(Sequel to "I met Kindness", read it here: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/38530/I-Met-Kindness)
Flare here my friends. This is the next part of my story, here I will tell you how I discovered my purpose in life.
After a month of my arrival in Ponyville, I would meet Fluttershy: the mare I'd share the next stages in my life; and after some hard time, she accepted me.
It wouldn't be long until an event put our lives at risk, and an incident changed our lifes. An incident where I was at risk of losing everything I loved.
Gather round, I shall tell you how I found my real purpose in life, after thinking with my Heart and Sword.
Please critique, comment, and rate properly!
Chapters (13)
Only problem I found here was you use terms like "Upstairs" and "Downstairs" That's a mistake since it would be much more clear and detailed if you said exactly where those places are.
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I just fixed that, maybe it will be more convincing this time.
It was ironic, the same place were my life started, would be the place where my life could end.
When I first read that I was like "OH HELLS NAW HE CAN'T DIE" then I noticed the could and sighed.
Wow. Already, there's some significant improvements in your fics! The whole thing was much more understandable, just be sure to put the proper punctuation mark after every sentence of speech. Other than that, I DEFINITELY like what I'm seeing!
Just throwin' this out there; your action scenes actually flow surprisingly well! Nice job.
Aha! Finally, the kiss!
Meh...
I rather liked it; Fluttershy has always been my favorite!
You remember me, yes?
I favorited "I Met Kindness" awhile back and forgot to check for a sequel. I found a sequel
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I do remember, thanks for that! Though I just checked and your favorite was gone, maybe because you favorited it before I revoked the submission.
Great that you like this one too! And for the record, I got another few released following this series, if you feel like it, check them out!
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I will!
Eventually...
I just finished reading this in 1 sitting at 3:30 am.
Another good story.
NEXT!