Life. Death. Two clearly different things. Reality. Dreams. As different as light and darkness. But how different are they really? Sky Blue, orphaned middle child of the Blue family, needs to know. She's been having the same dream every night. But...
...suddenly, she stops dreaming altogether. She sees the shadow that haunted her for seven years... the shadow of her mother's killer.
Contains spoilers for season 6 finale, LoE, and some headcanons. Thou hast been warned.
Cover art designed by yours truly and RavenTheGhost. but mostly Raven.
PM me for the password... if you're Level 3 or higher, I'll tell you. (200+ Star Points)
(I might add more to the long description later, but the short one has 250 characters in it already.)
Chapters (5)
Obviously, not all the spoilers are in place yet.
That was... interesting? fun? informative! Let us call it informative. My advice on writing slower is that you simply go back and edit it to a slower pace... or do what I do and take a long time to write, but it comes with the advantage of not needing very much editing. I need to change it to a moderate speed, so things actually get done. Until the next chapter!
LoE?
7984795 Legend of Everfree.
Found this story through your post on deadpansnarker's page.
I have a couple of questions about the prologue here.
She kept count? I would have lost count by then.
Wait, the King Timber Wolf knows how to combine these gems? I wasn't aware that Timber Wolves had the kind of intelligence to do that. I think I would establish in some way here that the Rex had a higher intelligence than a regular Timber Wolf. Unless you're trying to say Sombra's son is the one that would combine them, but if that was the case, then the sentence doesn't read as that.
Have the crusaders ever done anything to Sky that would lead her to have this concern, or is she naturally untrusting of others? I don't know about you, but I generally don't have these kinds of thoughts about my friends based off of what other people's friends do to them. This is fine as it is, but this is a thought for you going forward with your narration.
Also, wouldn't Sweetie Belle have something to say about this in response? I can't imagine anyone ignoring that statement.
7994523 Sky was worried that she herself would become evil, not her friends. It's a reference to the fact that her sister worked in the Rainbow Factory. Also, she didn't count, she did the math... 7 x 365 is 2555, but two of those years were leap years, so it's 2557 days.
7994523 Be sure to read the other cheeapters.
Another question to think about.
I only recognized two names in this list, one of them being a boss from Minecraft. From this quote, I can surmise that we're going to have an ensemble of villainous foe for our protagonists to fight against. I would give an adequate description of each so the audience has something to associate with the names, even if they don't know what they were originally in reference to. as it is in your narration, the unfamiliar names mean nothing besides villain.
And I'm not sure what your star points from the author's description are for exactly, but I guess I get one for recognizing one of the references?
Thank you for taking the time to write this story.
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6 Star Points for recognising the Wither Storm. I'll describe the other villains when the heroes meet them.
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There is more than one? I only see one other chapter, unless this is a sequel to something else that I wasn't familiar with? If that was the case, then some of the names and events might be less confusing to me. I was treating this as its own standalone entity.
7994614 (Wait until the other ones come out... I suggest you track the story) Also, Queen Arachne was from Daughter of Discord, the rest were from video games. (The Paradox Myst was from a game I made up)
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Uhh... I thought you were trying to withhold where the references came from to give 'star points' to people for recognizing them.
I only got one of the references; there are still others for people to figure out.
7994625 I only give the points to the first person who gets it... the rest was my bad.
7994625 Also, I didn't say the names of the games.
Before I read this, what is the Dark tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?
8000246 Nightmare spirits... on a scale of 1 to 10... (1 being happy sunshine times and 10 being 50000000000000 Nights at Freddy's, it's about a 7)
Well, Sky will have some stuff to look forward too. Queen Arachne sounds like the Witch Arachne from Soul Eater, but that one might just be me.
I'm interested in seeing the rest of the villains you have assembled. I do wonder why Discord is helping so much.
8021596 Prepare to be pleasantly surprised about Discord... and the villains... and the mountains.
Hello sir and or ma'am. You requested a review for this story in the Reviewer's Café. Unfortunately, ya didnt make it. But don't feel bad. This is a pretty decent story. You'll see the problems I had in the review.
have fun
8056962 I've been trolled.
8056962 I'll get you back with my next cheeapter... trolling you, my guest!
Hi Sky.
Sorry, I've had a lot on my plate but I think I might give this a read.
First off, let me start by saying I love how you've developed Sweetie and the others. Overall, this looks good.
I love it when characters react the same way audiences react to these sorts of things.
'Scoots got some magic phoenix feathers an' stuff.
You aren't related to a certain Miss Pinkie Pie, are you?
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Very, very cryptic and convoluted but good.
I look forward to seeing the contest-winning villains showing up.
Pigasi.
Oh right...Pigs might fly.
Nope, 1006. You were holding the scouter upside-down.
Wow...All the way to third base, just like that?!
Rosebud was her sled.