Princess Celestia has spent 1000 years waiting for Luna's return. During the years Celestia has changed. She became depressed and sank into guilt over what she had done to her younger sister. Now that she is back she will do her best to fix things....except....Luna is different. Sure her coat is a bit different and she looks a bit younger than she was before but it's the way she acts and reacts that's so...unsettling for the older Princess. It's almost like she's a new mare.
Meanwhile, Luna is left to explore a new world while doing her best to avoid her sister and her overbearing nature, while also trying to find happiness again after someone dear was taken from her.
And then there is Twilight Sparkle, she got unintentionally dragged into the whole mess and then dragged herself even further by accident. Now she has to deal with a sad overprotective desperate version of her mentor AND a living mystery of an Alicorn who might be the definition of opportunistic and selfish....for the most part.
Why isn’t there a Mane Six tag?
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Probably not the main characters, or atleast not as much as the 4 current character tags. However is this an alternate universe? Or is this something to fill in the blanks for season 1 episode 1 and 2 between Celestia and Luna?
The mane 6 are not the main characters yes. As for this being an alternate universe? Also a yes. The past between Celestia and Luna is different and so shall be the future.
So that's why there isn't a main 6 tag, now it all adds up. Hmmm.
I think the Chrysalis tag is also new, don't remember that being there.
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It is.
Your story's idea is pretty good, I just think that it could use a little more editing. you've got some grammatical errors, mostly Capitalization and punctuation. You should read Ezn's writing guide.
Handling dangerous, aggressive creatures that feel wounded or vulnerable requires a sensitive approach.
It is better to treat them like a wounded bear. You need to make sure that they never feel cornered or trapped. Keep your distance and make sure they don't feel like you're forcing her to do anything. Make sure they have a dark, safe place to retreat to, with plenty of fruit and berries.
It seems to me that Twilight entering the cave so boldly could easily provoke a battle.
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Not quite battle per say, but I can say that she will not regret her action
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Sorry, but I didn’t quite understand what you said. Did they mean that “she will regret her action” or “she will not regret her action”?
that is, if the second option, then it turns out that “running thoughtlessly forward into the gap and not thinking about the consequences is a good principle of action”?
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The final result will be good, but the process to get the result will have a close encounter with death. Twilight is by all means, considered an enemy by Luna at the moment.
bro we need another chapter
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I will provide one soon.
we're still waiting 😰😰
An interesting development, but it seems to me that Luna believed Twilight too quickly. At least if I were Luna, I wouldn’t consider the apology sincere and would give a lecture about how a destroyed stone doesn’t care about apologies and won’t recover from the words “I’m sorry.”
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Luna does not accept the apology. Not yet at least. She's an opportunistic pony and Twilight is distraught enough to give up on pleading or defending her life. Luna would consider herself a fool if she didn't use that.
Seek the signs of Luna's lack of trust in the chapter.
Well this is ridiculous, how was Twilight supposed to know!? "Oh yeah, I awaken the elements and so I totally meant to kill Nightmare Moon on purpose."
I already hate this version of Luna.
Also you made the acting of Twilight spot on, the way she just immediately accepts to becoming her loyal servant just to make up for a mistake that she didn't even mean to cause is something she would probably end up doing in the show as well if the events that lead up to this situation happened.
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Thank you! Twilight was the character I was worried about not getting right the most so this means a lot to me!
As for Luna, you'll either love or hate her across this story. She is troubled yes, but she'll do inexcusable things. But for this instance, you have to remember that she is talking with one of the killers of her closest companion (if not even more) less than 3 hours after the murder.
I can only hear the song
funny first meeting. It’s interesting that Luna, in addition to the name Cadence, noted that the cutie mark corresponds to the crystal heart, provided that a lot of time still has to pass before the appearance of the Crystal Empire?
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We're still a good way before the crystal empire. Technically this is still within the first 2 episodes considering Luna wasn't revealed to the public yet.
