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When her 'brother's wedding day comes, she thinks of nothing but that it will be a drag. But when Twilight discovers that her mother is undercover, Twilight is happy, knowing that maybe the wedding won't be as bad as she expected.
Applejack couldn't help but notice that Twilight has been acting weird all the time. Will Twilight be able to keep up her cover or will everypony discover the truth before she and her mother can begin their plan to attack Canterlot?
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Great chapter
You mean B.B.B.F.F Big Brother Best Friend Forever. you left one B behind. And cool Shinning Armor will be Twilight's step dad :P
9868092
I'm sorry. I already corrected
9868102
Looks like you missed an error, tho
9868238
Thank you for pointing. I haven't seen it
Not bad, very interested to see some more
The idea is great, let´s see how it will turn out.
Its an interesting concept. I personally feel the chapter is a little clunky in how it reads. Try reading it out loud to find any where that doesn’t flow smoothly. Then try reworking the section till its smooth.
you're auto correct is correcting Cadence to 'Candace'.
9868905
I'm sorry. I already corrected
Well it’s off to a very good start!
9868919
Eh? Oh i was just informing you that your auto-correct might need some adjusting. nothing to apologize for really. and I do mean Every reference to cadence has been changed to 'candace'.
I'm kind of sad at Twilight actually hates Cadence.
Interesting to see AJ being the one that's going to investigate what's going on
So Applejack will act as Twilight did in the show. LOL so Applejack will be the hero. But where is the REAL Twilight? Was there ever a REAL Twilight?
9869217
Twilight is a Changling in this story. She was never a pony in this story. She was undercover all the time to spy on the ponies to get information for the changelings and her mother to attack Equestria.
FIRST
SECOND
9869230
Nice, I like this story.
I think you mean really "soon" not really "feel."
9869762
I corrected
So same Canterlot wedding with evil Twilight and Applejack in Twilight's place. O.k. then.
I want more flashbacks!
Oh, that's not good
Poor AJ, it's sad to see her heartbroken
I hope it won't be a cliche and no matter what Changelings will loose invasion
I hope that they will actually succeed
good development on Aj and the real Cadance but i gotta say "Really the rest of the chapter is the song 'This Day Aria' clever subversion" then i just laughed i look forward to your next chapter.
I love the role switch though
I wonder if things will still end the same as in the show but Twilight is on the villain's side.
so far things seem to be playing out similarly.
it’d be interesting to see if Twilight eventually comes to regret her choices.
What would have been nice is it Twilight was behind Chrysalis as she sang.
I'm going to be honest.. this needs work. There are a lot of grammatical errors, and the whole show-not-tell idea was just.. not there.
It is such a great story idea, but I can't really enjoy it from all the errors.
I advise a reread, and perhaps consider getting an editor. Someone to help you really enhance the storyline.
This has a lot of potential. I am not kidding. Just.. work through this, and see how you can make it better.
cool
The shocking truth has been revealed!
lol Shiny going to be his "sister's" daddy heehee
Why would the element of magic choose her if she was a fake and evil being??
She’s betraying her adopted family, her closest friends, and her mentor
There's no way that after all she’s been through with all of them she doesn’t feel even a little bit sad.
9869769
Has the next chapter appeared yet?.
9872703
No. The next chapter has not been published yet. But don't worry. I'm writing him
9872770
Ok, and can you let me know when are you going to write alternative ending based on Canterlot wedding Alternative ending by HiroUltimate?.
9872781
I'll send you the link by PM, ok?
9872809
Ok understood, and you must credit HiroUltimate for Canterlot wedding Alternative ending.
9872823
ok
Well this is an interesting story, I look forward to seeing how this turns out
. Also wouldn't it be interesting if Twilight wasn't the element of magic but that she forced it to work for her? I'm not sure how that would work, but that i think would be interesting
loving this story heehee
I hope that doesn't come true....
hopefully Twilight wouldn’t let that happen.
Yeah the bad guys won!!!! Me happy
*blink*
From an epic fight to a shocking reunion, this chapter had it all
i like this story or any story where twilight is changeling,
why do I want a story where twilight is changeling daughter of the queen who left the hive casue she want to work with pony somehow end up as the princess student hide her changeling nature, till the royal wedding
Like all your stories, this is a great idea! You come up with some solid topics.
The main thing I noticed that could use some work is the dialogue. Or, rather, not the actual talking, but how you deliver who's saying it. Take this quote, for instance.
This has the potential to be a really strong moment. Perhaps consider changing all the 'Twilight Sparkle's' to an occasional 'she' or 'the mare.' Even a much more simple 'Twilight' would do. This would help show that you're comfortable using the character, and would definitely boost the 'show don't tell' factor.
Just an idea. Overall, I did enjoy reading this very much! Upvote from me.