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King of Madness
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King of Madness
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Thats it? I liked it, but moar
8097635 Sorry, I can only work with what my brain gives me and that's all it gave. Glad you liked it though.
Cute story.
Wish it was longer though.
8103403 Read my previous comment.
I liked it. lots.
but cute and adorable is my opposite xD
great story tho.
8114525 Glad you liked it.
Ok, my thoughts. Honestly, it's good, not a grand sparkling perfection but good. I was about to ask why this wasn't under a sad tag but then, it wasn't completely sad so I digress.
Pros-Fluff feels nature and nice.
-They're in character(although OOC isn't bad for me depending on how it's used)
-The pacing is good.
-The setting is nice
-The ending was sweet enough
Cons-It's... not heartbreaking like I had hoped.
-While what RD did was nice, I felt she should've slowly pushed on(of course, that's just me) and tried to figure it out. Could've been much better.
Of course, these are only my options and it doesn't stop me from liking it so... Yea. Here's a like.
8167037 The reason Rainbow didn't push on the subject of why Fluttershy was sad was because there wasn't really a factor to it. Fluttershy was just in a depressed mood that day. Some days, you just don't feel yourself with no real explanation. Same goes for Rainbow in her flashback. That's why neither could explain it; there was nothing to explain. Does that make sense to you?
Glad you liked the story.
8167485 While I agree with that and it does make sense(and we see RD's reason), Fluttershy is unfortunately a different story. If that had been more noticeable, then it would make more sense. Of course, that's just me.
8167496 What do you mean 'RD's reason'?
And it doesn't really have to make sense. Like I said, there wasn't really a reason. Fluttershy wasn't upset because she had a bad day; she had a bad day because she was upset. When there's no reason, it makes sense for it to not make sense... Did that make sense?
Is this in the same 'verse as Saving the Siren?
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It can be. Considering we only see Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy... Though, I'm probably gonna reference this fic in the sequels, so I'm gonna say yes.
It's a cute little story. Have a like.
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Thank you. Glad you liked it.
I'm not really one for "fluff" pieces. Mainly because I dislike the fact that they're often very one-note.
"Aw, how cute..." Aaaand that's it.
My point is: they're often very shallow. Granted, I can't say that I don't write shallow stuff (albeit, rather than cute, it's just silly).
That said, this story is... pretty much that. It's cute, yes. It's adorable, absolutely...
But it really doesn't have any payoff. Why is Fluttershy sad? Did someone say something mean? Did one of her animal friends die?
I feel if that question was at least answered, I'd say this was more than just a fluff piece... alas, it's just... fine. I felt that sense of "aww" and it went as quicklyas it came.
Bummer.
Also, I noticed a few instances where you ended dialogue with a period rather than a comma. Just an FYI. If you'd like, I'll point them out to you.
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Well, that's the thing. Nothing actually happened to Fluttershy on that day; she simply was feeling down the dumps. There was no instigator, that's just how she felt (Same with RD in the flashback). Sometimes, you just feel down and there's no reason why.
And yes, I'd appreciate that.
8241741 ah, okay. I know that feeling very well. Also...
I think that's an error... and it was the only I found. Thought there was another. Guess I was wrong. Whatever the case, yeah. I could be wrong, but still. I'm gonna point it out just in case!
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I'll fix that error. Thanks.
8241775 You're welcome. By the way, totally off-topic, but I'm futzing around with the idea of another horror story.
Mayhaps I can amend for the Goatman story in your eyes.
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Ooooh, I shiver with antici......pation!
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I promise not to make it torture/suffering porn on the part of the main character. :P if the story works out that is.
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Here's hoping.
Aww, I really liked this. Made me wish I could hug Dash and Shy.
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Glad you enjoyed it.
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This is the kinda story I love. (comedy too) This story is what made me say "I gotta follow this guy"
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Welcome to the Army of Madness.