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This is interesting. But I am really wondering tho, or at least I am really REALLY hoping.... That Spike doesn't become a secondary or background character. I mean Spike could already be feeling a way that Twilight, his oldest friend, didn't confide in him about her lost love but now it seems that she is going to faze him out for whoever is willing to rut out to her. I am a Spike fanboy so that could be my thing but I just think he should have a hella of alot of say who get to live in HIS home, I mean he is the one who has to take care of it and keep it running and has been this whole time while Twilight gets to do whatever she wants. I think it would be interesting if Trixie try to get to Twilight while Pinkie try to get to Spike. But I just hope it doesn't became he isn't even thought of as a core resident and member of the castle because if it goes that way I would think Spike should just go. Hell go dig up a fortune and just leave it isn't like he doesn't know how to take care of himself. I just also thought of this, what Twilight is doing is really fucked up. She isn't looking for a made but a on call mare to please her whenever she want. Hell when it gets out around town as well what do you think it will do to her rep. The princess in their town is looking to whore out a mare. That is a abuse of power and the town pony will not be happy to be treated like that I am pretty sure.

Why is there an epilogue already?

But, isn't Rarity the pony with an "endless supply" of gems?

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Eh, maybe they're equal. Rarity doesn't need a maid, though.:raritystarry:

Okay, so Twilight's lost her mind from heartbreak (poor thing), and Pinkie and trixie will have to compete for her affections. Also, Mrs. Cake is some kind of evil bitch. That about sum it up?

why are a lot of maid stories about sex i mean their could be one about a enemy hiding in plan sight

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There actually are some on here that are about an enemy hiding in plain sight. Those stories are ALSO about sex.

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....what doesnt have sex these days

Or is she?

So Twilight really is an Egg-headed Succubus!!!

Which makes Spike the normal one out of the crazy mares?

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Spike is normal because he is a guy.

"Aww, darn! Don't tell me Twilight's opening has already been filled!"

Nah, don’t worry. They’ve only kissed.

K well this seem to be mainly focused on Twilight. Not that it is a bad thing I just wanted to know what I would be getting into. I think more than her relationship I am more interested in just the drastic change in her personality. I mean it is a huge shift. She really REALLY think normal folk CAN'T imagine that some ruler who popped up out of nowhere is now making demands of the mare in the village, even more so when countless ones can state that it did indeed happen? She for some reason is far FAR too quickly in being so wrapped up in her own feelings that she is missing the huge blinking light in the room. If she hasn't contacted not just you but ANYONE don't you think SOMETHING could be wrong since Twilight knowing Starlight does she really think she wouldn't at least let them know she got there safely. Hell she could very well be dead but Twilight is so wrapped up in her own feelings she isn't thinking of anyone else but herself. I think she shouldn't be in a relationship right now since she can't pull her own head out of her flank. This change is showing a much darker side of Twilight and if she isn't put in check by SOMEONE I think it will only get worse and worse. I do have to wonder if she is going to at least consider ANYTHING Spike says or just keep dismissing him as background noise, but she always does that and he just sit there and take it, something I honestly dislike about him lol. At least Trixie respect Spike alittle unlike his supposed best friend.

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>I just wanted to know what I would be getting into.
There will be multiple developments throughout the story arc. As it progresses, I will be adding kink tags for sex scenes in the long description to warn people of what they're going into.

So Spike knew Trixie and kept that to himself?!?!!!?!!

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"Yep, for that castle of her's.

"hers" is already possessive. Never write "her's"

Okay, so 1 prologue and 2 chapters in and it's already a crazy ride. Let's see where this takes me and how far I'm willing to go without brakes or a seat belt.

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Damn it, you're right. I completely forgot.

So Twi is essentialy a pony version of Anna from shimoneta? Do i jave the right idead please say yes if theres a love nectar in the cookies scene ill laugh so fucking hard

This is interesting. With Twilight now knowing of their plan she will now be far worse with her actions and thinking for sure. I did have to scream at my screen tho with Spike. I mean he seem to be the only one to have any common sense and see there is more going on and it shouldn't be dismissed. ..... BUT than he does around and does just that why..... who knows he gets all the way to the point and just stop because.... he was tired? It is a mystery and now because he didn't contact Celestia, try to talk to ANYONE who could help this situation, and just not roll over and show his belly any bad thing that happens now he is partly to blame. Twilight could damage her reputation even more than she already have. And a friend could be in serious trouble and not getting help because he pussed out. Which if Light IS hurt how does he think Twilight is going to take it then if her just thinking she was left, which they weren't even dating this is all from a ONE SIDED LOVE!!!! Honestly Twilight need some mental help and not to be encouraged and enabled by all those around her.

And then they fucked.

The End.

Spike must be in panic mode if things got worse.

WTF KIND OF ASS BACKWARDS FLIP FLOPPED EQUESTRIA IS THIS SET IN

There will be more right?

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:applejackunsure: Sorry...

This one kinda requires a certain mind set that I haven't felt for quite some time. I haven't forgotten about it, though. At the same time, I can't guarantee when I'll actually update this story.

K thanks for the info.

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I hope this one does get an update because I'm enjoying it.

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