When Octavia hears she's related to the apple family she isn't sure she believes it. Even if she is, Octavia worries if she'll be accepted.
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It's an interesting idea, and some of what's here is fun, but it could use a little more fleshing out. The biggest issue to me is why did Octavia start caring? It went from her looking into it simply to be left alone by Pinkie to her genuinely wanting to know and be accepted by them with nothing leading from one to the other. Is it because she never had a large family? Because she was never close to the one she had? Was it just her and her parents?
not the first story I read where octavia was related to the apples but it was the only other one so good job well exicuted
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You have a point. I'll have to think on that next time.
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Actually you're right there should have been a scene transitioning Octavia from brushing the idea off to caring about it. But I'm not sure if I can edit my submission. I was trying to convey Octavia's discomfort when transitioning from high society manners to the Apples way of thinking, You'll notice she never refers to anyone by their first name, until Fiddly accepts her. I should have had her realize that the reason she was brushing the whole thing off was because she didn't want to deal with that transition.
I mean i knew that was the reason but the audience doesn't so as the author of this story allow me to apologize for this oversight. Though small i can see the effect it has on the overall story.