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Fluttershy Likes Rainbow Dash

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Fluttershy likes Rainbow Dash, has for a while now. She decides today is the day she is going to ask Rainbow Dash out on a date.

Thank you to my friend for helping me proofread this.

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Lore Horse #1 · Aug 15th, 2018 · 2 · ·

It is pretty good for a first attempt. While I don't really see any spelling issues (I don't know squat about punctuation) the dialogue seems a little stiff and forced. But that is what practice is for, keep writing and you will get better.

Silk Rose #2 · Aug 16th, 2018 · · ·

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Thank you for the feedback. I'm writing my next story currently and I think I'm improving.

MelonPeach8 #3 · Aug 16th, 2018 · · 1 ·

10/10 for the title
Jk lol

LinkAndEpona #4 · Nov 14th, 2018 · · ·

Pretty nice, short and sweet. It’s a bit too simplistic and needs more dialog though

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