easier for you to write and giving you a reason to lengthen the story more.
Also. I have brought this up frequently. That is because it is really a problem. STOP USING CHUKLED SO MUCH XD. Honestly, in the TINY amount of dialogue in this chapter you used some form of the word "chukle" 4 times. I counted.
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To be honest I sort of agree. I think the whole trip is pointless. I like the sweetness of Flutterdash but this chapter feels like I'm reading someone's texts, but in a more formal sense. Too many letters, which wouldn't be a problem if this trip never happened. why does Dash go for a long trip? she's not trying to find herself right? She's on the trip to reflect on her relationship with Comet and to see if she's ready to move onto fluttershy. Why is the trip necessary though? I get she wants it to seem like the relationship meant something by not moving on too fast, but why? She knows what it meant. She was at one point in love with comet but fluttershy has a more concrete establishment in Rainbows heart. I mean yeah take a break don't just go to the next one, but she knows that she loves fluttershy immensely and that she was in denial throughout her relationship with Comet. I don't see, I'm sorry but I just don't see why the trip was necessary. Seems like she could do the same thing by going for a long walk around ponyville or go for long flying session. The fact she's travelling Equestria is, in my eyes, too much.