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Of course, we are far from the Crystal Empire, but Luna and Celestia were directly there when she disappeared. I think that the fact that someone has the main artifact of a country that technically has not existed for more than 1000 years drawn on their side should raise questions.
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We shall see
I don't think Celestia knew this, is she not going to point this out?
Also Luna is really rude to Twilight in this chapter.
This is practically Celestia's fault as well, if Celestia just told the entire story of Nightmare Moon to Twilight and about the elements of harmony and who represents the elements of harmony, this could have been avoided, Twilight may have "killed" Nightmare Moon but Celestia is practically the mastermind behind it.
And it's also Luna's fault that Nightmare Moon is gone, maybe don't make a dramatic and scary entrance to the public claiming your going to cause eternal night? You sicko.
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All the issues (except Luna being rude) can be summarized to: Things didn't go according to the plan.
Atleast Luna acknowledged that it was mostly Celestia's fault that Nightmare Moon is gone and not Twilight or the other bearer's.
It's kinda stupid to blame Twilight since she was manipulated by Celestia to make friends and to use those friends to get the elements, that's what the Celestia's goal in the show was, I'm not entirely sure here though. Things seem to be different since Celestia was not banished, we also don't know what fully happened before the Summer Sun Celebration so I just been assuming that everything that happened in episode 1 season 1 has happened.
Ok now see this, she shouldn't be thinking like this, it's really annoying how she keeps blaming herself and how Luna is also blaming her.
What else was she supposed to do when someone just got unbanished after 1000 years and they declare eternal night and start attacking you and your friends? Was she supposed to run and let it happen?
I'm a little more upset at Celestia than Luna at the moment since Luna basically described since the beginning that Luna and Nightmare Moon are one in the same.
Wow this gets worst.
Ok now I'm more upset, I seriously doubt I could get any more upset right now, in fact I'm so upset I don't even know how to express how angry I am right now.
At this point, Twilight is going to die by the age of 30 because of overstressing herself, that is if she doesn't become an Alicorn but because of her separation of her friends I doubt that will happen.... Which also just reminded me that Equestria might be doomed when Tyrek attacks.
Well if she did that then she would be a hypocrite and a piece of [REDACTED] considering that she was the only who was basically the mastermind behind the entire thing.
And Twilight is going to be killing herself on the inside, probably.
Which is actually kinda funny when you acknowledge the double meaning.
Ya I'm a little upset, that might be an understatement.
I'm hoping that Luna and Twilight will get along in the future, atleast if Luna forgives Celestia then she will no doubt forgive Twilight. The quastion is though, when will Luna forgive Celestia? 100 years can go by in a blink of an eye for an immortal.
I feel as thought Luna should connect with Spike in some way.
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She is fond of dragons, so she might.
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The way Luna and Twilight feel about well Twilight can be explained easily. Both of them have no idea that it was Celestia’s plan. Luna more or less thinks that Celestia gave up out of guilt. She blames Celestia because she left the elements there, she did nothing to protect her kingdom and forced others to act for her, and Twilight was indeed manipulated into discovering the elements on her own and using them.
Neither knew that it was supposed to happen but even then, Celestia’s actual plan did not happen, she did not expect Nightmare Moon to encounter the elements so early.
As for Twilight and Luna? They will warm up to each other eventually. Currently, Luna doesn't like her but doesn't hate her. Especially because she is showing remorse, unlike Celestia.
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For Twilight's situation, it can easily be explained as "I tripped on a rock while holding a knife and stabbed someone," that's basically what happened. The rock was Celestia, the knife was the elements, and the someone was Nightmare Moon.
I can't explain Celestia's situation, but if Luna and Twilight don't know that Celestia manipulated Twilight to use the elements then I wonder when they will know, or if they will know.
But if Luna does get warmed up to Twilight then I will gladly keep reading.
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Pretty much yeah. Also hope you enjoy your read!