It was supposed to be the perfect day. She had dreamed of this day, sketched it out in everything from napkins to the margins of peace treaty drafts. Now, it was finally happening. The pomp, the circumstance, the elaborate decorations and even more elaborate dresses. She was getting married.
But Princess Rarity has a problem. She's in love with someone. Someone she's been with for years, and had every chance to grow close to. Someone who will be there, watching the most beautiful day of her life unfold.
Someone that she isn't marrying.
Special thanks to ArainMorn for snapping me out of a two-week writing funk with the above image.
Written for the Interwoven Colours contest.
Based on Earthsong9405's AU where Twilight is the bodyguard to a "Princess/Queen Rarity". Prior knowledge of the AU is not necessary.
Ummm i got no idea what happen at the end.
Can you explain?
Holy shit someone else got into this magnificent world.
Someone call Mono.
~Skeeter The Lurker
That was excellent. I still feel the tension that the story stirred within me, waiting to find out whether Rarity would choose heart or country. (The ending leaves things unsure; I say that she chose both.) And though I am not familiar with this setting, the glimpses I saw were enough to make it feel like a grand world. Well done.
8190053 my guess is that the Prince knows about Rarity and Twilight and will either A) Marry Rarity but let her stay with Twilight, or B) Call it off so Rarity and Twilight can be together
i think it going to to be the queen or rairty sister who say stop
Ah, politics. In any world where they don't operate the heavens, princesses' primary role is that of the bargaining chip. But sometimes somekne remembers that theee's a person under all the matrimonial ramifications. If the bride is teally lucky, that someone is her husband.
An excellent emotional roller coaster, swooping up and down with tight precision. Thank you for it.
Um... I'm so scared.
But I love how it was ambiguous. Left to the imagination of the readers.
Bravo with that ending. I really enjoyed your take on the prompt and how even small things like the presence of chapels helped fashion the world.
And describing a dress that actually sounds pretty to me - I mean that part is mostly because I have a huge vendetta against the things.
Aaaaaahhh you meanie, I hate those open endings
Still, extremely cute. Gotta love this universe, wish there was more of it around
What was here chose tell me
What was that at the end there? You hinted at somthing huge amd then just stoped. You bastered.
This also happens back in the past that a war wont happen.If the king want to marry the princess of another kingdom
Excellent, well written!
Well then..... I have no idea what that ending meant at all. Maybe having more info on this AU would help but, just, didn't really feel much as it was, political BS is political BS. Realistic, sure, but damn if it isn't annoying. Though I really have little reason to care about the characters aside from them sharing names with others I do care about. Again, might not need to know the AU to like this, but it would have likely helped.
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Literally all the info from the AU that's even remotely relevant is outlined in the basic sentence 'Twilight Sparkle is Rarity's bodyguard and Rarity is a princess, and also they're in love'. Any more complex information on the setting is designed to be inferred from the content.
The ending suffers very strongly from a combination of me not knowing when to end it and the deadline fast encroaching. Basically, Rutherford wearing Twilight Sparkle's cutie mark in his hair and Twilight's glowing horn is meant to imply they're about to run away from the wedding.
As for your assertion that political bullshit is political bullshit, soup is very commonly known by the name of soup. Not sure what message you're trying to impart with that statement other than 'I hate this because it's a genre I don't enjoy'. Congratulations, you find political stories boring and annoying. That's so helpful and constructive.
8415665 When did I say 'I hate this'? As to the AU, yes all the information needed is there, but what's lacking is a connection to the characters to really care about them beyond the abstract of basic sympathy for the situation they are in. Hence, this might have registered better to me if I had read stuff in the AU and formed that connection, as is, it's just, as said, a political marriage and the whole forcing them into things which yeah, I dislike for being so wrong, even if in practice I understand the reasoning. It's not saying "I hate the story" or even that it is bad, just that it makes me, personally, less invested in things given it seemed to be playing things straight. If the subversion of it and that things weren't going to be gone through with was clearer, I would have enjoyed that a lot more. Really, I was lost at the end and, half thought Twilight was mind controlling Rutherford and was signaling Rarity, that even if it was Rutherford's body, it would be Twilight she was with or something like that.
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Well, the use of terms like bullshit, damn, and annoying certainly don't paint a positive picture of one's perceptions of the plot.
Thanks for sharing your story. I like stories borrowing from this setting and your addition to it was particularly gripping.
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Would you be willing to further explain this? Just a little? Pretty please?
I don't feel I fully understand, and I really want to know.
Are all three of them about to be complicit in reverse-crashing their own wedding?
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Yeah, basically. Rutherford is fully willing to let Rarity be with Twilight and doesn't care who knows it, and his hair-thing is meant as a sort of warning so that Rarity knows what the plan is. In the theoretical second chapter, the two of them would teleport out and participate in chase shenanigans.
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Thanks for the reply. Makes sense.
I enjoyed your take on Prince Rutherford. Real bro, that one.
You really had me going there for a second, because I hate lost love stories like this implied, but then you threw a curveball. You've got my approval for this one.
It took me a little bit to grasp what happened in the last few lines. Clever, well played.
If you should choose to grace the world with a short snippet of the sequel, I would be very glad to read it.
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Is this complete or will there be more added?
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Tentatively complete, and unlikely to be added to unless I get a real hankering to come back to this.
Count me in for wanting to see a second part. I think a pulse pounding chase is exactly the kind of thing you are suited to give us.
Holy wow! Time for some feedback!
My emotions were all over the place with this one. You've done a masterful job weaving everything together to that surprise ending and left me grinning like an idiot. Sorrow and heartache turn to glee and joy with just a few words. The set up was magnificent as well as the execution of that twist. I've poked around Earthsong's AU a bit and have enjoyed the stories for the most part, but your is by far my favorite. I do love how it's ended with the possibility of a sequel, but it's also lovely on its own. This is going into my favorites folder, and honest, at this point I need to make a bookshelf with just your stories as they are all fantastic! Another job well done and another excellent story!
I love it and it was nice i cried a little
AHHHHH A SEQUAL PLEAAAASEEEEEE
You can has review!