I was one name Bill Cipher....and yes IT the name of the triangle from gravity fall my parents were an ass to me and name me after the guy. But that all chang as I was killed by the last thing I thought would happen....KILLED IN A BLIZZARD! NOW I'M GETTING ANOTHER CHANS AT LIFE THANK THE GUY OF MY GIVEN NAME!
Now I'm Hakkon Wintersbreath and I'm going to have a good time. >:)
Is English your first language? I sincerely hope it's not because this is a mess and needs an enormous amount of work. Not sure if it's salvageable without changing it fundamentally.
I would love to read more.
Editing not worth the hassle?
Proof reading would help before posting
This seems interesting but not sure if i will read it....
The grammar in the description is... well, pretty bad
But! With some extra work, i'm sure this is going to be a decent fic
First off tell these assholes to bug off if their not going to help but sit and wine second off a proof reader might help but obviously we can still understand it keep improving
more ples
Love the concept of the story and where it's possibly heading. The only thing I can say that's bad about it is the grammar errors I saw in it. But besides that I don't see any other problems with it. Also I hope you keep writing it.
7879271 its good, but I'd say you need a editor, also chans is spelled chance
this has potential, keep up the good work.
Oh shit son, it's about to get real
Well, its certainly not the worst grammar, but perhaps you should try to find yourself an editor.
good job
Nice chapter. More editing is needed. Talk to your editor and tell him to look it over again.
Cant wait for the next one.
Great chapter!
I was going to give it a look, but the awful grammar in the summary made me rethink that. You need an editor and badly. A story's summary is its first impression, and with a first impression this bad, you're going to get a lot of downvotes.
more chapters please
I hope you keep this story going I absolutely love it ❤
Please continue.
Awesome chapter
love this XD
Good chapter I like dargon story they are not many dargon story out there
Great story, can't wait for the next one.
To quote JonTron, 'I'll take broken English, for a hundred'
Minus the errors it was all in all a great chapter, keep it goin!!
~also I apologize if I offended you with the first sentence
Keep it up your doing really good
More please
Editing plzz
MORE
When are you posting a new chapter
More Now!
I would like to ask if you would still continue this story and if so, when?
Also, props to you. This is quite a good rare concept so keep i up!
This is amazing pls make more this is awesome
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dies becomes ultimate dragon...has slightly bad grammar
great story so far tho
what
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Dude, I love the story! When will it be back?
aw when is it coming back this was good
Boi where be ye chappy 3?
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BOI WHERE BE YE FOOKIN CHAPPY 3 YE COONT?!
Is this story dead
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Hopefully the like will resurrect it!
To quote a certain wizened video game Minion,
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Perfect profile picture.
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Whhhyyyyyyy thhhhhannnk yooooooooouuuu.
Can i have more chapters B0SS?!