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Earth and Equestria are run parallel to eachother. On earth, people are critizised (and even threatened) for loving a show about magical ponies. So what happens when ponies fall in love with a show about a mystical race known as humans?

A one of a kind fanfiction

UPDATE!!!: I am completly rewriting this, as many bronies have noted that it needed a lot of work. This time, I will put more effor into the story. Thank you for undstanding.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 3 )

Damb!:rainbowderp:

Great Chapter.

Intresting.
great chapter indeed.

See, THIS is going into quality work. Now that a storyline is being developed, it's more than just some (Form the words of a troll) "Stupid overused fic idea about a pony who has issues and isn't comfortable with telling others he watches a show about our universe". This is, quite contrary to the quote, NOT an overused idea, Regal does NOT have issues, and honestly, with that being a troll comment up there, it's a GOOD idea to actually build tension with him not telling others about watching the show.

Now, Do's and Don'ts:
DO:
-Have a storyline to follow
-Make the OC's interesting
-Use comedy, tension, possible romance, and interesting events to advance the story. These are your friends, use them well.

DON'T::
-Derp on the storyline for more than one chapter at a time (Keep the show going, make the reader want the next chapter)
-Throw in something that is completely uneccessary (An example being maybe Regal goes to a party and then goes home. Make it something like Regal goes to a party, he lets slip he watches My Mystical Human, then splits before anypony can figure out who said it, except for the one pony who he said it to. Feel free to use that idea.)
-Oversell the story with ideas or details. Make your point, but don't overelaborate what's happening or what something is. Don't undersell those things also.

On Grammar and spelling:

"“nopony"- Capitalize this, it's at the front of a sentence.

"day” "- Put a comma at the end of speech if statement.

"“What’s wrong?” she questioned?"<-- Why is there a question mark after "she questioned"?

"frien"- Speaks for itself, that does.

Now, I'm sure you already know all of this, it's just that reminders are helpful. A good way to type these things is to type the whole thing on a word processor first, then copy and paste the whole shcmuck into FIMFiction, and finally adding in the itallics and other stuff last. It's what I do, and I come off with great grammar results.

Other than all of that, this will be a great story. I confidently expect that good sir/lady. Good luck.:rainbowkiss: And Batman for good measure.
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