Searching for inspiration to get back on writing. Trying to find a good mood to write sometimes also..........
Twilight Sparkle is getting ready her date tonight while Spike's staying at home feeling down, again. When she heard from him saying about not having a chance with any girl she can't help but wonder what she feels for her younger bro. Does Spike feel the same way too?
Humanized TwiSpike and other implied shipping One Shot
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This was a much better short story than my first one. Although, it may be because I tend to skim read a lot, but I understood none of that ending. Or maybe I'm not as involved in highschool dating to believe that's a realistic story.
Please there be a sequel after this.
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That's not all
It's supposed to be a reference from Shizuo of Durarara or as I like to call him "Blond guy with sunglasses who throws objects at people"
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Thanks, I've been searching for a good pic that fits well with my Profile name
Word of advice. Get an editor soon. I can tell by your writing that English isn't your first language, and I'm not one to hold that against anyone at all. But a lot of the dialogue could have been written better and needs to be cleaned up for a clearer story.
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I had a feeling one of you would advise me for editing eventually. To be honest I've wrote this a few months back and I've been fixing some parts. If getting an editor meaning hiring somebody then I'll rather just keep learning from my writing mistakes. I was never into paying online and such, just to be safe. I'm glad you ain't complaining about my grammar though.
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No reason to. It's part of the process. Just needs a bit more fine tuning and you'll have quite the tale.
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You don't have to pay for an editor. There are plenty on the site who will do it for free. Just go to the groups section and look for a group dedicated to editing.
I do editing for people's stories all the time if want me to edit this for you.
Sequel?
Incest is wincest 😖
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So do you not care for same sex pairings? Cause every couple in this story was hetero. There's nothing wrong if thats true, but I figured I'd at least ask.
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Don't get me wrong I won't be doing straight shipping all the time.
I do care though. I just wrote which of the male characters are worth to be shipped with or any ship is better than the least shipping. (...FlashLight for example is the least shipping to me that is...) Besides it should count since he's now dating two girls in the end. (I can imagine some lesbo play going on with their boyfriend in bed already)
Please make a sequel to this, I want to know what will happen after this!
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I make no promises, but I'll be sure to keep it in mind my brony friend. You and other TwiSpike shippers beside me that is
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Please Do!!!!!!!
That last sentence. Let me guess. A reference to chicken little?
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You know it
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Yep. Now after reading the bonus christmas chapter, i cant help but wonder what next for spike, twilight, and rarity
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Good luck wondering about it then. For now there's other stories I want to work on so the sequel will just be in my head full of options.
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Good luck then
cute story. But tbh the random ass rape attempt got me shook af, like where tf did that even come from lmao but it was great. Is there any chance of a sequel??
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Doesn't hurt to go dark once in a while. That way I can bring in some badass annihilating scenes
Like I said to other brony folks hoping for sequels. I make no promises but I'll think about it sometime
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Just to clarify I in no way found the dark scene bad. If anything the fact it caught me off guard was refreshing. Shows the story isn't cliche or predictable. And of course I wouldn't want you to force yourself to write just because other people wanted a sequel. I'll just keep myself busy with some of your other works in the meantime
Capitalize the g in God's name.
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... why?
Okay, so that was a bit provocative. But seriously, why? I sincerely hope it's not something like "fix it because it offends my faith", or something? I mean, 'Yahweh' or 'Allah' are proper nouns - no argument there - but 'god' depends entirely on the writer's faith in that context, doesn't it?
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dO iT cAuSe It OfFenDsEs My ReLiGiOn.
Jokes aside I literally don't why I pointed that out. at the Time I thought God's name should always be capitalized. 🤷♂️🤷♂️🤷♂️
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Hey, glad we could discuss this in a civil manner, and without the use of explosives. That's always a bonus! ;D
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:D :D :D