“No matter what, we face it together!”
These were the last words heard by the army of creatures as they approached the hilltop, determined in that moment to save the princess and bearers of harmony above all else.
But they were too late.
Thus, Equestria grieves.
Been reading this back and forth and I'm not sure what was the causes of death.
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Have you seen the season nine two parter? Perhaps I should put a spoiler warning up.
Edit: thank you for bringing attention to the scene regardless. I found an error as a result. If you want an explanation I can quote, but if you don’t want spoilers I’ll leave it be.
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Ah that part, sort of skipped over it.
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No problem. Thanks again for bringing it up.
Truly wonderful work on this. Shedding liquid sadness here,
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Aw, thank you so much. Really glad this seems to have turned out ok
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You're welcome.
Dang... that was a heck of a story.
One more thing: do you the artist of the picture you used or where you found it? Just asking
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I got it from google images. It was the cover photo for a youtube video. If you hover over the cover art, there is a source button. That will take you to the source of the picture. Most stories should have this function.
I’m not sure how to interpret your reaction to the story, but I’m glad for the comment.
You were actually close. I only notice one mistake.
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Fixed, thanks.
"We weren't fast enough. DAMN IT! WE WEREN'T FAST ENOUGH!!"
To the fallen heros
BULLSHIT! Is saving Equestria not payback enough?
Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo not Twilight, not the Mane 5, not Spike. Great story but just oh poor Discord how will he live with himself?
I can't even imagine how Sunset and the EQG main 6 react
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Thank you. To be honest, I think it could've been better if I decided to dedicate a chapter to each character and took a more nuanced look at them. You raise good points regarding starlight and discord. I suppose it depends on someone's view of starlight, but I can see where you're coming from.
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I feel like I should have made this a multi-chapter story to include my above point and yours here. I'll think outside the box more for the future for sure though. Thank you.
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What is your view on Starlight?
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Honestly, she's one of my favourite characters. I really liked her as a villain, and I really like her as a protagonist. Her development was a little slow initially, but I liked her a lot from the end of season 6 onwards especially. I wrote what I thought she might think in this story, but I probably overdid it. Character personality and growth has always been a weak point for me.
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I'd like to ask you. WHAT character development? Was she punished? Did she have to WORK for her REDEMPTION? If you want I can link you to a couple of videos by Lily Orchard, he, yes, HE does pretty good job saying facts. Specifically about redemption. And Starlight and Sunset in comparioson, why Sunset had redemption, and Starlight hadn't.
(In the aftermath of the events of the story, after the Remembrance of the Seven Heroes)
Luna: Twilight was great student, Tia. And a close friend. I can’t believe she and her friends suffered through it all!
Discord: I can’t believe it either! I was going to marry Fluttershy, and now that’s she’s gone…WHAT WILL BECOME OF ME?!?!?! (Sobs) Oh, Fluttershy! Why? WHY?!
Celestia: She was so close…(crying) so close!!! Why is the world always out to get me?!
Luna: (Bows her head down sadly) I guess we’ll have to keep ruling Equestria for many more years to come! So much for our retirement.
Celestia: (Doesn’t do anything. Instead, she just nods)
Discord: But, now what? I mean…is Equestria safe now? Is this the end of Harmony?
Celestia: GET OUT, BOTH OF YOU! JUST GET OUT AND LET ME GRIEVE!!! (Sobs)
Luna: Come on, Discord. Let’s tell the news. Celestia needs some time alone. (Discord nods and they both leave together)
Celestia: (waits until the two have left. Then, looks down and cries) I could have gained a new successor to take my sister and my place someday, but instead… I just lost a student, and a fellow princess of Friendship. Goodbye, Twilight Sparkle, and your friends. All of your heroic deeds for Equestria will never be forgotten. (Walks off sadly out of the castle, not wanting to look out the window once)
For me, perfect ending
Look like his test and his plan was all in vain
Welp, their goes my happiness quota for the day, good thing I’m reading this at 10:17pm at night, it means I will not have to wait long for another happiness quota
How dare you! How dare you! How dare you make me feel the feels!
Great story. Beautiful wordsmithing. A minimal use of words that has so much description and so full of emotion.