Loyalty, it's an amazing thing. With loyalty you can show how much you care and who you care about. You can show pride toward anything you enjoy, and defend everything you care about. Rainbow Dash's loyalty is an even more powerful energy than even she may believe. But when she meets a dark furred pegasus a town over, her loyalty will be stretched and put to the test. She'll learn that loyalty, and love, is as blinding as it is enlightening. These bonds that hold us together are a gift and a curse in one.
Chapters (5)
not sure if i want to read......if it is about dash falling in love with some dude then him just leaving her then i don't want to read it right now
*reads anyway*
read the first chapter........i want to see where this goes......not rating yet but tracking it
GASP.....ULTRA GASP.......MEGA GASP................LE GASP!!!
tracking this one, it seems promising :)
Wall of text needs paragraph breaks. <.< Makes it easier to read.
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+1
:) i sense a shitstorms a brewin
60575 hmmm the foreshadowing is strong in this one
60575 hmmm the foreshadowing is strong in this one
UGH CMON MAN UPDATE THIS.
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sorry, I've been out of commission from computer problems for the past couple of weeks, I'm working on getting back on track
Wow,nice chapter nice to see an update.
136205 Heh sorry.
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no problem, it's actually a bit flattering to have someone so intent on reading the story they would post a comment like that
164736......I just noticed the armor on your avatar is that....Sculphire?
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actually it's Celestia as Kamina from Gurren Lagann
164942........ah now I see it.
UPDATE
~YAY
yay...:D
cant wait
at all....
Epic chapter again :D
Please next chapter release faster? :3
O_O
aww shit son...
MOAR!!!!
Clever son of a bitch. NIce to see the updates are more frequent now.
ooh
I WONDER WHAT DAY IT IS :D
and i like how she kept the amulet
i kinda expected that to happen
I read this 33 weeks ago, so I've decided to try and give you a proper comment rather than the few I gave you.
The story starts out somewhat freshly but at the same time it feels somewhat generic, however the whole RD + OC shipping factor is quickly removed as we're quickly pulled but not rushed into the plot. The backstory adds a nice touch to the overall text while giving a much better concept to the trials rather than it turning out to be something along the lines of it being said mentioned test.
Overall the story is really wrote and flows really well instead of it being dragged out on smaller details but at the same time they might have added a but of length to it.
Overall 10/10 for an amazing read.