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Jesus, Regi, what a comeback story. It's solidly written, and depressing, but evocative. I'd almost venture that there's a bit of "writing what you know" in here, knowing your situation. It's compelling, if in the manner of watching something awful... you can't look away. Only watch, and wish it was happening differently. It's got quite the moment at the end, too, probably the most compelling moment. I almost think you maybe chickened out at the last moment, adding the last line after the last thing Vinyl said. I don't think that last piece needed to be there, because what was happening was extremely evident. The punch of that final statement is super strong.
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thank you~ I was really concerned about how I wrote the story, that it would be boring and melodramatic.
This is a practice in confessional writing, as transliterated through to colorful horses.
I actually hadn’t thought of it that way. I wanted to be clear, blunt. But thinking upon it, it might be so much more ending on her dialogue. The way it’s written, she gets to escape. I still managed to give her an out.
And perhaps it was too heavy projection there
Hauntingly beautiful story, I actually cried a bit because of how much I related to Vinyl. Seriously, one of the best stories I've read in awhile
This is good, Regi. You did good.
Little scary, but good.
Reg, this is really good! You should be proud of what you've written here
Maybe my, uh, enviroment built up the edge of this story too much, but I didn’t find it that bothersome. Hell, the most shocking elements of the story are used for a character driven purpose, and play into the narrative as a whole.
Overall, I really liked it. I feel it delivers a solid punch, and I only wish we could’ve gotten a bigger glimpse into Vinyl’s history of substance abuse, as well as her relationship with Octavia, if only to get a better sense of the scope of this spiral of self-abuse and neglect.
Good story, Regi. Give yourself a headpat from me.
My god, how is this even...you know what?
CRAAAAAAAAAWWLING INNNNN MY SKIIIIIIIIN!
Powerful.
I love this. Powerful, emotional, evocative. I want to hug Vinyl. I want to hug you.