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Omegathyst
Female Writer, Bisexual Writer, Smolder X Mare Crackship Connoisseur. Creator of the Smolderverse, and writer of many other kinds of clop and SFW stories (Commissions temporarily OPEN)
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You need at least 2k to address everything in your synopsis at minimum. Otherwise you are just going too fast.
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I thought this was pretty good. The clop was good enough, if a little fast, but what really interested me is the world-building. That sexy, sexy world-building. Would love a sequel.
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-Fun how helpful and excited Autumn is.
-Only real complaint is that it's too short, which robs the story of the time it needs to develop and dwell in the details.
-Could use more length and depth -- no, not that kind!
-Virgin Chrysalis is a new take I haven't seen before.
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To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 78/100
Allure: 68/100
Enticement: 85/100
Immersion: 80/100
Prose Quality: 92/100
Total Score: 400/500
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